Dear love

[cdwolf]

a random poem by me:

Dear love of my life
How was your night
How I miss you so
I wish I didn't have to go
When we are together
My heart feels light as a feather
I feel happier than I ever have
You truly make me glad
I will love you for the rest of my life
You saw who I really was
You accepted me despite my flaws
I wish I could be holding your hand
Smile with you as we stand
In each other's arms
And we wont break each other's hearts
So I am writing this to tell you
I loved from the start with all my heart
Your lover always and forever.

[MooMoo_Cowfreak]

Re: Dear love

It's sweet, but it needs more rhythm, forced rhymes are no fun, and keep it rhyming the whole time. Switching off and on is kinda awkward to read.

Then again this is exactly how I right poems, so I'm sorta being a hypocrite

[fido123]

Re: Dear love

I say it's a very good and sweet message but doesn't have a lot of rhythm...still says a lot though. Reading it makes me ^_^ and that's very hard to get me to do.

[Tokzic]

Re: Dear love

Extremely poor rhyming, as Cowfreak has already outlined. No eloquence, or original thought whatsoever to make it stand out even the slightest bit. Just another love poem in a world full of dull, uninspired love poems.