~Spiraling Into Ebony~

911840 · 05-29-2007, 01:44 AM

story has been taken down, please lock this and let it drift away.

**ShastaTwist** · 05-30-2007, 12:28 AM

A lot of ellipses. Well written.

I can't believe you killed the main character.

911840 · 05-30-2007, 02:45 AM

not only the main character...

but yeah, i'm a fan of elipses, and not the kind that people use in actual speech when they can't think of something to say, the kind that either help illustrate a dramatic pause, or give you a split second to think about what just happened...

and at the end of sentences...

Dragon_Master2557 · 05-30-2007, 10:19 AM

Amazing =^.^= I really enjoyed it!

Especially the ending, it was cute in a dark, gory kind of way.

The only spelling thing I could find was "rising above the see of comparably insignificant twigs"

Is that supposed to be sea?

--anyways--

Great stuff x3

911840 · 05-30-2007, 11:36 AM

thanks, and it's not really supposed to be gory, sure it's death...but still, not like something as simple as that could keep us apart...

glad you enjoyed it, been thinking that if i extend te story further, of course we will have more of a background, but perhaps i should ocntinue it to the other side...

thanks for telling me about the typo, can't believe i haven't seen that one yet...

AeroFoxMaou · 05-30-2007, 10:22 PM

I Like It Alot. Cute

TK_yesillkillubitchboez · 05-30-2007, 10:25 PM

Even though I didn't read the passage, I'm sure it was well written. Good job, even though I don't really care.

911840 · 05-30-2007, 11:21 PM

then why post?

please don't spam for the sake of your post count...

birdgirlxx2003 · 05-31-2007, 12:10 AM

that is so sweet u put it on baby. i dont think i told u but i like it alot and i like the ending. its very sweet and i think that u did a very good job on it. to bad it took u forever to write it...

911840 · 05-31-2007, 12:22 AM

didn't take THAT long...it was the typing, editing, re-editing, losing it, finding it...etc...

the way i see it, the more reviews i get, the better i can make it for you =)

redwrist · 05-31-2007, 12:27 AM

very nice

911840 · 05-31-2007, 12:28 AM

thank you

TK_yesillkillubitchboez · 05-31-2007, 09:49 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 911840

then why post?

please don't spam for the sake of your post count...

Wow this is coming from someone with 12 posts. I'm shivering in me boots. Also I complemented you anyway, so shut up you ass, blockhead, boob, booby, cretin, dimwit, donkey, dork, dumb ox, dumbbell, dunce, dunderhead, fool, halfwit, ignoramus, imbecile, jackass, jerk, kook*, meathead, mental defective, moron, nincompoop, ninny*, nitwit, pinhead*, pointy head, simpleton, stupid, tomfool, twit*, yo-yo.

EDIT: I love the online Thesaurus.
ANOTHER EDIT: Please don't post three times in one thread just to say one sentence.

911840 · 05-31-2007, 10:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TK_yesillkillubitchboez

Wow this is coming from someone with 12 posts. I'm shivering in me boots. Also I complemented him anyway, so shut up you ass, blockhead, boob, booby, cretin, dimwit, donkey, dork, dumb ox, dumbbell, dunce, dunderhead, fool, halfwit, ignoramus, imbecile, jackass, jerk, kook*, meathead, mental defective, moron, nincompoop, ninny*, nitwit, pinhead*, pointy head, simpleton, stupid, tomfool, twit*, yo-yo.

EDIT: I love the online Thesaurus.
ANOTHER EDIT: Please don't post three times in one thread just to say one sentence.

so what? i'm new to the forums, so what if i missed out on experiecing nothing...

complemented 'him'? i assume you were talking to the writer of this story, therefor i am he

i reserve the right to post as many times as needed in my own non-spam thread, and is usually to respond to another person's post, as you just did and i am doing now...

but why would you glance (if even that) at the story and skip to replying to it?

and feel free to continue the fight, sure you're getting more posts, but proportionally it's doing more for me

thanks =)

TK_yesillkillubitchboez · 05-31-2007, 10:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 911840

so what? i'm new to the forums, so what if i missed out on experiecing nothing...

complemented 'him'? i assume you were talking to the writer of this story, therefor i am he

i reserve the right to post as many times as needed in my own non-spam thread, and is usually to respond to another person's post, as you just did and i am doing now...

but why would you glance (if even that) at the story and skip to replying to it?

and feel free to continue the fight, sure you're getting more posts, but proportionally it's doing more for me

thanks =)

Why fight? I have already won. And I don't know why you think this has to do anything with post count. If i was trying to get more post I would post in every thread that i post in. You can't really spam a thread unless you post images. this is because the thread will create a new page after a certain amount of post. BTW I actually corrected my last post before you posted. And what do you know this is more that one sentence, also it has punctuation and capitalization.. You're welcome.

911840 · 05-31-2007, 10:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TK_yesillkillubitchboez

Why fight? I have already won. And I don't know why you think this has to do anything with post count. If i was trying to get more post I would post in every thread that i post in. You can't really spam a thread unless you post images. this is because the thread will create a new page after a certain amount of post. BTW I actually corrected my last post before you posted. And what do you know this is more that one sentence, also it has punctuation and capitalization.. You're welcome.

what you say matters more than how you say it, i use punctuation, although rarely periods or capitilzation unless i'm going to add another sentence on the same paragraph or i'm writing formally...

one sentence...what's wrong with that? sorry i try not to drag stuff out...and sometimes there really isn't more to say if you use the right words the first time.

**ShastaTwist** · 05-31-2007, 11:34 PM

No point in arguing.

Don't post more than once, just edit your previous post.

911840 · 05-31-2007, 11:49 PM

respond to a post under yours by editing the one several posts/pages above it?

meh...i perfer it to look more like a conversation

**ShastaTwist** · 06-1-2007, 05:56 PM

Wow, nevermind, this entire argument you two are having is completely misinterpreted, I think.

Might as well drop it.

911840 · 06-1-2007, 07:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ShastaTwist

Might as well drop it.

/agree ShastaTwist

05-29-2007, 01:44 AM	#1
911840 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 25	~Spiraling Into Ebony~ story has been taken down, please lock this and let it drift away. Last edited by 911840; 07-14-2007 at 10:29 PM..

05-30-2007, 12:28 AM	#2
ShastaTwist FFR Veteran Join Date: Sep 2004 Age: 33 Posts: 599	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ A lot of ellipses. Well written. I can't believe you killed the main character.

05-30-2007, 02:45 AM	#3
911840 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 25	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ not only the main character... but yeah, i'm a fan of elipses, and not the kind that people use in actual speech when they can't think of something to say, the kind that either help illustrate a dramatic pause, or give you a split second to think about what just happened... and at the end of sentences...

05-30-2007, 10:19 AM	#4
Dragon_Master2557 FFR Player Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: on Avenue Q Age: 34 Posts: 164	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ Amazing =^.^= I really enjoyed it! Especially the ending, it was cute in a dark, gory kind of way. The only spelling thing I could find was "rising above the see of comparably insignificant twigs" Is that supposed to be sea? --anyways-- Great stuff x3 __________________ <-----Support

05-30-2007, 11:36 AM	#5
911840 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 25	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ thanks, and it's not really supposed to be gory, sure it's death...but still, not like something as simple as that could keep us apart... glad you enjoyed it, been thinking that if i extend te story further, of course we will have more of a background, but perhaps i should ocntinue it to the other side... thanks for telling me about the typo, can't believe i haven't seen that one yet...

05-30-2007, 10:22 PM	#6
AeroFoxMaou FFR Player Join Date: May 2007 Location: WarTown, GA Age: 36 Posts: 2	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ I Like It Alot. Cute __________________ Taking it faster and harder than ever before!!

05-30-2007, 10:25 PM	#7
TK_yesillkillubitchboez FFR Player Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Overland, MO Age: 31 Posts: 240	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ Even though I didn't read the passage, I'm sure it was well written. Good job, even though I don't really care. __________________ Like Games? Go here! join the forums! Now in Gold phase! http://arcade.x3nopro.com/downloads.html

05-30-2007, 11:21 PM	#8
911840 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 25	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ then why post? please don't spam for the sake of your post count...

05-31-2007, 12:10 AM	#9
birdgirlxx2003 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Lead, South Dakota Age: 31 Posts: 7	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ that is so sweet u put it on baby. i dont think i told u but i like it alot and i like the ending. its very sweet and i think that u did a very good job on it. to bad it took u forever to write it... __________________ *JEB*

05-31-2007, 12:22 AM	#10
911840 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 25	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ didn't take THAT long...it was the typing, editing, re-editing, losing it, finding it...etc... the way i see it, the more reviews i get, the better i can make it for you =)

05-31-2007, 12:28 AM	#12
911840 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 25	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ thank you

05-31-2007, 11:34 PM	#17
ShastaTwist FFR Veteran Join Date: Sep 2004 Age: 33 Posts: 599	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ No point in arguing. Don't post more than once, just edit your previous post.

05-31-2007, 11:49 PM	#18
911840 FFR Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Elsewhere Posts: 25	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ respond to a post under yours by editing the one several posts/pages above it? meh...i perfer it to look more like a conversation

06-1-2007, 05:56 PM	#19
ShastaTwist FFR Veteran Join Date: Sep 2004 Age: 33 Posts: 599	Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~ Wow, nevermind, this entire argument you two are having is completely misinterpreted, I think. Might as well drop it.

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