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  • YoshL
    Celestial Harbor
    FFR Simfile Author
    FFR Music Producer
    • Aug 2008
    • 6156

    #1

    Requesting Criticues Please!

    http://soundcloud.com/daeris/zjc
    A Chiptune...I guess. This is like...my 5th work ever, so any suggestions/techniques/tips towards improvement I can take would be appreciated!


    Originally posted by Charu
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  • justin_ator
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    • Mar 2007
    • 7648

    #2
    Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

    Interesting sound. Not the most impressive thing but if you keep working on songs I'm sure they'll be great soon enough! I hear potential. It wasn't BAD to listen to by any means imo. So that's a wonderful start.

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    • blindreper1179
      Vice President Of TGB
      • Jun 2006
      • 5900

      #3
      Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

      Can't think of anything bad about it! Loved it!
      Originally posted by thesunfan
      absolutely I want to vomit on your face irl
      Originally posted by choof
      It was like trying to throw logic at a fuckin brick wall lmao
      Originally posted by choof
      whats more dense, a black hole or an icyworld file
      Originally posted by Celirra
      I've never been so disappointed by a man from Alabama than I am right now

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      • YoshL
        Celestial Harbor
        FFR Simfile Author
        FFR Music Producer
        • Aug 2008
        • 6156

        #4
        Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

        great *cough* critiques x3


        Originally posted by Charu
        Only yours, for an easy price of $19.99! You too can experience the wonders of full motion rump sticking.

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        • YoshL
          Celestial Harbor
          FFR Simfile Author
          FFR Music Producer
          • Aug 2008
          • 6156

          #5
          Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

          :< great critiques?

          (merry christmas)


          Originally posted by Charu
          Only yours, for an easy price of $19.99! You too can experience the wonders of full motion rump sticking.

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          • wildfireskunk
            Purveyor of tea
            • Sep 2004
            • 1247

            #6
            Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

            I'm not a particularly musically creative person myself, but I had a listen and shall share my opinion!

            I liked the overall melody that ran through the song, and thought that sounded really nice! I don't think that there was enough backing it up to do it justice though. Obviously you have all the other beats going on, but to me it felt like the whole song was a buildup to something that never came. I know that it fades out before coming back with more oomph twice, but I don't think there was enough backing up the lead melody in general. I can't say I know what should be added, but I think the backing beat needs a bit more power to it than the one you have there... When the cymbals come in, that's got the nice crisp kind of sound that gives it the kind of oomph it needs imo.

            The little bit that comes in a couple of times (for example, at 2:38 before the cymbal crash) was nice, but I think it was a bit quiet. The instance where it comes in after seems to fade out entirely before the quick beepy end, although I'm not sure if that's intentional. I think it could do with being a little louder though, as it would be a welcome addition to the song! Alternatively, maybe it can be heard fine with good speakers and my laptop is pretty crap, as that's happened before...

            I hope that helps somewhat. I think that if it had a bit of a stronger beat to it, it would be something I'd listen to a lot! :3


            (merry christmas)
            ITG guru, FFR noob, wants to hug every cat.

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            • PrawnSkunk
              Administrator
              FFR Simfile Author
              FFR Administrator
              • Dec 2007
              • 3907

              #7
              Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

              I am not experienced in DAW usage, so please excuse my lack of terminology and experience. However, I hope you still review my critique as semi-useful.

              zjC1116 seems to be a laid-back, more relaxing approach to the chiptune genre. If that's not the feel your going for, then something's wrong. I felt this way, because there were no sweeping noise waves, piercing chip voices or wobbly/vibrating/grace notes - things that I think really add to the melody of chiptunes. Though the song was not "blaghhh" as all; with the same basic background loop throughout the song, you did introduce many interesting lines so that it remained interesting.

              (If this matters) As I listened to it, the first image that popped into my head was a platformer game similar to Cave Story. As justin_ator said, it has a great start, though I felt the last 2/3 felt that it repeated itself a bit - though this is not a bad thing! This reinforced my whole imagination of the platformer "loop-style" theme.

              At the beginning half of the song, I could hear a faint background line. This felt like this should be brought out a bit more, as @1:00 it was barely noticable.
              One flaw I noticed in this song was that there was not a lot of dynamic contrast. I noticed that @1:42 you brought the volume down a bit - but it was not enough to show a strong, bold contrast from the previous line.
              @2:39, bring out that 16th stream A LOT. holy, those lines are the tasty gems; In my experience, that's the holy grail of chiptune music~ xD

              You have a two second silence at the beginning of the song. I can only assume that this is because you are considering making a stepchart for this file (if not - disregard this). If so, I think emphasizing that 16th line @2:39 would be a necessity.



              //2 cents (merry christmas)

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              • wildfireskunk
                Purveyor of tea
                • Sep 2004
                • 1247

                #8
                Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

                Prawnskunk says what I meant to say, only much better. From now on he can talk for me (about music critique. Talk of homosexuality if his own)
                Last edited by wildfireskunk; 12-25-2011, 05:08 PM.
                ITG guru, FFR noob, wants to hug every cat.

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                • PrawnSkunk
                  Administrator
                  FFR Simfile Author
                  FFR Administrator
                  • Dec 2007
                  • 3907

                  #9
                  Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

                  i liek doods

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                  • YoshL
                    Celestial Harbor
                    FFR Simfile Author
                    FFR Music Producer
                    • Aug 2008
                    • 6156

                    #10
                    Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

                    Originally posted by PrawnSkunk
                    I am not experienced in DAW usage, so please excuse my lack of terminology and experience. However, I hope you still review my critique as semi-useful.

                    zjC1116 seems to be a laid-back, more relaxing approach to the chiptune genre. If that's not the feel your going for, then something's wrong. I felt this way, because there were no sweeping noise waves, piercing chip voices or wobbly/vibrating/grace notes - things that I think really add to the melody of chiptunes. Though the song was not "blaghhh" as all; with the same basic background loop throughout the song, you did introduce many interesting lines so that it remained interesting.

                    (If this matters) As I listened to it, the first image that popped into my head was a platformer game similar to Cave Story. As justin_ator said, it has a great start, though I felt the last 2/3 felt that it repeated itself a bit - though this is not a bad thing! This reinforced my whole imagination of the platformer "loop-style" theme.

                    At the beginning half of the song, I could hear a faint background line. This felt like this should be brought out a bit more, as @1:00 it was barely noticable.
                    One flaw I noticed in this song was that there was not a lot of dynamic contrast. I noticed that @1:42 you brought the volume down a bit - but it was not enough to show a strong, bold contrast from the previous line.
                    @2:39, bring out that 16th stream A LOT. holy, those lines are the tasty gems; In my experience, that's the holy grail of chiptune music~ xD

                    You have a two second silence at the beginning of the song. I can only assume that this is because you are considering making a stepchart for this file (if not - disregard this). If so, I think emphasizing that 16th line @2:39 would be a necessity.



                    //2 cents (merry christmas)
                    i liek doods too (thanks so much haha)


                    Originally posted by Charu
                    Only yours, for an easy price of $19.99! You too can experience the wonders of full motion rump sticking.

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                    • PrawnSkunk
                      Administrator
                      FFR Simfile Author
                      FFR Administrator
                      • Dec 2007
                      • 3907

                      #11
                      Re: Requesting Criticues Please!

                      as wildfire's representative, I'm glad you found both our CRITIQUES insightful.
                      Last edited by PrawnSkunk; 12-25-2011, 05:23 PM.

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