need critics <C.C.>

[Renevatia]

need to check before i switch to higher res..
so ya..heres the 'lower' res version of the file (i never post full res, for obvious reasons)

i need checks on proportion, and suggestions in general

btw, no, i am NOT changing the pose even though its kinda boring

so anway, FFR, constructively crit away ;D




('you suck' , isnt constructive enough of a criticism for my computer screen/brain to process, so I will ignore them :/ )
wip for C.C. from code geass

whats happening__
C.C. is trying to tie her hair with ribbon-->bow
its kinda blurry there...


do not color, finish, lineart, vector.
if you want to use it somewhere...ask me..and i will consider ;o

but its a WIP still

well anyway..

WIP TWO!



yes, sectioning, yes 1680x1050screen, yes its too small..need MOAR! :/



finished, not gonna touch it any more, i am tired of zoom in zoom out zoom in zoom out x10000times :/

soft cell shade/paint style ish thing w.e.

but i liked how the lineart turned out , vs all my other crappy linearts ;o

no more high(5mb +jpg save file) res pics..



http://renevatia.deviantart.com/art/CC-zoom-100803372(dont wanna page stretch this much -.-)

lol..wallpaper-able ;o

[Tokzic]

The arms are really strange looking and look extremely fragile in comparison to the rest of her body. Also, you can't quite tell what she's doing with her hands - is she stroking her hair?

The shading is very inconsistant throughout - for example, the shading on her one leg shouldn't be fragmented the way it is, and the skirt's shadows are pretty flawed. I also wouldn't have used the same shading on the hair as I would have on everything else, it makes it seem less natural.

[Renevatia]

erm..the nub cross hatch is only for future ref xD
hmm..arms..will do

[Renevatia]

i was expecting ffr to be a 'tad' bit more responsive to stuff that doesn't involve the word 'free' :/

[dean_machine]

It seems to me like there is too much shading on the legs, but I'm not good at this sort of thing, so I don't know what you should do for shading them.

[who_cares973]

other than some small shading inconsistencies it looks good



also pretty much what tokzic said about the arms and her action

i like the pose btw xD

[Renevatia]

i dont even know how to describe how big the sections were

lets say appx 15000x7000px ? rofl..go figure..

[Musiks]

Originally Posted by Tokzic

The arms are really strange looking and look extremely fragile in comparison to the rest of her body. Also, you can't quite tell what she's doing with her hands - is she stroking her hair?

The shading is very inconsistant throughout - for example, the shading on her one leg shouldn't be fragmented the way it is, and the skirt's shadows are pretty flawed. I also wouldn't have used the same shading on the hair as I would have on everything else, it makes it seem less natural.

Yes. And the shadows don't look realistic at all.

[dean_machine]

I'm liking how the picture is turning out.

[Mahjix]

I have attached an image with some notes on things I felt were off. In addition to the notes about the face, the mouth is in the wrong place. The space between your nose and mouth is not greater than the space between your mouth and your chin. I think if you move her mouth up to fix that she would look a lot prettier. The shading is good but it is inconsistent in some areas such as her arms, in particular. Looking at her legs and face, she has little to no shading on her arms whatsoever.

Her right arm looks really weird for some odd reason and it may just be the position it's in but I think if her arm was more "in" like her left arm then it would look more graceful giving her a more linear look. Oh, her arms also appear to be very long.

[funmonkey54]

Originally Posted by Mahjix

I have attached an image with some notes on things I felt were off. In addition to the notes about the face, the mouth is in the wrong place. The space between your nose and mouth is not greater than the space between your mouth and your chin. I think if you move her mouth up to fix that she would look a lot prettier. The shading is good but it is inconsistent in some areas such as her arms, in particular. Looking at her legs and face, she has little to no shading on her arms whatsoever.

Her right arm looks really weird for some odd reason and it may just be the position it's in but I think if her arm was more "in" like her left arm then it would look more graceful giving her a more linear look. Oh, her arms also appear to be very long.

This really wraps it all up perfectly!
Also, her boobs do look saggy. They need to be less saggy and more perky.
Also, make the shadow look slightly more like her.

[Renevatia]

Originally Posted by Mahjix

I have attached an image with some notes on things I felt were off. In addition to the notes about the face, the mouth is in the wrong place. The space between your nose and mouth is not greater than the space between your mouth and your chin. I think if you move her mouth up to fix that she would look a lot prettier. The shading is good but it is inconsistent in some areas such as her arms, in particular. Looking at her legs and face, she has little to no shading on her arms whatsoever.

Her right arm looks really weird for some odd reason and it may just be the position it's in but I think if her arm was more "in" like her left arm then it would look more graceful giving her a more linear look. Oh, her arms also appear to be very long.

lol ya, i was thinking about fixing the shoe, but at that point i was half conscious, and about the arm, i did that relative to the waistline i think i just need to make the shoulder bigger?..btw the boob part, rofl, i guess i made the vest a bit too loose haha ..hmm still thinking about the mouth/angle of the face aiming down(or trying to aim down) ..ya..forgot to enhance the shade line on the arms.. ;D

[Mahjix]

I hope everything turns out well! :}

[Renevatia]

Originally Posted by Mahjix

I hope everything turns out well! :}

rofl, i am done working on this one, I don't like looking back at old drawings, but drawing new ones and improve ;D