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hi guys, i wrote this poem a while ago to my g/f just for fun...it's my first poem ever as a matter of fact. can you guys guess what it means...?
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ The Demon Inside Can you help me fight this demon inside It grows stronger when I'm not with you It loves all the dirty thoughts of you And that is why I need you When I'm with you I just fall into your eyes My mind goes clear, I have nothing to lose I feel free from it all when I hold you close Every kiss we make, makes him weak But at night the demon comes back strong Turns me into someone I don't like It feels cold when theres nothing of yourself Being controlled hurts worse then controlling Can you help me fight this demon inside It grows stronger when I'm not with you It loves all the dirty thoughts of you And that is why I need you So stay with me, be my angel Don't be scared, just hold my hand Together we can fight this off And when we do, I'll know It's true, that I was meant to be with you Can you help me fight this demon inside It grows stronger when I'm not with you It loves all the dirty thoughts of you When I'm with you I just fall into your eyes My mind goes clear, I have nothing to lose I feel free from it all when I hold you close Every kiss we make, makes him weak So stay with me and help me fight My angel. |
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I have no idea...
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You wrote it to a girl you asked out. Either that or you want to marry her. It's like the Beatle's "Help". "Every kiss we make makes him weak." Your desire for love is overcoming your childish lust. "And when we do I know that it's true I was meant to be with you." That's outright obvious.
I like the chorus idea, but it really has a better effect if you add a few more stanzas in there. I have no taste for poetry, though. Literature is my downfall. Q EDIT: I'm adding more to the original post, sorry. |
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Hookers and Blow
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Wasnt this poem already posted like how long ago?
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Drug addiction right? My angel is making a reference to Angel dust. thats what i think
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Hookers and Blow
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Wasnt this poem already posted like how long ago?
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If he was fighting drug addiction, why would he be asking the drug to stay with him. It doesn't make much sense, but I like the idea you're coming from.
I really noticed the demon/ angel thing and at first I think it's cliche. But then I noticed that angel only appears once. Symbollic? Please, all the mods are trying to clean up the CT forums. Write paragraphs or at least entertain as many ideas as you can in one post. No need to up your post count in here (which is mine has barely peaked 200) Q |
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I think this kind of poem is so cliche now. No offense, but I didn't like the refrains, either. It read more like a song than a poem. |
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ok. this was posted before. it was dead, revived... and now its dead again....
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