Poetry

xiron · 03-12-2005, 03:30 PM

Any kind...

Here's one of mine.

To _____ Pt. 3

Emotions, like chains
Always binding, never letting go
I can’t let go

Feelings, like fire
Burn within me, forever
I can’t let go

Tears roll down my face
All the pain, never-ending
I can’t let go

Fear, afraid of losing you
I couldn’t take it if I did
I won’t let go

Torlock · 03-12-2005, 04:11 PM

Dude, Joey posted this awhile back.

**Specforces** · 03-12-2005, 04:13 PM

Meh, sounds like everything I've heard ever. Try something complicated syntax or something, or use alliteration, that's always fun.

**talisman** · 03-12-2005, 04:20 PM

emo is not the answer.

try to be less literal.

Layla-Day · 03-12-2005, 04:44 PM

I have one.

Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.

Up above the world so high.
Like a diamond in the sky.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder, What you are.

jewpinthethird · 03-12-2005, 11:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Layla-Day

I have one.

Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder what you are.

Up above the world so high.
Like a diamond in the sky.
Twinkle Twinkle little star.
How I wonder, What you are.

I have one too.

It's called "You Are Not Funny"

Xiron, no offense, but your poem is kind of boring.

You say emotions are like chains that never let go, but eventually chains weaken and break, fires get extinquished, pain becomes numb, etc.

Honestly, when read your poem, I pictured a drunk, sweaty, fat guy with long hair reciting this poem to a lifesize cardboard cut out of Lora Croft in his parent's basement.

I mean, it's great that you are into writing poetry and whatnot, but it wouldnt hurt to read some love sonnets and get some inspiriation.

**alainbryden** · 03-13-2005, 01:33 AM

I wrote this the year before last for an online friend who needed help on a chemistry assignment.

Copper!

Oh Copper oh copper,
Element 29,
Conducts electricity
Better then water and wine.

Discovered 5000 years ago,
And ever since used,
You purify water,
When with a sulphate fused.

Analytical chemists
Detect sugar with thee,
The ultimate conductor
Of electricity and heat.

Were it not
For this copper today,
The electrical industry
Would wither away.

So whenever using
Your coins or twine,
Remember the faithful
Element 29.

**alainbryden** · 03-13-2005, 01:35 AM

I also made this in grade 8 after reading MacBeth

Macbeth: for people who hate books

Macbeth was a man quite ambitious,
Whose greed made him act very vicious.
He took the real kings life
With a very big knife,
The result was a banquet delicious.

King Macbeth soon felt less like a man.
His wife went mad and kicked the can.
Soon, Macbeth is convicted,
And as the witches predicted,
Macdough killed Macbeth as he’d planned.

**alainbryden** · 03-13-2005, 01:37 AM

and this is from my emo days. frown.

Evitcurtsed

Fear, Face, Drear, Place
Lost, Tired, Bossed, Wired
Give me pity; cause me depression
Give me love; cause an obsession
Give me one rule; cause felt oppression
Give me some space; commence regression
Gone, Near, Borne, Leer
Take, Need, Fake, Bleed
Give me a chance; my bad impression
Give me some time; need an extension
Give me a hand; ruin the intention
Give me a choice; fail in succession
From, Taken, For, Gotten
Test, Jailed, Death, Failed…

**Moogy** · 03-13-2005, 03:52 AM

whazzabie · 03-13-2005, 04:27 AM

Los Dudes, real poetry is in rap. your little poems of ur fantasies are ok but rap keeps it real.

**alainbryden** · 03-13-2005, 11:51 AM

The N00b

Oh god.
The lack of grammar.
The lack of intelligence.
The substitution of "ur" for "your".
The post count.
The n00bness.
My eyes.
Burning.
GTFO

flypie743 · 03-13-2005, 12:56 PM

I wrote this myself :>

A BEAR DARED A MOOSE TO WEAR
A BIG WHITE COAT WITH A TEAR
THE MARE DARED BEAR
TO SEARCH FOR A PIECE OF HORSES' HAIR
AN EARNEST SQUIRREL YEARNED TO DARE THE MARE
EVERYONE KNEW THE MARE WAS A SELFISH MARE
SO THE SQUIRREL DARED THE MARE
TO LEARN HOW TO SHARE

**iPatcH** · 03-13-2005, 12:58 PM

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**Moogy** · 03-13-2005, 01:09 PM

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1234

i call it the numbers poem

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i'm pretty sure all the words rhyme

**talisman** · 03-13-2005, 01:39 PM

wait isn't this the CT forum...?

**iPatcH** · 03-13-2005, 01:46 PM

Poetry requires zero critical thinking.

**alainbryden** · 03-13-2005, 03:20 PM

Postwhoring in the critical thinking forum is a serious offence, and you will all be warned for it.

jeffreyw · 03-13-2005, 03:35 PM

hes just telling it like it is. thats a serious poem.

03-12-2005, 03:30 PM	#1
xiron FFR Player Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 189	Poetry Any kind... Here's one of mine. To _____ Pt. 3 Emotions, like chains Always binding, never letting go I can’t let go Feelings, like fire Burn within me, forever I can’t let go Tears roll down my face All the pain, never-ending I can’t let go Fear, afraid of losing you I couldn’t take it if I did I won’t let go __________________ www.myspace.com/thehappyunicorns

03-12-2005, 04:11 PM	#2
Torlock FFR Player Join Date: Jun 2004 Age: 33 Posts: 475	RE: Poetry Dude, Joey posted this awhile back. __________________

03-12-2005, 04:13 PM	#3
Specforces Yes Join Date: Jan 2004 Age: 38 Posts: 5,028	RE: Poetry Meh, sounds like everything I've heard ever. Try something complicated syntax or something, or use alliteration, that's always fun. __________________ Check Out My Music

03-12-2005, 04:20 PM	#4
talisman Resident Penguin Join Date: May 2003 Age: 37 Posts: 4,598	RE: Poetry emo is not the answer. try to be less literal.

03-12-2005, 04:44 PM	#5
Layla-Day FFR Player Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Detroit Michigan BIISHES!! Posts: 124	RE: Poetry I have one. Twinkle Twinkle little star. How I wonder what you are. Twinkle Twinkle little star. How I wonder what you are. Up above the world so high. Like a diamond in the sky. Twinkle Twinkle little star. How I wonder, What you are. __________________

03-13-2005, 01:33 AM	#7
alainbryden Seen your member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: noitacoL Posts: 2,873	RE: Re: RE: Poetry I wrote this the year before last for an online friend who needed help on a chemistry assignment. Copper! Oh Copper oh copper, Element 29, Conducts electricity Better then water and wine. Discovered 5000 years ago, And ever since used, You purify water, When with a sulphate fused. Analytical chemists Detect sugar with thee, The ultimate conductor Of electricity and heat. Were it not For this copper today, The electrical industry Would wither away. So whenever using Your coins or twine, Remember the faithful Element 29. __________________ ~NEIGH

03-13-2005, 01:35 AM	#8
alainbryden Seen your member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: noitacoL Posts: 2,873	RE: Re: RE: Poetry I also made this in grade 8 after reading MacBeth Macbeth: for people who hate books Macbeth was a man quite ambitious, Whose greed made him act very vicious. He took the real kings life With a very big knife, The result was a banquet delicious. King Macbeth soon felt less like a man. His wife went mad and kicked the can. Soon, Macbeth is convicted, And as the witches predicted, Macdough killed Macbeth as he’d planned. __________________ ~NEIGH

03-13-2005, 01:37 AM	#9
alainbryden Seen your member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: noitacoL Posts: 2,873	RE: Re: RE: Poetry and this is from my emo days. frown. Evitcurtsed Fear, Face, Drear, Place Lost, Tired, Bossed, Wired Give me pity; cause me depression Give me love; cause an obsession Give me one rule; cause felt oppression Give me some space; commence regression Gone, Near, Borne, Leer Take, Need, Fake, Bleed Give me a chance; my bad impression Give me some time; need an extension Give me a hand; ruin the intention Give me a choice; fail in succession From, Taken, For, Gotten Test, Jailed, Death, Failed… __________________ ~NEIGH

03-13-2005, 03:52 AM	#10
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03-13-2005, 04:27 AM	#11
whazzabie FFR Player Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: who knows where Posts: 1	RE: Re: RE: Poetry Los Dudes, real poetry is in rap. your little poems of ur fantasies are ok but rap keeps it real.

03-13-2005, 11:51 AM	#12
alainbryden Seen your member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: noitacoL Posts: 2,873	RE: Re: RE: Poetry The N00b Oh god. The lack of grammar. The lack of intelligence. The substitution of "ur" for "your". The post count. The n00bness. My eyes. Burning. GTFO __________________ ~NEIGH

03-13-2005, 12:56 PM	#13
flypie743 FFR Player Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: fairyland Posts: 3,210	RE: Re: RE: Poetry I wrote this myself :> A BEAR DARED A MOOSE TO WEAR A BIG WHITE COAT WITH A TEAR THE MARE DARED BEAR TO SEARCH FOR A PIECE OF HORSES' HAIR AN EARNEST SQUIRREL YEARNED TO DARE THE MARE EVERYONE KNEW THE MARE WAS A SELFISH MARE SO THE SQUIRREL DARED THE MARE TO LEARN HOW TO SHARE __________________ IF YOU ARE THE BOMB YOU WILL CLICK THIS and if you dont, you suck.

03-13-2005, 12:58 PM	#14
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03-13-2005, 01:39 PM	#17
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iPatcH Swamp Lemons Rule Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: not detroit you idiots Age: 35 Posts: 3,370	RE: Re: RE: Poetry Poetry requires zero critical thinking. __________________ put on a donk on it

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