Uh oh, poetry.

[Erothyme]

The cleverest phrasings,
Orations amazing,
Written by a poet, at best
Allow tiny truths and
Tension thereof to
Temporarily lift from his chest.

This twisting and weaving
Of flowery speaking
May leave many people impressed,
But only in silence
Devoid of defiance
Can poets be truly at rest.

[Verruckter]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

Short and sweet. I liked it. Nice rhythmic and rimes, good images.

[vantilburg]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

I liked the flow to it, it's almost musical.
It also has a theme instead of just throwing arbitrary and unorthodox words together, which a lot of people do when writing poetry. And as Verruckter said, short and sweet.
10/10

[All_That_Chaz]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

How meta. I like it.

[Erothyme]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

How meta.

<3

[kitkat9]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

Its a very well written piece I like it very muchos.

[lord_carbo]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

I love it. Very very awesome poem. But I think "Briefly lift up from his chest" instead of "Temporarily lift from his chest" would make the poem sound SO much better. And I think "penned by the poet, at best" works slightly better than "written by a poet." Both of these edits are just so it fits the rhythm better.

So with those edits, the poem reads:

The cleverest phrasings,
Orations amazing,
Penned by the poet, at best
Allow tiny truths and
Tension thereof to
Briefly lift up from his chest.

This twisting and weaving
Of flowery speaking
May leave many people impressed,
But only in silence
Devoid of defiance
Can poets be truly at rest.

personally I feel it reads much better, especially that last line of the first stanza. That other edit might be too thesaurus-y but it fits the rhythm better. eh.

really, though, I ****ing love this poem.

[passivegirl]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

Very nice work. While I don't find it an absolutely necessarily change, I do agree with carbo's suggestion. Again, though, fantastic piece!

[Erothyme]

Re: Uh oh, poetry.

I see where you're coming from, Carbo. However, the problem is that we are reading it with different enunciation. I understand, though, that the ease with which the intended enunciation can be missed can be seen as something of a flaw. Regardless, I prefer the original, and respectfully refuse your edits. 8)

Think:

The cleverest phrasings,
Orations amazing, Writ-
-ten by a poet, at best
Allow tiny truths and
Tension thereof to Tempo-
-rarily lift from his chest.