if you dont like it dont post anything

**foilman8805** · 08-26-2008, 03:08 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

YOUR and YOU ARE are not the same word.

If you're going to make an attempt at poetry, your grammar and spelling need to come up a few levels.

**robertsona** · 08-26-2008, 03:10 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

Originally posted by bbe-doll

Tittle:

lol

**robertsona** · 08-26-2008, 03:11 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

also criticism is the first step in making poems and everything else so
if you dont like it dont post anything=no

**NFD** · 08-26-2008, 03:17 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

Also double posting doesn't help, hypocrite<3

Tittle, ftw.

**Adamaja456** · 08-26-2008, 03:20 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

they are alright. nothing that special about them.

They seem to follow the generic "hold me, kiss me, etc."

you might want to open up more and use more description so the poem can reflect a more personal feeling.

The poems you have right now sound like something anyone could write =/ *shrugs*
just giving my 2 cents worth

**robertsona** · 08-26-2008, 03:26 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

Originally posted by NFD

Also double posting doesn't help, hypocrite<3

Tittle, ftw.

how am i a hypocrite?
if i said double-posting is bad, and then double posted, THAT would make me a hypocrite.

**robertsona** · 08-26-2008, 03:26 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

double-posting is bad

**bbe-doll** · 08-26-2008, 03:36 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

ok this is pis$in me off ... every poem i write gets bad comments like wtf ..... cant you guys respect me for atleast trying

**robertsona** · 08-26-2008, 03:38 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

you have to expect A LOT of criticism when posting here.
if you can't handle it, stop posting.
also, no need to censor pissin

**igotrhythm** · 08-26-2008, 04:08 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

Frankly, Doll, how are you supposed to improve if nobody tells you that you need to get better?

At least your friend's material is all happy, which is a welcome relief from your everything-must-die perspective. Try your hand at imagery, adding a meter/rhyme scheme, or subjects besides the normal emotional ups and downs of teenage existence; for example, colorful memories of a real or imaginary event.

**infinity.** · 08-26-2008, 04:39 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

Originally posted by bbe-doll

ok this is pis$in me off ... every poem i write gets bad comments like wtf ..... cant you guys respect me for atleast trying

you'd get positive comments if they werent so generic and filled with mistakes..

**Crashfan3** · 08-26-2008, 04:44 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

I'm gonna use that last one as an example.

You used...
When [...]
Your [...]
...for everything except for the last line. It almost sounds like part of a programming script, if x = yes then do action.y.
Also, your words were a bit plain.

Try to make it a little less like a set of instructions and with more interesting words, for example:
When I'm alone
You're there to keep me company
If my tears are falling
You smile and chase the sadness away
etc, etc.

EDIT: Also, you have to be open to criticism, so long as the poster doesn't just say "hey ur poem sucked go die", people like that are ignorant. Instead you should learn from those of us who say "Hey, you could have used a better metaphor in line 21, etc, etc".

**MalReynolds** · 08-26-2008, 04:49 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

If your next thread has a poem in it and you post in before 5 days are up, I'm locking it. Crappy poetry /= literature.

**Tokzic** · 08-26-2008, 07:55 PM

Re: if you dont like it dont post anything

if you dont like it dont post anything

I think you're a little confused as to how life works.

If you want feedback, you show your work to other people, and they will tell you what they think of it.

If you don't want feedback, you do not show your work to other people.

You can't show someone your work and say, "ONLY GIVE ME POSITIVE COMMENTS PLEASE." If you do this, your only goal from writing your bad poem was to have people stroke your ego, which makes you pathetic, and nobody will do anyway.

Besides, I can't imagine why you'd want people to give you false praise in the first place. "GRATE JOB DUDE DATS AWSOME." "omg ur poemz rock i luv them!!" Is that what you want? Then write a good poem. There's no getting around the fact that these poems are horrible, and any positive comments you get are pity.

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