TC_Halogen - 5.5/10
- intro layering/structure is a little strange, one with the omission of some speedier snares and the other with the [12][34][12] for a snare structure that occurs a bit earlier as non-jack single taps; ensure you’re catching all of the more audible snares as there are a few that are missed
- the melodic representation definitely has some circumstances where it feels errant
(jacks at 50.101? Jump structure at 59.890?)
- throughout the chart, it feels like there are a few instances where cymbal crashes are not given attention where they really could be
- 1:00.995: this minijack feels very out of place; the deep bass falls on something a bit closer to 16ths
- 1:11.258: missing notes for percussion here definitely stand out
- 1:28.626/1:29.258: incorrect rhythms for bursts here
- 1:35.258: definitely not a fan of an 8-note 16th jack at 190 BPM personally
- 1:37.152: with this being a single note to accommodate for the syncopation to the melody, I feel like 1:37.784 could also be a single for the same reason, giving you the ability to give the last four notes of the melody a proper accent with jumps - this happens elsewhere; in general jump accenting for the melody doesn’t feel that great in this section
- 3:40.007: gimmick-colored section is cute, kudos
- while this chart has some noticeable structural issues at times, it’s reasonably palatable in terms of playability, and I personally enjoy this version more than the other submitted one

Wiosna - 5/10
3.838 - no minijack despite having louder snares?
15.759 - missing note
18.206 to 20.733 - seems like an overly rapid ramp in layering given that you were layering just percussion earlier (would suggest buffing earlier sections), and i'm sure there are better patterns that would accent a rising drumline than a split jumptrill
26.654 - this split jumptrill is ultimately fine in isolation (though i think it's really extreme given the rest of the chart up to this point), but it does greatly undermine the cymbal crashes at 27.048, so i think that this split jumptrill should be watered down given the layering that you currently have. either that or you make this part gluts and the cymbals at 27.048 hands
52.943 - the [34] jump at 52.758 (and the note after) before this gives off the impression that the layering here is a continuation from the [34] jump, but you're layering something pretty different here. i'd suggest changing the direction of the JS at 52.943 or use a different JS pattern altogether to make it look as if it's "breaking away" from the [34]2 rhythm
53.574 - this is a pretty big spike
56.416 - could be a chord, this is pretty loud
59.969/1:00.048 - should form jumpgluts given how you layered this section
1:00.206 to 1:00.364 - likewise with this
1:04.331 - ^
1:13.784 - not sure if the sound here justifies continuous 32nd streams
1:15.048 - there are several sections like this that are fairly heavily layered yet go to fairly quiet sounds. i'm personally fine with sections like these given that the chart is already so hard, but i do think that you have to beef up a lot of the chart to compensate for this. i'm thinking like using triples for bass kicks for the most part (barring consecutive 16th bass kicks) and layering the melodic elements a bit more heavily to keep the chart mostly level in difficulty.
1:35.258 - you should probably have to break up the jack here
1:51.205 - that one hand trill is a bit too much

not too fond of the 32nds in general. they're more or less jumptrillable, but it definitely feels more like a break than something to look out for given that they're perfectly jumptrillable. 24ths might be fine, but you seem to follow technical accuracy a bit more for these bursts.

The issues are pertinent throughout the rest of the chart. The chart in general spikes very heavily in many sections, and while the patterns are "fair" in isolation, I don't think the chart is cohesively heavy enough to really justify the harder sections of the chart. There are definitely some sections like 1:15.048 and 1:36.521 that are heavy enough to justify some of the spikes, but there are many other sections that are nowhere heavy enough.

Barring that, there are a couple of parts that I felt were unfairly difficult like the OH minitrill in 1:51.205 or the 32nd stream in 53.574, so even if the chart is beefed up, those parts have to be ironed out well in order for the chart to be both fair and coherent.