~Spiraling Into Ebony~

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  • 911840
    FFR Player
    • Apr 2006
    • 25
    #1

    ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

    story has been taken down, please lock this and let it drift away.
    Last edited by 911840; 07-14-2007, 09:29 PM.
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    • ShastaTwist
      FFR Veteran
      • Sep 2004
      • 599
      #2
      Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

      A lot of ellipses. Well written.

      I can't believe you killed the main character.

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        • 911840
          FFR Player
          • Apr 2006
          • 25
          #3
          Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

          not only the main character...

          but yeah, i'm a fan of elipses, and not the kind that people use in actual speech when they can't think of something to say, the kind that either help illustrate a dramatic pause, or give you a split second to think about what just happened...

          and at the end of sentences...

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            • Dragon_Master2557
              FFR Player
              • Jul 2004
              • 164
              #4
              Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

              Amazing =^.^= I really enjoyed it!

              Especially the ending, it was cute in a dark, gory kind of way.

              The only spelling thing I could find was "rising above the see of comparably insignificant twigs"

              Is that supposed to be sea?

              --anyways--

              Great stuff x3


              <-----Support

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                • 911840
                  FFR Player
                  • Apr 2006
                  • 25
                  #5
                  Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                  thanks, and it's not really supposed to be gory, sure it's death...but still, not like something as simple as that could keep us apart...

                  glad you enjoyed it, been thinking that if i extend te story further, of course we will have more of a background, but perhaps i should ocntinue it to the other side...

                  thanks for telling me about the typo, can't believe i haven't seen that one yet...

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                    • AeroFoxMaou
                      FFR Player
                      • May 2007
                      • 2
                      #6
                      Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                      I Like It Alot. Cute

                      Taking it faster and harder than ever before!!

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                        • TK_yesillkillubitchboez
                          FFR Player
                          • Jun 2006
                          • 240
                          #7
                          Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                          Even though I didn't read the passage, I'm sure it was well written. Good job, even though I don't really care.

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                            • 911840
                              FFR Player
                              • Apr 2006
                              • 25
                              #8
                              Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                              then why post?

                              please don't spam for the sake of your post count...

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                                • birdgirlxx2003
                                  FFR Player
                                  • Apr 2006
                                  • 7
                                  #9
                                  Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                                  that is so sweet u put it on baby. i dont think i told u but i like it alot and i like the ending. its very sweet and i think that u did a very good job on it. to bad it took u forever to write it...
                                  JEB

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                                    • 911840
                                      FFR Player
                                      • Apr 2006
                                      • 25
                                      #10
                                      Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                                      didn't take THAT long...it was the typing, editing, re-editing, losing it, finding it...etc...

                                      the way i see it, the more reviews i get, the better i can make it for you =)

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                                        • redwrist
                                          FFR Player
                                          • May 2005
                                          • 392
                                          #11
                                          Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                                          very nice









                                          Originally posted by XXXsmittyXXX
                                          i just crapped in my panties

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                                            • 911840
                                              FFR Player
                                              • Apr 2006
                                              • 25
                                              #12
                                              Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                                              thank you

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                                                • TK_yesillkillubitchboez
                                                  FFR Player
                                                  • Jun 2006
                                                  • 240
                                                  #13
                                                  Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                                                  Originally posted by 911840
                                                  then why post?

                                                  please don't spam for the sake of your post count...
                                                  Wow this is coming from someone with 12 posts. I'm shivering in me boots. Also I complemented you anyway, so shut up you ass, blockhead, boob, booby, cretin, dimwit, donkey, dork, dumb ox, dumbbell, dunce, dunderhead, fool, halfwit, ignoramus, imbecile, jackass, jerk, kook*, meathead, mental defective, moron, nincompoop, ninny*, nitwit, pinhead*, pointy head, simpleton, stupid, tomfool, twit*, yo-yo.

                                                  EDIT: I love the online Thesaurus.
                                                  ANOTHER EDIT: Please don't post three times in one thread just to say one sentence.
                                                  Last edited by TK_yesillkillubitchboez; 05-31-2007, 08:57 PM.

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                                                    • 911840
                                                      FFR Player
                                                      • Apr 2006
                                                      • 25
                                                      #14
                                                      Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                                                      Originally posted by TK_yesillkillubitchboez
                                                      Wow this is coming from someone with 12 posts. I'm shivering in me boots. Also I complemented him anyway, so shut up you ass, blockhead, boob, booby, cretin, dimwit, donkey, dork, dumb ox, dumbbell, dunce, dunderhead, fool, halfwit, ignoramus, imbecile, jackass, jerk, kook*, meathead, mental defective, moron, nincompoop, ninny*, nitwit, pinhead*, pointy head, simpleton, stupid, tomfool, twit*, yo-yo.

                                                      EDIT: I love the online Thesaurus.
                                                      ANOTHER EDIT: Please don't post three times in one thread just to say one sentence.
                                                      so what? i'm new to the forums, so what if i missed out on experiecing nothing...

                                                      complemented 'him'? i assume you were talking to the writer of this story, therefor i am he

                                                      i reserve the right to post as many times as needed in my own non-spam thread, and is usually to respond to another person's post, as you just did and i am doing now...

                                                      but why would you glance (if even that) at the story and skip to replying to it?

                                                      and feel free to continue the fight, sure you're getting more posts, but proportionally it's doing more for me

                                                      thanks =)

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                                                        • TK_yesillkillubitchboez
                                                          FFR Player
                                                          • Jun 2006
                                                          • 240
                                                          #15
                                                          Re: ~Spiraling Into Ebony~

                                                          Originally posted by 911840
                                                          so what? i'm new to the forums, so what if i missed out on experiecing nothing...

                                                          complemented 'him'? i assume you were talking to the writer of this story, therefor i am he

                                                          i reserve the right to post as many times as needed in my own non-spam thread, and is usually to respond to another person's post, as you just did and i am doing now...

                                                          but why would you glance (if even that) at the story and skip to replying to it?

                                                          and feel free to continue the fight, sure you're getting more posts, but proportionally it's doing more for me

                                                          thanks =)
                                                          Why fight? I have already won. And I don't know why you think this has to do anything with post count. If i was trying to get more post I would post in every thread that i post in. You can't really spam a thread unless you post images. this is because the thread will create a new page after a certain amount of post. BTW I actually corrected my last post before you posted. And what do you know this is more that one sentence, also it has punctuation and capitalization.. You're welcome.
                                                          Last edited by TK_yesillkillubitchboez; 05-31-2007, 09:16 PM. Reason: forgot to say capitalization.

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