A few poems from a while back.

[andy-o24]

found these in word, some are good but others sucks. Constructive criticizm only please.

Life is a b*tch,
Especially when you have an itch,
Everyone sucks,
Cause the shoot ducks,
The devils reign,
Wont be in vain,
Because life is a b*tch.

When he comes to rule,
All will drool,
Cause his sight,
Is one of fright,
We’ll try to flee,
But he will see,
That life is a b*tch.

All the torture,
Hidden in the orchard,
All we do is cry,
We don’t even try,
Serving him for life,
Is a life of strife,
CAUSE LIFE IS A B*TCH!

The defining shrill sound of your voice make my ears bleed,
You watch the blood run down my face,
You sit and say, ”oh my god.”
I feel my heart start to race.

The rose you gave me still had thorns,
And as I grip it tight,
The blood runs down my hand,
And your face is in my sight.

I’m put to sleep, but then wake up,
And you’re the one I see,
You say, “I’m sorry for all I’ve done!”
And I say, “You’re not for me.”

You turn and walk away,
And I go back to sleep,
You come back in the room,
And bow down at my feet.

You wake me up, and choose to say,
”I’m loving you once more.”
As I sit and look you in the eyes, this is what I say,
”You caused my pain and suffering, and look I’m feeling poor!”

When ‘ere I want to paint a picture your all that I see

When ever I try to write I wish you were here with me

But all my anger and all my stress is dwelled up within me

And all I want is to have you beside me

But when its all said and done

And all the roses fall

I’ll never forget you baby

For you’re the one I love!

There they are, flames are accepted as constructive criticizm. I'll post more poetry when they come.

[FoJaR]

your rhymes make no sense, you use words just because they rhyme.

"death is the worst
cause we eat bratwurst
and life is a bitch"

[MalReynolds]

Originally Posted by FoJaR

your rhymes make no sense, you use words just because they rhyme.

"death is the worst
cause we eat bratwurst
and life is a bitch"

That has to be the most brilliant line since

"For God's sake Ace, I'm missing a stomach! Doctors don't grow organs on trees!"

[Chrissi]

This is so bad it actually makes me want to die. I'm sorry. How could you even write this without immediately tossing it in the trash?

[FoJaR]

Originally Posted by MalReynolds

That has to be the most brilliant line since

"For God's sake Ace, I'm missing a stomach! Doctors don't grow organs on trees!"

oh man that is still just so good for some laughs.

[Tibs]

Since birth in ninety-four,
My life had love, there was no sore.
But now, twelve years later, I have been hated,
No sign of love, no one has debated.
September and Dell, truly alike,
Never loved me, they just like Mike.
They insult my face, I'm no hottie,
I'd rather die via viscous viscotti.
I now foresee, what birthday thirteen holds,
No one to come, just lots and lots of molds.
Well, where is the kiss? Can't anyone see?
No girlfriend at all, no joy-filled glee.
So, I shall bid adieu, to a sucky life,
That never involved the cut of a knife.

[mead1]

Hated, not loved.

[cloud321]

Seems like it's complaining too much about life.........

[andy-o24]

Well, I really do suck now don't I? Maybe I should give up on life?

[Windscarredfaith]

At least it made me lol.

[FictionJunction]

I'd excrete on it.