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  • cixOclock
    FFR Player
    • Dec 2009
    • 226
    #1

    Help me out, please?

    I just published a short story, and unfortunately it is by views only, so please, anyone or anything even if you're a cat with a mustache and a bowler hat with a dog stuffed rug, read my story and leave a comment.

    Even if you don't read it, page views count!

    http://www.associatedcontent.com/article/9179803/the_boy_named_sue.html?cat=44


    I don't ask for a lot but please help me in this...

    Yes if you're wondering I do actually own a cat with a mustache and bowler hat.
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    • ELRayford
      Custom User Title
      • May 2004
      • 1547
      #2
      Re: Help me out, please?

      Bump, because I have never really bump anything. I CBF to read things so just clicked it cause you asked xD

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        • DarknessXoXLight
          sonder
          • Mar 2007
          • 2279
          #3
          Re: Help me out, please?

          clicky clicky clicky.

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            • andy-o24
              Married Man
              • May 2006
              • 1525
              #4
              Re: Help me out, please?

              The story was alright on first read and I'm sure I could find deeper meaning in it than the whole name affair, but I'm not feeling it right now. Fix the obvious typos and maybe a few other conventions, but for the most part a solid short story.

              -o24
              Originally posted by hi19hi19
              Best strat: enjoy the game, play what you feel like when you feel like it. Don't think about what you are doing or why, enjoy the gameplay, the artistry behind the stepfile, and enjoy the music.

              When the game isn't fun for you anymore, take a break. It's not a job, nobody here is professional and getting paid to play and force themselves to constantly improve... it's a game.

              Originally posted by Shashakiro
              Yeah, FFR is addicting...I don't think I'll get bored with this game unless I somehow become the best at it, which won't happen.

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                • igotrhythm
                  Fractals!
                  • Sep 2004
                  • 6535
                  #5
                  Re: Help me out, please?

                  Clicked on link.

                  Practiced my jacking on the F5 key to artificially bump the page view count (I've tried this, it actually works).

                  CBF to actually read the damn thing, but that's nothing against you...I just don't like songfics.
                  Originally posted by thesunfan
                  I literally spent 10 minutes in the library looking for the TWG forum on Smogon and couldn't find it what the fuck is this witchcraft IGR

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                    • Crashfan3
                      FFR Player
                      • Nov 2006
                      • 2937
                      #6
                      Re: Help me out, please?

                      Clicked, but... my mom had a Cash tape that she played until it died (took 6 goddamn years) and it had that song on it. I hated that song. -_-

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                        • Emithith
                          FFR Player
                          • Sep 2008
                          • 1784
                          #7
                          Re: Help me out, please?

                          I don't know anything about the song, but I felt nothing when reading this story. No tragedy, no moral, nothing.

                          The writing isn't bad, the descriptive sentences were excellent, but I just don't feel any "oh this guy is a badass." or "how tragic that a father and son shot eachother to death" etc. (I think that's what you were going for, anyway.)

                          Just a opinion from me. I don't intend to make anyone feel offended

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                            • cixOclock
                              FFR Player
                              • Dec 2009
                              • 226
                              #8
                              Re: Help me out, please?

                              Oh no trust me I'm not offended, I wrote the story in thirty minutes. But thanks for the feedback!
                              And yes it helped, you guys are bastards 451 views in day :P

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                                • Cold Kitten
                                  i love (purple things)
                                  • May 2009
                                  • 1341
                                  #9
                                  Re: Help me out, please?

                                  There. Have some more F5'ing. xD


                                  Originally posted by MinaciousGrace
                                  it's like putting training wheels on gutterguards covered in styrofoam made of bubblewrap with a velcro fanny pack inside a condom

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                                    • ELRayford
                                      Custom User Title
                                      • May 2004
                                      • 1547
                                      #10
                                      Re: Help me out, please?

                                      I would assume it is counting unique views. If not enjoy some "Multi-tabb reload-every" :3

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                                        • cixOclock
                                          FFR Player
                                          • Dec 2009
                                          • 226
                                          #11
                                          Re: Help me out, please?

                                          Haha, well thanks.

                                          I might have to get a cat with a bowler hat now and a mustache... o_o TO THE INTERNET!

                                          And again everyone thank you, it's funny how it works though, because when I first put it up on the site it only had like two advertisements, and now the whole page is filled with them, money I will never see from those ads, but interesting.

                                          Hopefully I'll be able to put out more stuff on the site even if it doesn't get a wide audience, I searched for it on Google, Bing, MSN and none of those search engines brought it up.

                                          Anyways, thank you

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                                            • Emithith
                                              FFR Player
                                              • Sep 2008
                                              • 1784
                                              #12
                                              Re: Help me out, please?

                                              elohel adblocker.
                                              I didn't even know they were there.

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                                                • FrozenReesesPieces
                                                  FFR Player
                                                  • Dec 2011
                                                  • 4
                                                  #13
                                                  Re: Help me out, please?

                                                  I thought it was good. There are some grammar mistakes and whatnot which kind of took me away from the story a few times. I did laugh at the ending though

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                                                    • Cavernio
                                                      sunshine and rainbows
                                                      • Feb 2006
                                                      • 1987
                                                      #14
                                                      Re: Help me out, please?

                                                      I'm confused, why do you want views?
                                                      You say you don't care if someone actually reads it, imply it's garbage you made in 30 min, fully acknowledge that it needs some more work to be good, and then you say that you don't get money from ads, so I have no idea what your motivation for publishing?

                                                      It isn't a bad read, definitely editing would help it a lot. You have good imagery.

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                                                        • ghost-
                                                          Banned
                                                          • Dec 2010
                                                          • 787
                                                          #15
                                                          Re: Help me out, please?

                                                          i dunno i liked it

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