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Old 10-12-2004, 03:14 PM   #1
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Default Guess what this Poem means..

hi guys, i wrote this poem a while ago to my g/f just for fun...it's my first poem ever as a matter of fact. can you guys guess what it means...?
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The Demon Inside

Can you help me fight this demon inside
It grows stronger when I'm not with you
It loves all the dirty thoughts of you
And that is why I need you

When I'm with you I just fall into your eyes
My mind goes clear, I have nothing to lose
I feel free from it all when I hold you close
Every kiss we make, makes him weak

But at night the demon comes back strong
Turns me into someone I don't like
It feels cold when theres nothing of yourself
Being controlled hurts worse then controlling

Can you help me fight this demon inside
It grows stronger when I'm not with you
It loves all the dirty thoughts of you
And that is why I need you

So stay with me, be my angel
Don't be scared, just hold my hand
Together we can fight this off
And when we do, I'll know
It's true, that I was meant to be with you

Can you help me fight this demon inside
It grows stronger when I'm not with you
It loves all the dirty thoughts of you

When I'm with you I just fall into your eyes
My mind goes clear, I have nothing to lose
I feel free from it all when I hold you close
Every kiss we make, makes him weak

So stay with me and help me fight
My angel.
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Old 10-12-2004, 03:26 PM   #2
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I have no idea...
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Old 10-12-2004, 03:52 PM   #3
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Default RE: Guess what this Poem means..

You wrote it to a girl you asked out. Either that or you want to marry her. It's like the Beatle's "Help". "Every kiss we make makes him weak." Your desire for love is overcoming your childish lust. "And when we do I know that it's true I was meant to be with you." That's outright obvious.

I like the chorus idea, but it really has a better effect if you add a few more stanzas in there. I have no taste for poetry, though. Literature is my downfall.

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EDIT: I'm adding more to the original post, sorry.
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Old 10-12-2004, 03:55 PM   #4
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Wasnt this poem already posted like how long ago?
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Old 10-12-2004, 03:55 PM   #5
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Drug addiction right? My angel is making a reference to Angel dust. thats what i think
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Old 10-12-2004, 03:57 PM   #6
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Wasnt this poem already posted like how long ago?
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Old 10-12-2004, 03:59 PM   #7
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Default RE: Guess what this Poem means..

If he was fighting drug addiction, why would he be asking the drug to stay with him. It doesn't make much sense, but I like the idea you're coming from.

I really noticed the demon/ angel thing and at first I think it's cliche. But then I noticed that angel only appears once. Symbollic?

Please, all the mods are trying to clean up the CT forums. Write paragraphs or at least entertain as many ideas as you can in one post. No need to up your post count in here (which is mine has barely peaked 200)

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Old 10-12-2004, 04:19 PM   #8
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Wasnt this poem already posted like how long ago?
yes, it was.

I think this kind of poem is so cliche now. No offense, but I didn't like the refrains, either. It read more like a song than a poem.
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ok. this was posted before. it was dead, revived... and now its dead again....
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