04-4-2012, 05:42 PM | #1 |
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Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
Okay so um (this is a great way to start)
I grew up in Brooks City-Base, Texas, which is a military base located a little ways away from San Antonio. I don’t know if you know what military bases are like but they are very insulated and bizarre communities whose halfway attempts at non-insulation and -bizarreness make them even more insulated and bizarre (like for example there were Burger Kings and other such fast food chains in Brooks City-Base but they were all weird Military Base-esque Burger Kings with focus group-tested menu items and American flags hanging everywhere). The military-run school system there and on all other military bases is very strange in an almost self-parodically militaristic way. Like for example one day one of the teachers was teaching us about nuclear explosions and he took out a map of Texas and then another one specifically of the San Antonio area and started drawing concentric circles around Brooks City-Base with a protractor, saying that if a nuclear bomb were to be dropped in the area then everything within these circles would be destroyed. You can start at your house and draw increasingly large concentric circles, engulfing all of your friends’ houses and all of the Military Burger Kings and then also the public pool from which the families of two teenagers were permanently banned because the two teenagers were caught covertly trying to **** each other underwater while surrounded by old women laboriously swimming laps and kids wearing one-piece suits stuffed with swim bubbles (the parents of one of the teenagers never forgave him, moved away, founded an experimental company predicated entirely upon the nebulous mission statement of “ideas worth spreading” while their kid was left to enlist in the army), and then you can keep drawing these concentric circles even outside of the state of Texas. You can keep reaching outward until you reach even here, in Palm Springs, California, where I am speaking to you all, you in business suits and ties and me in a ratty T-shirt and sweatpants; you all shuffling in your seats and looking at your shoes and me standing up here on this stage, almost robotically still; I am speaking to you and you are all clearly not listening so goodbye. ---- i bet the spacing messed up a shitton Last edited by robertsona; 04-4-2012 at 07:36 PM.. |
04-4-2012, 07:34 PM | #2 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
aw cmon like a bunch of people have read this at least say something. even just say it sucks. no dont say that
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04-4-2012, 07:59 PM | #3 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
Do you have to be american to get it.
Because I didn't. Is it meant to be rapped or something ?
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04-4-2012, 08:01 PM | #4 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
no
although if it helps here's info on what a ted talk is http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/TED_%28conference%29 theyve been getting very very big lately |
04-4-2012, 08:04 PM | #5 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
I also didn't really get it. Is it supposed to be a TED Talk?
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04-4-2012, 08:05 PM | #6 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
the narrator is supposed to be speaking at a ted talk yeah
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04-4-2012, 08:14 PM | #7 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
i literally dislike the idea of "explaining" things like this so much that i'm gonna put it in spoiler tags. not because it's "above explanation", i just dont like writing explanatory things i guess because yeah part of the poem is just its weirdness which may be ruined by this but whatever
also the title should be "2/7/09" because i think thats when ted talks happen Last edited by robertsona; 04-4-2012 at 08:21 PM.. |
04-4-2012, 08:21 PM | #8 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
a link to the talk would be cool
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04-4-2012, 08:22 PM | #9 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
i'm not sure if you're being facetious but this isn't an actual ted talk lol
although i guess i see how the format of the title makes it seem like an actual event |
04-4-2012, 08:52 PM | #10 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
lmfao you guys cmon
this was really entertaining, thx for sharing. the choice to use lines for this sort of thing is interesting but i guess makes sense as far as being good for bringing out the Tonal Progression of the whole deal
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04-4-2012, 08:55 PM | #11 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
i guess it just makes it sound more disjointed? idk it could probably go either way (line breaks or no line breaks)
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04-4-2012, 08:57 PM | #12 |
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didnt actually read it until now rofl. cool stuff
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04-4-2012, 09:01 PM | #13 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
I don't have a literary sensibility to anything that isn't french because I'm no good with languages sorry
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
I don't really see the line breaks as adding much to the poem. I feel like a paragraph would have been sufficient seeing as though it is, or is at least based upon, a speech or speech format. Your explanation is pretty much what I thought it would be, but who the speaker is was kind of a stretch (at least I thought) based on what is given in the poem. I suppose I can see it, but I wouldn't have connected that I don't think.
Overall, I can see what you're trying to do with this (the disjointed thoughts and kind of fun-making tone of the speaker). Not sure the whole meaning, but I can see what you have here on the surface. -o24
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04-10-2012, 10:39 AM | #15 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
sorry robertsona, but I just read the wiki entry about ted talks since I had no idea what they were and I can't help but talk about that rather than your own work which is very modern and I wouldn't call it a poem but is kinda neat but not really my thing, but damned TED talks sound like a ****ing joke for rich people to pat themselves on the back and tell themselves that they're smart and make them feel above everyone else who can only convey their great ideas cheaply via friends and internet forums where we ultimately see that it's not revolutionary ideas that change the world but individuals who want to make a ton of money or who crave fame and they manipulate society into getting these not by revolutionary ideas but by taking advantage of societal constructs
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04-10-2012, 11:23 AM | #16 |
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Re: Poem: “TED Talk - 3/7/09”
I thought it was an attempt to use ombrilism to explain a perspective of military life.
Oh wait- Google doesn't know ombrilism and I learned that at school in french like last week rofl.. The concept of ombrilism is to create a context to explain stuff and instead of getting to a point, you use that context to create another context to explain something else related to the precedent context etc. Now we have military life and context that gets actually gets somewhere since there's a point so, that's interesting I guess. I like the idea of drawing circles and going in circle. Last edited by Hakulyte; 04-10-2012 at 11:35 AM.. |
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