a new rap song

[DDRBaller123]

what do u think

Chours
can I just live my life
with out no bull****
with out no fight
I'm just tring to live my life
if i have to die sooner
I'ma give it up to the guy up in the sky

2nd Chours
I allready got it made in my life
this is my last year and things ain't right
there's been alot of bull ****
but that ain't tight
I stay up and pray up to the guy in the sky

Verse 1
I ain't trying to hate
I'm just a rapper trying to find my place
The year is 09 an this is my 4th year
i'm going to be out like the show yes dear
I came in the game with alot of fear
but when they herd my **** i gotten alot of fans here
when i get imto rap battles i get the most cheers
i'm #1 in Cherry Hill thats what I want people to hear

can I just live my life
with out no bull****
with out no fight
I'm just tring to live my life
if i have to die sooner
I'ma give it up to the guy up in the sky

I allready got it made in my life
this is my last year and things ain't right
there's been alot of bull ****
but that ain't tight
I stay up and pray up to the guy in the sky

Verse 2
It started up in 8th grade
when i had no flow and no rap name
people were asking me why are u trying to be in the game
I said That i wanted to change and it would bring me alot of friends
but rapping made me cool to the people that hatted me
they would allways played me when they were with their friends
but when i got into highschool this is what rap became of me
I know i should believe what people say
I wasn't even good untill this day
I hope this rap gets on the radio and gets a lot of play
Cause my name is Bdock and i got it made

I know i should believe what people say
I wasn't even good untill this day
I hope this rap gets on the radio and gets a lot of play
Cause my name is Bdock and i got it made

I know i should believe what people say
I wasn't even good untill this day
I hope this rap gets on the radio and gets a lot of play
Cause my name is Bdock and i got it made

Hey world
this ain't a dream
just me getting my head right
in this day of light
which is life

can I just live my life
with out no bull****
with out no fight
I'm just tring to live my life
if i have to die sooner
I'ma give it up to the guy up in the sky

I allready got it made in my life
this is my last year and things ain't right
there's been alot of bull ****
but that ain't tight
I stay up and pray up to the guy in the sky

[zajac]

Personally, I read through it, and even read it outloud to a metronome to get a good feel for it, and I liked it...

I wish there were maybe more parallels or even metaphors, and cutting out some of the lines that show how young you are, that would get people's attention a little bit more, and at the same time, more generalized lyrics allow for people to relate better, yknow

But all in all. Good stuff. A lot of time and effort for sure from what I can tell.

You ever record any of your vocals, or what? If interested, as corny as it may sound, I wouldn't mind collabing with you and you do the vox and I'll do the rest of the production work... Lemee know if you're interested