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  • JackOneOff
    FFR Player
    • Jan 2008
    • 6

    #1

    Richard; The Traffic Warden

    "you ****in' piece of commy ****" said the black geeza with a z in his 'fro
    "call me a commy again and I'll ****in' **** you up so ****in' bad you'll ****in' die" said the commy
    A man runs into the aeroplane cabin where the two ****'s are having the conversation. "There is snakes on this ****in' plane"
    "Oh Noes'" the commy replies.
    The geeza with a z in his 'fro stands up saying "**** YOU"
    The commy nuts the geeza with a z in his 'fro in his nut sack,
    The geeza with a z in his 'fro *falls so good now* *hitting his head on the floor now*
    The man who ran in when the two were having a conversation says "STOP FANNYING AROUND THERE'S MOTHER****ING SNAKES ON A MOTHER****ING PLANE,"
    The commy, *pulls out gun now* *loads it so fast* *aims at the man who ran in when him and the geeza with a z in his 'fro where having a conversation*
    *fires off a bullet* *rips the skin* *rips the muscle* *rips the tissue* *rips the brain*
    Some lil kid runs in and shouts "MY CAR IS ALIIVEEEE" some car drives over and transforms, then all the transformer robos come and fight for some prostitute robot.
    then someone pokes there head around door and goes "Ahh Bistro" and then disappears.
    *then camera cuts to some family watchin a movie* dad jumps over the couch holding popcorn and says "Redenbackers microwave popcorn M' boooooyyy"
    *the camera cuts back to the plane, where the geeza with a z in his 'fro, the commy, and The man who ran in when the two were having a conversation are all sitting at a table,*
    Then the commy starts puking up and throws up in the death race 2000 memorobilia box
  • Tokzic
    FFR Player
    • May 2005
    • 6878

    #2
    Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

    looks like the bar has been raised on the lit forum because this is the best story i've ever read

    we're going to need to step it up guys

    Last edited by Tokzic: Today at 11:59 PM. Reason: wait what

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    • JackOneOff
      FFR Player
      • Jan 2008
      • 6

      #3
      Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

      What's with the god damn filter. Bloody thing. Now you don't get the full emotional impact of the story and the moral underlining it bares.

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      • Crashfan3
        FFR Player
        • Nov 2006
        • 2937

        #4
        Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

        I lol'd.
        </sarcasm>

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        • Aleste
          stating the obvious.
          • Oct 2003
          • 337

          #5
          Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

          Originally posted by JackOneOff
          moral underlining it bares.
          ...i see.

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          • meno_rocks123
            FFR Player
            • Nov 2005
            • 2324

            #6
            Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

            I lol'd

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            • NFD
              FFR Player
              • Nov 2007
              • 4715

              #7
              Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

              I lol'ed at you lol'ing.

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              • ShastaTwist
                FFR Veteran
                • Sep 2004
                • 599

                #8
                Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                What?

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                • Jtehanonymous
                  Hunger Games Hunty
                  • Jan 2007
                  • 3770

                  #9
                  Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                  I loved how I could picture myself there.

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                  • jugglinguy
                    Use me as a porta-potty
                    • Dec 2006
                    • 4319

                    #10
                    Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                    Please tell me you'll be writing more, and longer, stories in the future?
                    Originally posted by Jem
                    Jem is my name. No one else is the same!

                    You're Aja Leith of the Holograms! You're very exotic, intelligent and sophisticated.

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                    • Engler
                      FFR Player
                      • Jan 2007
                      • 2340

                      #11
                      Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                      Oh, come now you fools, can't you see?

                      THIS MAN IS BRILLIANT.

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                      • andy-o24
                        Married Man
                        • May 2006
                        • 1525

                        #12
                        Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                        First off, I did NOT lol.

                        Secondly, what you did in this 'story' was take parts from Snakes on a Plane and Transformers and mash them together in some strange way to make it seem like a story. The addition of the popcorn was completely uncalled for and should not have been made in this attempt at story writing.

                        Thirdly, I don't want you to hate me because I'm taking this seriously. That's just who I am, I take things seriously. Arguing on the internet though, as all should know, is AWESOME which is why taking things seriously makes life more interesting.

                        Next time you attempt to write a story, long or short, use your own matterials. Thanks.

                        -o24
                        Originally posted by hi19hi19
                        Best strat: enjoy the game, play what you feel like when you feel like it. Don't think about what you are doing or why, enjoy the gameplay, the artistry behind the stepfile, and enjoy the music.

                        When the game isn't fun for you anymore, take a break. It's not a job, nobody here is professional and getting paid to play and force themselves to constantly improve... it's a game.

                        Originally posted by Shashakiro
                        Yeah, FFR is addicting...I don't think I'll get bored with this game unless I somehow become the best at it, which won't happen.

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                        • JackOneOff
                          FFR Player
                          • Jan 2008
                          • 6

                          #13
                          Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                          First off, I did NOT lol. - I never said you did...

                          Secondly, what you did in this 'story' was take parts from Snakes on a Plane and Transformers and mash them together in some strange way to make it seem like a story. The addition of the popcorn was completely uncalled for and should not have been made in this attempt at story writing. - 'Attempt'? I've made the story, and it does not matter if you think it is crap or not, at the end of the day, it is still a story.

                          Thirdly, I don't want you to hate me because I'm taking this seriously. That's just who I am, I take things seriously. Arguing on the internet though, as all should know, is AWESOME which is why taking things seriously makes life more interesting. - ... okay... I don't know why you had to rant about yourself there...

                          Next time you attempt to write a story, long or short, use your own matterials. Thanks. - Use my own what? What is 'Matterials'? Do you mean 'Material', and do not put an 's' on the end of 'Material' either.

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                          • MalReynolds
                            CHOCK FULL O' NUTRIENTS
                            • Sep 2003
                            • 6571

                            #14
                            Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                            No. You haven't made a story. A story has a narrative. What you did was take parts of narratives and put them together. Once again, not a story.

                            Most stories have beginnings, middles, and ends that are clearly defined. You don't seem like James Joyce to me, so I doubt you're going to write anything groundbreaking that doesn't follow the beginning-middle-end pattern.

                            You're nitpicking at this guy's grammar - did you even read your original post?

                            I don't know if you're trying to be funny or if you're just arrogantly defending your work. I thought it was a joke at first, but after your latest post, I'm not sure anymore.
                            "A new take on the epic fantasy genre... Darkly comic, relatable characters... twisted storyline."

                            "Readers who prefer tension and romance, Maledictions: The Offering, delivers... As serious YA fiction, I’ll give it five stars out of five. As a novel? Four and a half." - Liz Ellor


                            My new novel:

                            Maledictions: The Offering.

                            Now in Paperback!

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                            • Tokzic
                              FFR Player
                              • May 2005
                              • 6878

                              #15
                              Re: Richard; The Traffic Warden

                              mal

                              this guy is clearly above us

                              do not question his mastery of language

                              Last edited by Tokzic: Today at 11:59 PM. Reason: wait what

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