05-22-2009, 12:53 AM
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Life
A simple, yet loaded proposition
Leaves me wondering what to do. "Yes" is harmless; "No" is harmless; Neither answer would change the world. Yet it would change my world. Does standing up for myself -- Standing up against an addiction -- Make the world any better? He will just find a way to get his fix Tomorrow or the next day, And the cycle will repeat itself. Why does it matter nothing positive Ever comes out of it? Why does it matter that it caused His lack of independence? Why wouldn't I bend my will To childish necessity? Saying "no" will not hurt tonight And it will not change tomorrow. But it will make me happier. Isn't that life?
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05-22-2009, 01:01 AM
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FFR Player
Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: Felton DE
Age: 33
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Re: Life
Does this have to do with peer pressure and drugs? Also imma add you on XBL man when i get my box back from repairs we can do w/e, depending on how much your on. Always nice to mingle with FFR and former FFR and sm players pce out
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05-23-2009, 02:07 PM
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Re: Life
Sounds like a poem, but yet cool.
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05-23-2009, 02:16 PM
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Re: Life
i feel like i can relate to this. and i loved your last 4 lines.
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05-23-2009, 02:20 PM
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FFR Player
Join Date: Apr 2008
Location: Abyss
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Re: Life
nice poem...
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06-13-2009, 11:19 PM
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FFR Player
Join Date: Feb 2007
Location: Indiana
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Re: Life
My only critique would be when you end both those lines with "world" right after each other. I understand you are trying to point out the different perspectives, but it just seems awkward to me.
I really like it though, it's nice to see a poem on here that is actually good. |
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06-13-2009, 11:52 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2009
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Re: Life
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A woman without her man is nothing. A woman, without her, man is nothing. That's called punctuation people, so use it. AAA's-17 (public) FC's-176 (public) |
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