wats your interpretation?

[The_Q]

Again, you assume that more words dillutes, when in actuallity, a large string of words can give a much stronger tone than just a few. For instance, Charles Dickens. I'm told that I can put this "voice" into my writing very well, even essays. Unfortunately, I don't think I've been posting to my full potential here so I'm afraid no one else has had to read such posts.

NOTE: I never said anything about the poem being bad because of it not making sense, it only attributes to the confusion that caused frustration. I will agree with Poltech, it had no format, it was all just insanity. If you had done it in verse I would have definately accepted it much more. Another thing that bothered me is that if you were trying to get a message accross, it seemed to be a rather naive message. Monsters, bullets and gore? Floating in harmony around planets? If that's not mood swings and emotions only, I'm not quite sure how to interpret that. It seems to say "I need Prozac and something better to do." Never write poems about emotion, it's stereotypical and people will immediatly assume you're some depressed kid. Or a crazed Goth.

Now, I won't go so far as to say that's not art. That's just a baby step. I don't want to hold you back, I'm asking you to hit the afterburners, go deeper into more rich literature as fast as possible. I want to read what you write. Remember, even a 5 year old on a violin sounds awful when he's learning the basics, but by the time he's 15 he'll be playing with the pros. Besides, if you do, I might gain a taste for poetry.

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