First Song! Convergence - Hyper Two

**Freak83** · 06-14-2012, 03:07 PM

My friend and I just released our first song for our band - Hyper Two. The song is called Convergence and it's along the lines of instrumental rock.

YouTube and SoundCloud links provided for whatever you prefer. Would love to hear your thoughts and feedback on it!

http://www.soundcloud.com/hypertwo/convergence

**TheSaxRunner05** · 06-14-2012, 03:24 PM

It's a good start, but the arpeggiating simple chord structure gets a bit too pedantic for me after awhile. The song title made me thing of different ideas coming together, when the song just chilled on a single idea, never really building to anything. Not that music has to build to something, but it dragged a bit too much for me (1,3,5,3,1, repeat).

The part 1:23 - 1:40 had the beginnings of a good melody, and I wish it was developed more. Don't be afraid to do more with it. I like the mood of the piece, just be afraid to shift some stuff around a little more as your group develops. It's a good start.

I hope this was helpful!

**Freak83** · 06-15-2012, 08:17 AM

It does help! Thanks very much. I posted this on another forum as well and the common theme among responses seems to be that it "needs a little bit more". Perhaps it's because there was no instruments. Gonna try to make this happen in our next song!

06-14-2012, 03:07 PM	#1
Freak83 FFR Simfile Author Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Toronto Posts: 3,281	First Song! Convergence - Hyper Two My friend and I just released our first song for our band - Hyper Two. The song is called Convergence and it's along the lines of instrumental rock. YouTube and SoundCloud links provided for whatever you prefer. Would love to hear your thoughts and feedback on it! http://www.soundcloud.com/hypertwo/convergence

06-14-2012, 03:24 PM	#2
TheSaxRunner05 The Doctor Join Date: Apr 2006 Age: 35 Posts: 6,145	Re: First Song! Convergence - Hyper Two It's a good start, but the arpeggiating simple chord structure gets a bit too pedantic for me after awhile. The song title made me thing of different ideas coming together, when the song just chilled on a single idea, never really building to anything. Not that music has to build to something, but it dragged a bit too much for me (1,3,5,3,1, repeat). The part 1:23 - 1:40 had the beginnings of a good melody, and I wish it was developed more. Don't be afraid to do more with it. I like the mood of the piece, just be afraid to shift some stuff around a little more as your group develops. It's a good start. I hope this was helpful! __________________

06-15-2012, 08:17 AM	#3
Freak83 FFR Simfile Author Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Toronto Posts: 3,281	Re: First Song! Convergence - Hyper Two It does help! Thanks very much. I posted this on another forum as well and the common theme among responses seems to be that it "needs a little bit more". Perhaps it's because there was no instruments. Gonna try to make this happen in our next song!

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