All poetry here :)

**Eeumi** · 06-17-2009, 10:53 PM

So, I was hoping to start an official poetry thread where ffr members can come together and post some of their own work or poems that they really enjoy. Also, to post any thoughts, analysis, and relations to the poem. That being said I hope there are a lot of poetry fans out there.

**Eeumi** · 06-17-2009, 11:11 PM

Well, guess ill be the one to go first.

Nature's first green is gold

Her hardest hue to hold

Her early leaf's a flower;

But only so an hour.

Then leaf subsides to leaf.

So Eden sank to grief,

So dawn goes down to day.

Nothing gold can stay.
-Robert Frost

This is one of my favorites.

Midnighter · 06-18-2009, 03:28 PM

Cool. I guess i'll post second. This is an original poem I wrote while thinking about a bunch of proverbs.

An eye for an eye
and we'd all be blind
to the beauty placed here for us to behold;
By a single word from a wise old man.
He sees sitting down,
what we fail to from the mountain,
that all that glitters is not gold.
For though two wrongs don't make a right,
they inevitably spawn revenge.
-Midnighter

I'm not really sure what i was trying to say, so tell me what it says to you.

**Eeumi** · 06-18-2009, 03:30 PM

Im guessing it means conflict gets you nowhere. Try a peaceful solution instead. Hmm... Classic moral in an interesting way of putting it too.

Tokzic · 06-18-2009, 05:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Midnighter

I'm not really sure what i was trying to say, so tell me what it says to you.

This is the most annoying artistic stance I know of. Why would you bother creating something with no purpose?

sp1nzoK · 06-18-2009, 09:18 PM

Blind World (villanelle style poem)

Something I had always thought;
Why are people blind to see?
All alone had battles fought.

Dimmest light from the sun sought,
for just another fool's fee.
Something I had always thought.

Only ill fate themselves brought,
surely they would all agree.
All alone had battles fought.

Another dawn brings the drought.
Who can still water the tree?
Something I had always thought.

Again some extra time bought,
the weakest wanting to flee.
All alone had battles fought.

Only bravest people ought
to open their eyes all free.
Something I had always thought,
All alone had battles fought.

---

Should be 7 syllables per sentence (I'm finnish so I might be bad at counting them however).

I know drought isn't rhyming with the rest when pronounced but I was getting out of options and wanted to put in such sentence.

Meaning is pretty obvious, how majority of people let our beautiful world go to the crapper and only a few (in comparison) will stand up for it.

Midnighter · 06-22-2009, 03:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tokzic

This is the most annoying artistic stance I know of. Why would you bother creating something with no purpose?

The purpose was to write. I try to write daily so i can improve my writing skills. Sometimes i don't feel like writing, but i do anyway so i put something down for the day. It doesn't have to tell me something. Half the time writers write for their audience instead of themselves. Think before you make Insulting comments like that. Critisizm is fine, but there's no reason for insults.

**Eeumi** · 06-22-2009, 08:28 PM

[quote=sp1nzoK;3110564]Blind World (villanelle style poem)

Something I had always thought;
Why are people blind to see?
All alone had battles fought.

Dimmest light from the sun sought,
for just another fool's fee.
Something I had always thought.

Only ill fate themselves brought,
surely they would all agree.
All alone had battles fought.

Another dawn brings the drought.
Who can still water the tree?
Something I had always thought.

Again some extra time bought,
the weakest wanting to flee.
All alone had battles fought.

Only bravest people ought
to open their eyes all free.
Something I had always thought,
All alone had battles fought.

---

QUOTE]

I enjoyed this one

Midnighter · 06-23-2009, 10:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sp1nzoK

Blind World (villanelle style poem)

Something I had always thought;
Why are people blind to see?
All alone had battles fought.

Dimmest light from the sun sought,
for just another fool's fee.
Something I had always thought.

Only ill fate themselves brought,
surely they would all agree.
All alone had battles fought.

Another dawn brings the drought.
Who can still water the tree?
Something I had always thought.

Again some extra time bought,
the weakest wanting to flee.
All alone had battles fought.

Only bravest people ought
to open their eyes all free.
Something I had always thought,
All alone had battles fought.

I'm kind of confused dude. Could you explain it a bit? Thanks.

sp1nzoK · 06-24-2009, 05:30 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Midnighter

I'm kind of confused dude. Could you explain it a bit? Thanks.

Do you mean the style or the content?

Style: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Villanelle

Content: The Refrain 1 and 2 belong to a single person, he thinks about subjects and then comes to conclusion he stands for them alone (not really alone but that's the catch).

Only parts that should need any explanation from the other lines:

Dimmest light from the sun sought,
for just another fool's fee.

This can have many meanings; in my eyes this is already depicting the devastation on the world (futuristic vision on the subject), going at it with a metaphor that even sun would be losing it's glow and it's ultimately too late to fix things (since taking the last light out of sun in order to fix things would totally kill the world - making it a fool's fee), opposed to starting improving our ways early on.

Again some extra time bought,
the weakest wanting to flee.

The hazard of making short term improvements, that don't quite add up on the long run environmentally.

Only bravest people ought
to open their eyes all free.

Only brave people will fight for the beauty they can wittness instead of thinking that their effort doesn't matter, that their effort is useless, since the world won't totally diminish during their lifetime, making it less meaningful for them to aid it instead of shun it.

Hopefully those clear things out

**Adamaja456** · 06-24-2009, 10:12 AM

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the guy you really think about when you're horny and moan
the guy you imagine with that perfect smelling cologne
and the guy that makes you smile every time on the phone

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janyoung101 · 06-24-2009, 02:29 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eeumi

Well, guess ill be the one to go first.

Nature's first green is gold

Her hardest hue to hold

Her early leaf's a flower;

But only so an hour.

Then leaf subsides to leaf.

So Eden sank to grief,

So dawn goes down to day.

Nothing gold can stay.
-Robert Frost

This is one of my favorites.

Frost is always so beautiful. His poems have such a dynamic picture and layout. Great post. I got chills reading it.

06-17-2009, 10:53 PM	#1
Eeumi FFR Veteran Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 170	All poetry here :) So, I was hoping to start an official poetry thread where ffr members can come together and post some of their own work or poems that they really enjoy. Also, to post any thoughts, analysis, and relations to the poem. That being said I hope there are a lot of poetry fans out there. __________________ A woman without her man is nothing. A woman, without her, man is nothing. That's called punctuation people, so use it. AAA's-17 (public) FC's-176 (public)

06-17-2009, 11:11 PM	#2
Eeumi FFR Veteran Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 170	Re: All poetry here :) Well, guess ill be the one to go first. Nature's first green is gold Her hardest hue to hold Her early leaf's a flower; But only so an hour. Then leaf subsides to leaf. So Eden sank to grief, So dawn goes down to day. Nothing gold can stay. -Robert Frost This is one of my favorites. __________________ A woman without her man is nothing. A woman, without her, man is nothing. That's called punctuation people, so use it. AAA's-17 (public) FC's-176 (public)

06-18-2009, 03:28 PM	#3
Midnighter FFR Player Join Date: May 2009 Location: Suwannee, GA Age: 30 Posts: 49	Re: All poetry here :) Cool. I guess i'll post second. This is an original poem I wrote while thinking about a bunch of proverbs. An eye for an eye and we'd all be blind to the beauty placed here for us to behold; By a single word from a wise old man. He sees sitting down, what we fail to from the mountain, that all that glitters is not gold. For though two wrongs don't make a right, they inevitably spawn revenge. -Midnighter I'm not really sure what i was trying to say, so tell me what it says to you.

06-18-2009, 03:30 PM	#4
Eeumi FFR Veteran Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 170	Re: All poetry here :) Im guessing it means conflict gets you nowhere. Try a peaceful solution instead. Hmm... Classic moral in an interesting way of putting it too. __________________ A woman without her man is nothing. A woman, without her, man is nothing. That's called punctuation people, so use it. AAA's-17 (public) FC's-176 (public)

06-18-2009, 09:18 PM	#6
sp1nzoK FFR Player Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Finland Age: 36 Posts: 580	Re: All poetry here :) Blind World (villanelle style poem) Something I had always thought; Why are people blind to see? All alone had battles fought. Dimmest light from the sun sought, for just another fool's fee. Something I had always thought. Only ill fate themselves brought, surely they would all agree. All alone had battles fought. Another dawn brings the drought. Who can still water the tree? Something I had always thought. Again some extra time bought, the weakest wanting to flee. All alone had battles fought. Only bravest people ought to open their eyes all free. Something I had always thought, All alone had battles fought. --- Should be 7 syllables per sentence (I'm finnish so I might be bad at counting them however). I know drought isn't rhyming with the rest when pronounced but I was getting out of options and wanted to put in such sentence. Meaning is pretty obvious, how majority of people let our beautiful world go to the crapper and only a few (in comparison) will stand up for it. Last edited by sp1nzoK; 06-18-2009 at 09:24 PM..

06-22-2009, 08:28 PM	#8
Eeumi FFR Veteran Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 170	Re: All poetry here :) [quote=sp1nzoK;3110564]Blind World (villanelle style poem) Something I had always thought; Why are people blind to see? All alone had battles fought. Dimmest light from the sun sought, for just another fool's fee. Something I had always thought. Only ill fate themselves brought, surely they would all agree. All alone had battles fought. Another dawn brings the drought. Who can still water the tree? Something I had always thought. Again some extra time bought, the weakest wanting to flee. All alone had battles fought. Only bravest people ought to open their eyes all free. Something I had always thought, All alone had battles fought. --- QUOTE] I enjoyed this one __________________ A woman without her man is nothing. A woman, without her, man is nothing. That's called punctuation people, so use it. AAA's-17 (public) FC's-176 (public)

06-24-2009, 10:12 AM	#11
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