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11-18-2010, 05:49 PM | #3 |
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Re: did this for school each part corresponds to a painting in "the voyage of life" b
Well written, although if I may make a minor suggestion, the "But O!" and "But alas!" sound out of place, and are overused. I'd consider changing/cutting it
Nice job though c: |
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