10-8-2013, 05:42 PM | #1 |
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Another poem
On the path there once I traveled
made of Arab sand, A thirst that was quenched by knowledge once estranged by the Lords hand. I came upon a spot to lie within some cooling shade. The source of which I could not see; it did not seem to fade. Once that I had drunk my fill of that shadowy spot of land, my travels began, again, again, on that path of Arab sand. What pool of water lay within this deserts hot embrace? I could not think of that too long at once I made my haste. As I came upon the pool, it did not vanish yet! A gypsy in its waters bathed at once our eyes had met. That water dropping from her eyes! Confusion met my mind. Are they water droplets I see or the product of another kind? Her beauty, I say, had quenched my thirst, her body, my appetite; and now she stood in front of me, I dare say in plain sight. Sing to me, I say you gypsy in this silent land! Dance for me, I say you gypsy on this Arab sand! Comments and suggestions welcome! |
10-8-2013, 06:03 PM | #2 |
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Re: Another poem
stop calling me a gypsy
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10-8-2013, 06:07 PM | #3 |
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10-8-2013, 06:08 PM | #4 |
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Re: Another poem
Man what else can we thirst, that in itself I thirst as knowledge. But your interpretation of a camel must be golden o:
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10-8-2013, 06:31 PM | #5 | |
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10-8-2013, 07:55 PM | #7 |
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Re: Another poem
I 100% agree with you. The ability to appreciate language is one that is profound, yet, innate. You don't have to be able to analyze or even know what a poem is talking about to appreciate it. Btw, I am no professional writer, I just love to write on my free time. Also, if you write poetry, you are a poet; hell, even if you speak poetically, you are a poet. I believe that poetry is found in daily speech.
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02-1-2014, 08:25 PM | #8 |
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Re: Another poem
I don't see where this verse quite fits in with the rest of the poem as a whole. The characters confusion lies on the "water from her eyes". So, is his interest in what this material could possibly be due to his quest for knowledge, or is it that he has an interest in her directly? Whats his angle at this point?
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