A poem: Rain

[Charlotte Kelly]

My love is a masterpiece
A symphony of bliss
Poetry too beautiful
For any human tongue to pronounce
Like the universe ever expanding
He's infinite
Eternally on my mind
Poisoning me with sweet
Content
Perfection incarnate
A dream
I never believed
Beautiful and inconsistent
He reels me in
And releases
A 10 on the Richter Scale
I'll ride through life
Safe by your side
Wrapped around your finger

I'm yours

Opinions?

[Fission]

is this a poem for lito

[Pseudo Enigma]

Originally Posted by Charlotte Kelly

He reels me in
And releases
A 10 on the Richter Scale

lewd

I have a hard time finding the rain in this poem though...

[Squirtle x3]

Originally Posted by Fission

is this a poem for lito

I don't know why but I srsly lol'ed at this

[Charlotte Kelly]

Boyfriend's name is Ryan I call him Rain.
Whoever lito is can definitely say I wrote it for them. Nothing like a creepy stalker to get the conversation started .
Not meant to be lewd "reels me in and releases" I figured some would think this is but no sometimes he's not that affectionate and sometimes he is. Didn't want to reuse the "hot and cold"
"A 10 on the Richter scale" yeeeeeah that kind of is. Thought I was asexual before I met him then everything got shook up.

[Spenner]

A serious interpretation: I think you are really trusting your emotions here, to the point where you're letting them snowball. There's a lot of flattering things here that all express the same thing-- you feel good about this person. Do you know them at the core, to where you can trust them, without the positive feelings being the reason to do so?

[female]

Originally Posted by fission

is this a poem for lito

hahahahaha

[female]

Originally Posted by Fission

is this a poem for lito

AasdFAhahahaHJAHAH i love u fission ur so funny

[V-Ormix]

twas okay, and I know I'm going to sound like a dick but that felt very generic... I couldn't tell you why it just did :V

edit: maybe your trying too hard, let it flow C:

[Fission]

Originally Posted by Charlotte Kelly

Whoever lito is

litodude

Originally Posted by female

AasdFAhahahaHJAHAH i love u fission ur so funny

:3

as a serious response, your prose is decent but it doesn't really offer any subtleties to make it interesting to interpret

[Cavernio]

Originally Posted by Spenner

A serious interpretation: I think you are really trusting your emotions here, to the point where you're letting them snowball. There's a lot of flattering things here that all express the same thing-- you feel good about this person. Do you know them at the core, to where you can trust them, without the positive feelings being the reason to do so?

You can trust someone without loving them, you can know someone to the core without loving them.
I don't know why she'd not let her emotions soar while they can.

[Spenner]

Originally Posted by Cavernio

You can trust someone without loving them, you can know someone to the core without loving them.
I don't know why she'd not let her emotions soar while they can.

I meant on a personal, emotional level, someone who she can trust to feel these things for an except to be in a worthwhile emotional commitment. If you put your faith in someone who turns out to be manipulative of your clingyness, that's bad news.

[Cavernio]

*shrug* Better to be open than closed. Can't be open if you're skeptical or holding back, part measures are still closed.

[Spenner]

Sure, but you don't want to become vulnerable while doing so. It's not overly cautious, just watching out for yourself. After having it happen to myself multiple times it just becomes a lesson that sticks :b unless you have incredibly good luck or have truly gotten to know someone inside and out then I'd at least watch your step before taking a leap daz all.

[Litodude]

wow

[Litodude]

Originally Posted by Fission

is this a poem for lito

i love you so much oh my god

[evanescence_death4ever]

Originally Posted by Fission

is this a poem for lito

Why is there no 'like' button on FFR?

Oh wait, I'm very glad there is not one. Fission, you are epic.

[Litodude]

Originally Posted by Charlotte Kelly

Boyfriend's name is Ryan I call him Rain.
Whoever lito is can definitely say I wrote it for them. Nothing like a creepy stalker to get the conversation started .
Not meant to be lewd "reels me in and releases" I figured some would think this is but no sometimes he's not that affectionate and sometimes he is. Didn't want to reuse the "hot and cold"
"A 10 on the Richter scale" yeeeeeah that kind of is. Thought I was asexual before I met him then everything got shook up.

sup babe

[alloyus]

To me the structure should've been reworked a bit so some of the ideas actually stay together so it seems more coherent (or maybe you were going for something a little sporadic because that's the way you feel about him? Dunno if you'd think of it that deeply or not I dunno you. Also would've liked to see some punctuation but it's whatevs. Content/metaphor-wise was good to me. Richter scale thing was cool