Eternal Memories ~Another story I'm writing~

[EpikLow]

Welll, I've already posted 2 of my storys on here called "Summer Vacation" and "~LiFe In Sid Valley" but this one is diffrent from those. This story I'm writing is called "Eternal Memories"

What would happen if you woke up not knowing where you are, who you are, or what you've done? Could you start your life over again? Or would you be tempted in knowing what you were like? Tempted in finding out what you really did. Tempted like he was.

I only have the 1st chapter out at the moment, but I might be able to work on it tonight.

Chapter 1
http://www.quizilla.com/users/Epilow...ries_chapter_1

Thanks for your time.

Paig~

[xXFFR_EliteXx]

Dang, thats a good start, if it got published I'd definatly buy it and read it!

[Tokzic]

If I was a publisher I'd gouge my eyes out after seeing all of the grammar errors. Learn how to write dialogue properly:

Wrong (the way you do it):
"I am currently saying something" Said Bob.

Right (the way the world does it):
"I am currently saying something," said Bob.

Besides that, your style of writing is extremely dull. It's more of a summary of a plot than a story. Refer to the sticky of literary devices and get in the habit of using them, because they are the difference between a skilled writer and an amateur.

Also the "argh i have amnesia and it turns out i was in some tragic event" plotline is very overdone.

[EpikLow]

Originally Posted by Tokzic

If I was a publisher I'd gouge my eyes out after seeing all of the grammar errors. Learn how to write dialogue properly:

Wrong (the way you do it):
"I am currently saying something" Said Bob.

Right (the way the world does it):
"I am currently saying something," said Bob.

Besides that, your style of writing is extremely dull. It's more of a summary of a plot than a story. Refer to the sticky of literary devices and get in the habit of using them, because they are the difference between a skilled writer and an amateur.

Also the "argh i have amnesia and it turns out i was in some tragic event" plotline is very overdone.

I'm glad your not a publisher >.<
Sorry for my slowness. I haven't been on here for awhile, but I can reply now.
Well I'm not surpirsed with what your saying since,
a) I'm REALLY bad at spelling
and
b) I'm 15 and this is just practice stories
I'm sorry that it's dull, but I will really work on it some time this weekend if I can. I know that the whole amnesia thing is over done but I have a really good idea for this story. If you want to keep reading then you can hahah but, uh, thanks for your view on this. I hope I can become a good writer someday where you wont find me annoying and boring.

[EpikLow]

Originally Posted by xXFFR_EliteXx

Dang, thats a good start, if it got published I'd definatly buy it and read it!

Thanks
I might work on it this weekend.
It's not going to be a very long story, but I hope you like the rest ^__^