04-23-2007, 03:09 PM
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This is a poem of mine.
This poem is fairly straight forward. I call it "Mercy".
Ruefully, the lord of my heart is now not joy. Although, before and after, it was twice once so, chryselephantine butterflies ploy. Hurt me not, but reelect that once great lord. Eleison! I cry to thee. Let that lord return to me. So let me know what you guys think of it!
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04-25-2007, 08:50 AM
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Re: This is a poem of mine.
sorry for the double post but it has been 3 days... : (
i guess no one likes my poem....
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04-25-2007, 12:29 PM
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Re: This is a poem of mine.
i like it..good meter
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04-25-2007, 05:25 PM
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Re: This is a poem of mine.
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04-26-2007, 08:48 PM
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Re: This is a poem of mine.
Did you guys see it is an acrostic?
That is my girlfriend. And alas, she is far from me... my little butterfly.... and eleison in latin means mercy. btw
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04-26-2007, 08:49 PM
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Re: This is a poem of mine.
I like it I have a few poems published on poemofquotes.com myself
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04-27-2007, 08:52 PM
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Re: This is a poem of mine.
Hm. Decent, but there was one part that drove me crazy. "...is now not joy."
Overall, good poem. Rachel is the name of my sister. X3
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05-1-2007, 07:03 AM
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Re: This is a poem of mine.
My girlfriend's name is actually Raquel but I did not think of anything that started with the letter Q that I really liked. So I used the English equivalent of Raquel which is Rachel of course. I wrote two other acrostics with her name as well. But one is in Spanish and the other is in French.
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