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"Star Student" By Michael Gettings
The reason the pages are numbered is because a friend of mine is doing pictures, and it will be in picture book format.
Everyone I know found it amusing. Tell me what you think. Sugguestions/improvements. ------------------------------------------------------------------------- "Star Student" by Michael Gettings Page 1-2 This is Jane. Shes in the second grade! She loves school. This week, she is the "Star Student!". Page 3-4 She gets cookies at lunch and she gets to tell her whole class about her family. It was the best week ever. Page 5-6 Soon, too soon, the week was over. It was another childs turn to be the "Star Student". Page 7-8 Jane didn't like this. It made her angry. Very angry. Page 9-10 Jane did the math: with the number of students in her class, she wouldn't get to be "Star Student" again for the rest of the year! Unless... Unless something happens. Page 11-12 Jane started small. 3-4 kids got "sick" at lunch one day and had to go home. Page 13-14 They never came back. Page 15-16 It looked like an illness... And thanks to the science kit that Jane had gotten for Christmas, it was virtually untraceable. Page 17-18 On student "fell" off of the monkey bars. Page 19-20 Another "fell" onto a pair of scissors. Page 21-22 Soon, there were no more then ten classmates in her class! Jane was very happy... Page 23-24 Until the men in blue started watching her class. They took Adam away. Adam was always a trouble maker. Page 25-26 No one suspected her. Not little ole' Jane! Page 27-28 It was time for her to be "Star Student!" again! And now, she knew just what she was going to do. Page 29-30 She got cookies at lunch, but instead of talking about her family... Page 31-32 She talked about how much fun it was "becoming" "Star Student!" again. Page 33-34 When the men in white came to take her to the padded room, all she could do was smile. Page 35 And it was the best week ever. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Thanks! Mal
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10-14-2003, 03:45 PM
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uh im seriously disturbed
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10-14-2003, 03:47 PM
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ummmm ok.
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10-14-2003, 04:02 PM
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Well, its more of a satire than anything else. Not to be taken too seriously.
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"A new take on the epic fantasy genre... Darkly comic, relatable characters... twisted storyline." "Readers who prefer tension and romance, Maledictions: The Offering, delivers... As serious YA fiction, I値l give it five stars out of five. As a novel? Four and a half." - Liz Ellor My new novel: Maledictions: The Offering. Now in Paperback! |
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10-14-2003, 04:04 PM
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10-14-2003, 04:11 PM
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Missed the point, but thanks for that. See, people? HES HELPING! Sugguestions, corrections... ect.
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"A new take on the epic fantasy genre... Darkly comic, relatable characters... twisted storyline." "Readers who prefer tension and romance, Maledictions: The Offering, delivers... As serious YA fiction, I値l give it five stars out of five. As a novel? Four and a half." - Liz Ellor My new novel: Maledictions: The Offering. Now in Paperback! |
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10-14-2003, 04:23 PM
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That would be hilarious in book form.
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10-14-2003, 04:26 PM
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ya call the people in white suits and u get a padded room 4 free
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Thank you!
My friend who might be working on it would be doing full color pages, and it would be formatted like a childrens book. It would be awesome. Mal ((Thanks Moogy!))
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10-14-2003, 04:32 PM
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but i just told u how to save a lot of money
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Sounds like a great childs book
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10-14-2003, 05:21 PM
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yeah but you should add liek raping and sex crimes and other stuff....then have pictures
you could also add a molesting freind name Billy who does her up the hizaaaaa ebery day In other words...needs more action |
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10-14-2003, 05:42 PM
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In other words, you're a pedophile.
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IAMTHEEVILBEAN.... I hate you.
For serious. Ra... Rape? DO NOT RAPE. DO NOT STEAL. DO NOT KILL. THESE ARE THE BEILIEFS THAT EVERY MAN OF ANY FAITH CAN EMBRACE. (Except you, apparantley) Mal
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i joke alot so get used to it....im a jokester kind of guy...the story was very good tell ur friend good job and no moogy im not a pedaphile..... |
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10-14-2003, 06:19 PM
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just a sec the biggest pohst whore tome
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10-14-2003, 06:28 PM
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Sorry Bean... My bad.
I wrote the story, I want him to do the illustrations. I don't know if he will yet, but I sure hope so. And if he does decide to do the illustrations, I guess we could send it out to publishers. That would be cool to get it published. Mal
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10-14-2003, 08:41 PM
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You should sell it to the "younger" audience. That way they will know how to become " star student". Very helpful story. I've pulled something like that before......but you guys weren't supposed to know that. It was me and my friend Murph, but you weren't supposed to know that either....... nice story though. Funny stuff.....
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Hahaha.... Good luck to you and "Murph" in all of your future "Exploits"...
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he best part, was that we never got caught, and i think that kicksmajor ass!!
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