for the girl i love

[phe0nixblade]

Location: CT

Location: Canada

Oh. Ok.

[arsonistsgetallthegirls]

awwww!!







i microwaved my pizza for too long and now it's all rubbery.... :/

[burningeyes88]

Originally Posted by ShastaTwist

You're definitely going to be with this guy for the rest of your life.

Sheerly because he writes you mediocre poetry.

did anyone ever tell you your a bitch...i think so

[omgitznpv]

Originally Posted by burningeyes88

did anyone ever tell you your a bitch...i think so

But she speaks the truth!

[ShAiOnEi]

Posted this on her profile
I figured you needed some mediocre poetry yourself so here.
One time
I made a rhyme
for a girl on FFR
who tried so hard to raise the bar
who never had the chance
to experience romance
so once she conveyed this little scheme
I was forced to right a poetry theme

Shastatwist is cool though this wasn't to be offensive or anything I was just bored lmao..

[Verruckter]

Originally Posted by ShAiOnEi

Posted this on her profile
I figured you needed some mediocre poetry yourself so here.
One time
I made a rhyme
for a girl on FFR
who tried so hard to raise the bar
who never had the chance
to experience romance
so once she conveyed this little scheme
I was forced to right a poetry theme

Shastatwist is cool though this wasn't to be offensive or anything I was just bored lmao..

You forgot to make a rhyme with "meme".. haha

[ShastaTwist]

I've been told I'm a bitch, I can deal with that, it's all good.

You, on the other hand, you post a poem on a forum and you expect people to praise you like the poetry god you are. Well, here's something for you, I'm not going to bow down to your cheesy, cliche poetry about how great your girlfriend is and how great your relationship is and how great your rhyme scheme is. Learn to take some criticism. If you ever want to make anything out of yourself in the way of literary arts, you'd better learn to actually spell out your words. Furthermore, if you ever hope to become a poet or author of any kind or, rather, if you ever hope to make anything of yourself, you're going to have to realize that not everybody is going to be candy-coated with their criticism.



P.S.

Originally Posted by omgitznpv

It's mediocre?

I was being generous, much more generous than most of the other people in this thread, but he decided to attack me. Awesome.

[ShAiOnEi]

Originally Posted by ShastaTwist

I've been told I'm a bitch, I can deal with that, it's all good.

You, on the other hand, you post a poem on a forum and you expect people to praise you like the poetry god you are. Well, here's something for you, I'm not going to bow down to your cheesy, cliche poetry about how great your girlfriend is and how great your relationship is and how great your rhyme scheme is. Learn to take some criticism. If you ever want to make anything out of yourself in the way of literary arts, you'd better learn to actually spell out your words. Furthermore, if you ever hope to become a poet or author of any kind or, rather, if you ever hope to make anything of yourself, you're going to have to realize that not everybody is going to be candy-coated with their criticism.

if you ever, if you ever, if you ever, if you ever want.

Edit:I don't think they were going all out for novel quality shasta 8/.

[omgitznpv]

Originally Posted by ShastaTwist

I've been told I'm a bitch, I can deal with that, it's all good.

You, on the other hand, you post a poem on a forum and you expect people to praise you like the poetry god you are. Well, here's something for you, I'm not going to bow down to your cheesy, cliche poetry about how great your girlfriend is and how great your relationship is and how great your rhyme scheme is. Learn to take some criticism. If you ever want to make anything out of yourself in the way of literary arts, you'd better learn to actually spell out your words. Furthermore, if you ever hope to become a poet or author of any kind or, rather, if you ever hope to make anything of yourself, you're going to have to realize that not everybody is going to be candy-coated with their criticism.



P.S.



I was being generous, much more generous than most of the other people in this thread, but he decided to attack me. Awesome.

Aware.



And good job saying that, said what I had in my head as a general thought. And at least you can deal with being called a bitch- what you say is the truth anyways. :\

[ShastaTwist]

Originally Posted by ShAiOnEi

if you ever, if you ever, if you ever, if you ever want.

There were only three.

Originally Posted by ShAiOnEi

Edit:I don't think they were going all out for novel quality shasta 8/.

And I'm just saying, criticism is a natural thing in life and if you can't take the truth in a brutally honest way, you're pretty much screwed.

[ShAiOnEi]

Originally Posted by ShastaTwist

There were only three.

Lmao! I suppose I did add one more to be overly dramatic about it.

[GuidoHunter]

I've seen much worse. You had a couple of good lines in there, but they suffer from serious language problems.

--Guido

http://andy.mikee385.com

[businessman07]

remember that time,
the first day we met?
our eyes cought eachother & since then I've been sick.

sick without you that is,
cause you didn't see,
my eyes caught a Goddess, you eyes caught a flea.

A flea in the sence,
that I was so small,
you eyes straight though me, as if I wasnt there at all,

that whole year you Ignored me,
except that one time,
when you were short 10 cents and asked for a dime,

but now I am sorry,
for you that is,
for you have missed out on this wonderful kid,

I have worked hard,
the summer I've slaved
and the fruit of my labor? A body unscathed,

today you said Hi,
I guess you thought I was cute,
I didn't bother to look & my mouth remained mute,

for I know your type,
I know what you want,
all body, no mind, WELL YOU GET WHAT YOU FLAUNT.

[LLaMaSaUceYup]

Haha that poem was interesting... ^^^

[mead1]

I think someone has ignored the fact that I have just stolen his girlfriend.

[SaSSyBiiTcH]

moosh.
but im a moosh lover.
If it's from the heart thats all that matters.
Nicely done.

[ejthedj00]

ROFL! so this is what happens when i just randomly view a thred! wow, well i people =]

[All_That_Chaz]

Your words leave the mind limp
And longing, for any chimp
Can say, “I love you” in dis-
Jointed free verse. Even this
Is completely improvised and
Uses the joys of emjamb-
Ment to replace your
Preachy lecture with a free-flowing fjord
Of words that are not controlled
By lines but instead hold
The idea you wanted in the first place
When you fell in love with little what's-her-face.
Oh, one last thing before I’m done –
Speak ill of Shasta and I’ll rip out your tongue.

[burningeyes88]

alotta posts sense i went to bed. oh and to shasta i didnt want praise im just the type of person who feels the need to annoy everyone else with their stupid emotions.

also

Originally Posted by mead1

I think someone has ignored the fact that I have just stolen his girlfriend.

no ive just been ignoring the fact that your a retard

[MrRubix]

Hey give the kid a break, he's young. Every poet has their phases.

Long way to go... but eh, you gotta start somewhere.