Short N Sweet [Demo (Feedback Appreciated)]

**flashpantss** · 06-16-2011, 04:19 AM

Well, This is a new DnB/Breakbeat song I'm working on. Feedback would be appreciated so I can go in the right direction. Tell me what you think please.

http://soundcloud.com/flashpantss/epic-dnb

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/427633

**midnghtraver** · 06-16-2011, 05:31 PM

That transition around 0:33

**Nullifidian** · 06-17-2011, 10:17 AM

offsync melody, weird transition, awkward use of breaks and quite annoying instruments as well. Hardly any structure of dnb found in this, and for breakbeat this is very randomly structured as well.
It's one big incoherent annoying mashup of breaks and synths, sorry.

Try comparing your song to some of your favorite dnb and breakbeat songs and hear what's different between them.

**ScylaX** · 06-17-2011, 11:04 AM

This sounds too chaotic to be enjoyable. Is it made on purpose ? The samples used are okay though, but first think about putting your ideas out of your head instead of dealing with what you tried to do.

**kommisar** · 06-17-2011, 07:44 PM

sounds like me when i was 14

sorry buddy. needs a lot of work.

06-16-2011, 04:19 AM	#1
flashpantss Party Hard Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,310	Short N Sweet [Demo (Feedback Appreciated)] Well, This is a new DnB/Breakbeat song I'm working on. Feedback would be appreciated so I can go in the right direction. Tell me what you think please. http://soundcloud.com/flashpantss/epic-dnb http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/427633 __________________ 10th in 5th Official Tournament in D3 3RD in Dragons Fury: Custom Tournament #5 in D5A Best AAA's= Frictional Nevada (FIRST FGO) Kyrie (ONI Get), Eradication, Of Course you Need and nEed and neEd and NEED ME, Cinnamon Roll (FIRST TO AAA) Last edited by flashpantss; 06-16-2011 at 04:21 AM..

06-16-2011, 05:31 PM	#2
midnghtraver Icarus Moth Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: NYC Age: 28 Posts: 2,064	Re: Short N Sweet [Demo (Feedback Appreciated)] That transition around 0:33

06-17-2011, 10:17 AM	#3
Nullifidian ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ Join Date: Sep 2007 Age: 34 Posts: 1,837	Re: Short N Sweet [Demo (Feedback Appreciated)] offsync melody, weird transition, awkward use of breaks and quite annoying instruments as well. Hardly any structure of dnb found in this, and for breakbeat this is very randomly structured as well. It's one big incoherent annoying mashup of breaks and synths, sorry. Try comparing your song to some of your favorite dnb and breakbeat songs and hear what's different between them. __________________

06-17-2011, 11:04 AM	#4
ScylaX urararararararara Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: FRANCE Age: 29 Posts: 1,044	Re: Short N Sweet [Demo (Feedback Appreciated)] This sounds too chaotic to be enjoyable. Is it made on purpose ? The samples used are okay though, but first think about putting your ideas out of your head instead of dealing with what you tried to do. __________________ Suimega is my present username!!! (b-but feel free to call me scylaax anyway) \| https://suimega.bandcamp.com/

06-17-2011, 07:44 PM	#5
kommisar Dark Chancellor Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Moncton, NB Age: 33 Posts: 7,301	Re: Short N Sweet [Demo (Feedback Appreciated)] sounds like me when i was 14 sorry buddy. needs a lot of work. __________________

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