Flasion

[sente3]

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Ending is good, cant wait to see what they do in the village.

[aperson]

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Why the fuck am I involved in this.

[MalReynolds]

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Why the fuck am I involved in this.

Could it be because you're one of the more recognized posters on this site? Three options:

1: Continue to complain about it.
2: Realize that you're so above the FFRForums that it's embarassing to be associated with it, and thusly leave.
3: Get over it and find it amusing that a new user thought highly enough of you to be included in one of his stories.

Mal

[Lightknight924]

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Thank you mal,

Chapter 3
The Mountain And The Rocks




The wind blew on general Tps's face as he pushed his way past the great large rocks of the mountain. He hadn't climbed the mountain yet and was still at the bottom. If what Aperson sai was true then the DarkSpooky's would be hidden in the summit of MountRidder. He grabbed onto a rock and pulled up onto a ledge. Walked up another steep rocky path. He grunted as he climbed higher amongst the mountain.
Then later when he could finally see the summit, he jumped up onto a cliff ledge and pulled up onto it. Placed his foot on a ledge and pushed off of that. Crackle crackle, he paused. Craaaack! The ledge collapsed and fell and took him with it. Falling he knew that he failed the emperor. He failed Tassakin. Most of all, he failed himself. The rocks drew closer, he shut his eyes, and waited for it to happen.
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"Captain, it is late and the men and I are very tired. May we rest please?" A young soldier pleaded.

"There will be no resting untill dawn. Tassakins spy at night." the captain replied.

The army marched upon the plains of Guido. They were on they're way to the emperress city of Jurs. They had a message from the forest of newabies.

*The army is from Jurkai and Jurs is the Emperess. Jurkai= other country than Tassakin.

[Moogy]

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1. This is the lamest thing ever
B. If I'm in it I'm suing you
3. If I'm in it I'll get LD to ban you
D. I really will

[Lightknight924]

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Moogy, I highly doubt that LD would ban me if I put you in it.

1. the majority of voters said Yes to the voting on the idea.
2. What if your an honorable soldier huh?
3. What's your problem, you are reacting as if this is so serious. It's supposed to be fun and a little bit funny along with the epical scheme. The main part is the fact that so many of you are in it.

[MalReynolds]

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Yes, it is an outrage to be included in an online story! Especially when I'm posting on the forums for an online game! Boo! Boo!

Moogy, the only possible way you could sue him is if your real name is included. You don't have the trademerk on "Moogy," dude. Just lighten up a little. It's all good fun.

Mal

[Lightknight924]

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Chapter 4
The Battle Of PumblePlains




The stars shined brightly through the clear cold night. Emperess Jurs stood upon her balcony starring at her kingdom and how it rested. She sighed and turned away to walk in the Palace through the curtain into her room. The red curtain swished as she walked through it and lay on her bed. She close her eyes, let out another sigh, and went to sleep.
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"Anyword on the general?" asked Emperor Tasselfoot.

"No, unfortuanatly, he dissapeard on MountRidder." replied Sente, Mayor of Esupik.

"What!??, impossible, tps is my finest general."

"I am aware of that my lord." replied Sente.

"Go back to Esupik Sente. Better yet, come with me to search for him. I am sure the Chardirans have something to do with this." demanded the emperor.

"Yes, my lord. If that is what you wish."

"Come now, gather your belongings. If Tps is pronounced dead. then you shall be my new general." said the emperor.

Sente bowed and left back to Esupik. Tass got up from his throne. Summoned 12 of his guards and left for the northern town of Mooga. Where his cousin Moogalius Charr lived with his brother. Tass left his palace and walked through the town that surrounded it.

"Emperor coming through. Get out of the way!! The Emperor Tasselfoot is coming through!!" said a soldier ordering the peasants and people of the town.

The emperor walked down the streets to an escort waiting next to sente. They both hopped on their Walarks and ran off. The dust blew past them both along with the guards on their Walarks and they ran through the PumblePlains.
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"He is awake."

"Hello, young one"

I saw five figures starring down at me all in a blur. Each a diffrent animal. I sat up, blinked twice, and spoke:

"Where, where a-am I?"

"Flasion"

"Where?"

"He held a map that looked like this:



"Who .....are you?"

"We are the Dancians, followers of the great god Mal." replied the cat that tackled him.

"Why are we in the vines,who is Mal?

"Mal, our founder of Reynoldwood. He created the lake of Morphing." replied a bear.

"Lake of Morphing? Is that how that.......never mind."

I got out of bed and looked outside into the night. It was clear, cluttered with bright stars. I sighed.

"You should rest-hoo!" hooted an owl.

I followed a fox to a large cut in a tree. I laid down on a pile of wool, closed my eyes, and fell asleep.
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Jurs dreamed of a cute cuddly care bear.

The city of Jurs slept. A merchant packs up his street shop stand and walks down the street alone in the dark. He walks past a few blocks and around a corner. Suddenly, a hand snatches him from a dark allyway. As a dark shadowed whooshed from the ally and ran through the streets. Ran to the palace gates. It was heavily guarded. The figure rany into the nearby bushes. Snuck his way swiftly to the side of the Palace wall covered in vines leading up to the balcony from which the empress Jurs stood from gazing upon her kingdom. Then the figure climbed up the palace wall and flipped into Jurs room. Jurs slept peacefully in her bed. Pulling out a knife in the shape of a hook with a dragon perched on it. He walked towards the bed when the door whooshed opened. The figure fled behind the red curtain.

"Empress, I......oh, your asleep." said the chef looking around the clear room.

"Oh, you left the balcony door open. Shame, you'll get yourself sick now empress." the chef whispered.

The chef walked towards the curtain, reached his arm out, and shut it tight. Then he left the room and shut the door. Jurs twitched to the sound.

The figure crept from behind the curtain. A strong wind blew awakening Jurs from her sleep.

"AHHHH!!!!!!"
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|THE EMPERESS HAS BEEN ASSASINATED|
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Last night the empress was pronounced dead after the assanination believed to be done by the Emperor Tasselfoot. Although there is no physical proof of the crime, messages from our spies in Tassakin spoke of a "Plan of commencing" Immediate war has broken out against Tassakin for the suspicion of the murder. Recruiting soldiers into the army of the new Emperor of Jurkai Chardishik Lakifar. Now renaming this kingdom Chardiran. Chardish was Jurs assistant manager. May his rulings be blessed.

*Immediate draft will began on Karfa 9th, 342592.*

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"What shall we do my lord?" asked Eyoshi.

"Attack, the plains of Pumble." demanded the emperor.

"When shall we attack my lord Chardish." said soldier Eyoshi.

"Eyoshi, as my bravest soldier, you make a great leader. Therefore, I promote you to general of my new army. May you fight for me with victory." demanded Chardish.

"Yes, my lord."

"What will you have me do my lord?" asked general Eyoshi.

"Bread an army of 5,000 Chardirans. It is time to end the wretched Emperor Tasselfoot and his empire of so called glory. There shall be only one emperor of Flasion, and his name shall be Chardiran." Chardish said.

"For I have something he doesn't." answered Chardish.

"What of the prophet, my lord." asked general Eyoshi.

"The prophet is weak, he is false. I asure you the god Synthlight will not interfere with my master plan."

"If the legends are true, my lord with greatest respect, then Chardiran shall fall to the god Synthlight." muttered Eyoshi.

"Do as I wish my knight. Attack Pumble Plains." demanded Chardish.

"Yes, my lord."

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The sun rose into the mid sky and punished the ground with unimaginable heat. The Charidans rode together through the rocky plains of Pumble, lined up in a row of 5,000, and drew their swords.

The Tassakins awaited them on the other side of PumblePlains. The emperor did not accompany them. Instead, Esupin, the emperors son lead the army.

"Why are they attacking sir?" asked Afrobean.

"A false rumor of our emperor assasinating the empress Jurs. It is not true, the emperor is on a search for the general Tps sisnce he went missing two months ago in the BahamutMountains at MountRidder. So, the new army of Chardish has come to wipe us out to avenge her death." mumbled Esupin.

"We cannot win, we have only 2,500 soldiers. Only half of their army." replied Afrobean.

"There is always hope." Esupin whispered.

"Come now, prepare the men to commence our attack." Esupin said.

"Yes." Afrobean whispered.

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"Riders of Charidan, the Emperor killed our Emperess Jurs!!"yelled Eyoshi.

"Avenge her death and slaughter those fascist Tassakins!"

The general pointed his sword at the Tassakins.

"ATTACK!!!"

"RRAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!"

The army of Charidan charged the plains of Pumble. Men of Tassakin were stabbed, blown up by grenade like Barkins, and tossed by Kariko's. Eyoshi slaughterd them and bestowed no mercy upon them. The Charidans surrounded the Tassakins and charged forth.

"Ahhh!" cried a soldier getting it's leg ripped off by a Kariko

The plains were red of blood, wet of tears, and covered with death. The Charidans slaughtered the Tassakins and drove them away from their lands. The PumblePlains were lost.

In the end Charidan won. He walked the plains up to Esupin, the last standing Tassakin of the battle. Chardish stood before him and held up his sword, drove it into his back, and Esupin fell. Victory was achieved. The plains were lost. Thus the war of Flasion began.

[Tps222]

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You killed me off?

Story auto-fails.

Moogy's sarcasm is overwhelming.

Don't ban him (same ip olol)

Seriously.

[Lightknight924]

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When he says don't ban him he means don't ban me, not Moogy. If you ban me then he can't go on anymore.





Edit* I just re-enhanced the story. Tps was rushing me so I left out so much detail. He has no life.

[Tps222]

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They can still ban your account.

Anyways, on topic.

The story is completely unrealistic in many aspects. Your abillity to describe action leaves much to be desired. Your confusing switch between narration styles and where you are leaves the reader to re-read sections. The numerous spelling, grammatical, and overall sentence structures bother me. The plot and idea are fine, a little generic and used way too much, but overall it is decent for your age.

[Lightknight924]

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My mind is epic, the ----- means i'm switching narration from Tass, to you, to the colleague, or to Chardish of Chardiran. The grammer is your previous post isn't perfect there either buddy. Decent for my age? Since when did my age come into matter, critizice me the way you'd critizice Mal in one of his stories. Don't pity my grammer because of my age. Then how would I ever become better at writing. I learn fast, it only took me two card hands to learn the game of Texas hold-em. Give me a chance and teach me proper sentence structing. My grammer I can fix.

*Haha, you fell off the mountain. That's a typical Tps move for ya.

[sente3]

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I'm now in the story! And I like the detail of the battle.

[Lightknight924]

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Sorry, I haven't been feeling to good lately. I'll start writing Chapter 5 tommorow.

[Lightknight924]

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Chapter 5
Whorlichan




The sun setted into the vast mountains of Bahamus. The air became freezing and thin as Sente and emperor Tasselfoot climbed the mountains. A mighty wind blew.

"Emperor! We've been searching for two weeks. There is no way the general could survive this long in these conditions!" shouted Sente over the mighty wind.

"We cannot give up. What if he is still alive?" Shouted back the emperor.

"Emperor, there can be another general. We cannot risk losing the emperor! Let's turn back." Sente shouted again over the mighty wind.

"Alright, fine." Replied emperor Tasselfoot.

They turned around the slope of Mount Quintessin. Then they headed down the mountain towards Tassakar, city of the emperor.
Strong winds blew and wispy snow stung their faces. The climbed down out of the snow and climbed across the rocky paths of the mountain. They finally came upon a small village.

"Ah yes, the village of Afroban. This was one of Tps's checkpoints on his mission. I wonder if....." Said emperor Tasselfoot.

"Come now Sente, let us see if Apersonious ever saw him here."

"No, Tps is dead, now let's go back." demanded Sente.

"Excuse me?"

"The general is dead! Now let's go before we are to!" Shouted Sente.

"You want to be the next general. You do not care for the life of others and therefore, would never make a fine general." Replied the emperor.

"You aren't a fine emperor!" Shouted Sente.

"Sentikus allah Kariko! I am the emperor of Tassakin! I release you from my service!" Screamed emperor Tasselfoot.

"You are a fool!" Yelled Sente.

"Sente, may you burn in the fires of hell."

Sente looked at him upset and angered.

"Farewell." Said Sente.

Sente walked down a steep rocky path towards Pumble Plains.

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The emperor walked up to Apersons door and knocked on it. Suddenly it swung open. There stood Apersonious Alakarus.

"Ah, Apersonious Alakarus, have you seen general Tps?" Asked Emperor Tasselfoot.

"Emperor! Oh Sorry. Yes I did, he came not to long ago looking for Evilbutterfly."

"Uh-huh, and?"

"I told him to check MountRidder." Replied Aperson.

"Alright. Would you mind accompaning me?" Asked emperor Tasselfoot.

"Sure." Answered Aperson.

They walked through the small village and walked up a mountains path leading to MountRidder. Suddenly the emperor stopped.

"Stop!" Demanded Tasselfoot.

"Why, my lord?" Asked Aperson.

"We're being watched. Look, over there standing near that closeline. A girl is starring at me." Said the emperor.

"That is Whorlichan of the Dekuscrub tribe." Said Aperson.

"Keep moving." Said emperor Tasselfoot.

They began to climb up the mountain. Emperor Tasslefoot looked back at the girl, then continued to climb.

"Do you see anything emperor?" shouted Aperson over the mighty wind.

"A cave, at the summit. Come, let us climb to it for shelter." Replied emperor Tasselfoot.

They climbed to the summit of MountRidder. Then they reached the cave and climbed in.

They saw a large underground spring with a pillar that stood representing the DarkSpooky. They walked deeper within the cave. On the wall were hyroglyphics of Flasions past. Wars, battles, past emperors. The walked into a large room and suddenly stopped. Their eyes beamed of light.

"The Hall Of The Dark Spooky." Whispered emperor Tasselfoot.

Aperson gasped.

Suddenly, thirty two hands reached out of the darkness and grabbed them.

"Emperor Tasselfoot, my apologies. My men and I were concerned with your being here and reacted rudly. Please, forgive us." Pleaded Evilbutterfly.

"Not to worry. You and the ninja's of the Dark Spooky are forgiven." Replied the emperor.

"I trust you have come for general Tps?" Asked Evilbutterfly.

"He is here?" Asked Tasselfoot.

"Yes, we found him about two months ago. Come" Replied Evilbutterfly.

Emperor Tasselfoot and Aperson followed Evilbutterfly to a small cottage of a room form. Their, in a soft bed made of wool lay general Tps looking rather peachy.

"General Tps, your are alive." Said the emperor.

"Yes, thank you for coming for me I-" Before he could finnish a DarkSpooky ran into the room and shouted.

"Smoke rises from the plains of Pumble! We've been attacked!"

"What?" Gasped emperor Tasselfoot.

Emperor Tasselfoot, Aperson, and general Tps ran to the cave entrance and looked out into the kingdom. Smoke arises from the plains of Pumble.