05-24-2004, 01:27 PM
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feedback required. plus a contest
hello all, i am here to ask a fovor from you.
i need some people to read the story i am writing and give me some feedback. problem is, it is 24 pages long right now. www.angelfire.com/pro/rylan/my_story.doc thanks in advance. the contest is this: i will give the person who comes up with the best title for this story 800 credits. runner up gets 200. and last place gets laughed at.
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05-24-2004, 02:44 PM
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Do you want grammar and style corrections, or just an overall assessment? It'd help if I knew why you wrote this.
I haven't even gotten through the first page, and I see that it needs extensive grammar revisions, but I'm up for doing it. Just tell me if that's what you want and I'll get on it. --Guido http://andy.mikee385.com/
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05-24-2004, 03:37 PM
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i already know it is an atrocity against grammer, all i want is style and story feedback.
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05-29-2004, 11:20 AM
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*bump*
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05-31-2004, 09:42 PM
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*bump*
last time then i let this thread die.
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Okay, I've read the first six chapters. I can't believe I got that far, because calling this story an "atrocity against grammar" gives it far too much credit.
However, so far the story's good, as is your style of writing. I think going back and reading it yourself would do a world of good, though. Gimme another day or two and I'll finish it. I'd have it done, but sleep + work = lots of time out of my day. --Guido http://andy.mikee385.com
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05-31-2004, 10:54 PM
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thanks a ton.
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