Poem. Suggestions for title and improvement?

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  • FF_rules
    FF Veteran
    • May 2006
    • 668
    #16
    Re: Poem. Suggestions for title and improvement?

    Originally posted by NeonSM
    and miles deep I heard her say:
    leagues apart I knew her dismay--
    Repeating the same line kills it imo, though it's your standard 1-2 ending rhyme. Maybe you could spice it up with the starting few words too.
    Last edited by FF_rules; 05-20-2015, 03:43 AM.

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