Lawn Wake IV (Black)
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- Permissions, sync, metadata good.

- 22.791: Missing note.
- 25.834: Missing note.
- 26.249: Why is this a jump, but not 26.180?
- 29.912-30.742: The mirrored patterning works very well here, nice job.
- 32.677: Sync here is a little finnicky, what you have has one more note than it should. This is a bit closer: https://i.imgur.com/qOfQQf2.png
- 39.770: This one-handed minitrill seems overly aggressive, especially because it's fast enough that it could convert very poorly. Would prefer a two-handed minitrill. (e.g. the same pattern, but starting on column 2 instead of 1).
- 41.804-43.016: Totally fine as it is, but may be a nice place for some flam action.
- 51.975, 56.399, etc.: As with The Son and the Star, I can see what you're going for with the 32nds here, but feel this would play much better and be more faithful to the song using jumps in place of flams.
- 54.187: This patterning is kinda old-school. I like it.
- 58.057: Given that the next roll is ascending, this feels like it should be descending. Sync is also a little wacky with the gaps between notes varying sorta randomly and not always being synced well to the song, would recommend a more even slowdown such as this: https://i.imgur.com/5KXYoZb.png
- 60.131: This entire guitar solo is pretty heavy on column 2. Acceptable, but may want to break it up slightly.
- 61.928: Would prefer column 3 so this isn't on the same column as 62.827, which is much lower.
* 66.074: This is a constant tone, a staircase pattern doesn't fit it at all.
- 68.841: Suggest moving this to [23] to break up unnecessarily long column 1 anchor.
- 72.367: Missing jump, see 67.943.
- 75.892: Different instrument from the following jumptrill, suggest rearranging to make this a two-handed jump.
- 79.763, 80.869: Should be jumps like 75.339.
- 80.040, 80.109: Ghost notes.
** 81.837-82.390: This should just be a jump to the snare every third note & an extra to the kick at 82.113.
- 97.874: Neither the guitar nor any percussion plays repeated notes here, shouldn't be a jack.
- 103.404: Should not be part of the column 2 jack.
- 106.445-107.828: Several missing notes & notes you may want to include here.
- 118.058: This and the next note should either both be jumps or both be hands.
- 119.440: I get what you're going for with these polys, but the relevant guitar is just 16ths, and you quickly stop following it once the jumptrill hits anyways. Suggest focusing more on guitar and using proper rhythms.

** The burst at 145.610 is waaaay too much for the sound, and even ignoring that it doesn't really fit in the chart. Best way to resolve this would be with a cut honestly, the last 20 seconds are kinda just noise and are neither very chartable nor very pleasant to listen to. Could probably safely fade out after 127.177.

- I feel like this chart is overlayered to the point that it frequently obscures what the song is doing. You avoid minijack collisions, but the layering is heavy enough that you have to make many sacrifices (i.e. omitted jumps) in order to do this, and the density tends to remain fairly constant, sometimes making changes in the song's intensity feel insignificant. It's done reasonably for what it is, but I definitely feel like a lighter structure would be more appropriate for the song.
- Despite my disagreements with the layering and the use of 32nds for guitar, they're overall fine I would say. CQ on the two **'d notes, though I do advise a bit of general cleanup as well. [6.5/10]