Superficial Desires

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  • u84
    FFR Veteran
    • Jul 2006
    • 1921
    #16
    Re: Superficial Desires

    Alright, thanks guys. I just edited it a bit. Your critiquing was really helpful.

    P.S. I wrote this up from in my head within minutes, so I didn't really edit the lack of punctuation. Thanks for letting me know, though.
    Originally posted by ryanisadouche
    I woke up this morning wearing my new ffr shirt which confused me.

    Then i remembered i found the package last night while drunk and put it on in excitement, then immediately passed out.


    Last edited by: Tasselfoot; 7 minutes ago. Reason: I am your MILF.

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      • Verruckter
        FFR Player
        • Apr 2004
        • 2707
        #17
        Re: Superficial Desires

        Still meh.

        imo

        I'd start over again and think imagination, not literal.
        Truth lies in loneliness, When hope is long gone by -Blind Guardian, The Soulforged
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