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I have an exam coming up next week, for which one section is writing an essay. I'd apprectiate anyone reading over a practise version I did and making comments on how I could improve/weaknesses/incorrect bits etc....
Bear in mind we have 30 mins and a one A4 page limit to write it, so there are lots of grammatical errors:

1 'A little learning is a dangerous thing'.
(Alexander Pope)
Write a unified essay in which you address the following:
- Explain what you think the author means by this statement.
- Advance an argument against the statement above, i.e. in support of the proposition ‘a little learning is not a dangerous thing’.
- What do you think determines whether or not learning can be a dangerous thing?

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What A. Pope means by this statement is that to have ‘little’ knowledge of how to deal with a situation may lead to disastrous consequences by your actions when placed in that situation. It is said that a wise man ‘knows what he does not know’; If one is poorly knowledgeable in a certain subject, he may still think he is adequately informed, as a direct result of being poorly informed! The situation where this can cause most damage is in emergencies; such as the need to drive a car without proper training, or handling a gun. In both scenarios, an accident is likely to happen, due to a false sense of confidence.

In a different context, poor knowledge of someone is likely to lead to being suspicious of him/her. These judgements may be completely unfounded, but deal the same damage as if the suspicions are true.

However in other circumstances, it may be beneficial to have at least a little knowledge of something; e.g. if you were lost in an unfamiliar area. Here you could at least make some progress in finding the area you are meant to be. Similarly, if you have some ability to speak a language in a foreign country, it is likely to serve you well in answering any queries you may have. As long as you are not given a false sense of control, and use your knowledge wisely, it can only work to benefit you.

Whether a little learning is dangerous or not does not necessarily depend on the situation, but also on how the person values that information. If one is arrogant to assume that he/she is adequately informed and tries not to be cautious, it may serve that person badly. The definition of ‘little’ also comes into importance here; if one has indeed next to no background on a situation, but it turns out the situation demands little of them, then that would be all that is needed. However if they are placed in deceptively complex situation, then it is unlikely that a ‘little learning’ will be safe.
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They basically mark you on content/organisation/style/correctness.

Thanks!

Also...if your feeling really generous, please tell me how it compares to this essay, which scores the maximum of 15.0 marks:
http://www.bmat.org.uk/downloads/spmenessay1.pdf