Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

Sorry if I'm not checking easy charts for the files I failed since I've been spammed a lot with files to the point I need a daily review since I won't finish other way lol.

A Whole New World God Only Knows (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Standard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Hard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
Beat 96.750 breaks completely your layering, since you never stepped to bass drums as jumps in the whole song. Consider removing them and leave them as single taps or at least switching patterns (12 34 ,13 24, etc).
Good file, easy flowing, more meant for intermediate players. A bit on the repetitive side since you could've layered more densily especially in the chorus, with jump and hand usage + some violin string streams, to vary the simfile more. Yes

Dead END (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
Generally it's better to layer the most important and prominent sounds as jumps in a file, in this case you did the other way round since it would've been better if you layered drums as jumps and the ones you layered as jumps as single notes.
Beat 113 to beat 126 you completely broke your layering and you aren't emphasizing any sound in particular.
174.500 you missed a jump there.
Careful with patterns cause sometimes they end up being too rightish or leftish.
Seeing that you didn't do much different than Sargon's and file has some mistakes, I don't find enjoying myself this file over Sargon's in OD8. Which was in my opinion one of the best files of the pack. No

Funky Sonic World (SonicX)
Oni
Song is annoying.
Subjectivemanias aside.
16ths beginning are innacurate. File is underlayered for a Keyboard file, layer your file more.
Beat 112, if you're stepping single taps that's a huge difficulty spike for someone of that lvl.
259.500 That long hold + jumps are a huge difficulty spike for the file, and really aren't emphasizing anything.
Please be consistent with layering, as I told you before, decide if you're going to make an easy file or a hard file. No

Future Gazer (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
1.375 jacks feels completely random if you look at the rest of your layering in that sound.
13.500 should be a single tap.
18.625, 19.375 can't be heard at 1.0 rate don't step them.
Some patterns are really awkward to play
Some 16ths are badly placed or not loud enough to layer them.
M21 onwards, NO it's a huge difficulty spike, holds could be shortened in length.
M25 you suddenly decided to layer those vocal holds.
Some jumps during the file are badly placed while you didn't layer some other you've been layering.
A lot of mistakes and again I cannot find myself enjoying this over Kaneh's version in OD7. No

Hello (MazEi)
LOLOLOLOL THAT COLORED LAYERING LOLOLOLOL
I think song is a bit off in some parts, recheck this plz.
Heavy
You could've layered some bass so the song could be more interesting at some parts. I honestly don't see anything wrong with this file. It's just that it's a bit lackluster for me in general. I DUNNOO

The Least 100sec (SonicX)
Heavy
Work on your layering, instead of sending me hundreds of files finish one and take your time. Making a good file is hard (unless you're Kommisar) if you're not used to it, try working on your layering, some sections are empty while some others are filled with jumps (and sounds didn't change), try to be more consistent. No

Hyadain no Joujou Yuujou (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Light
Good as an easy chart
Standard
Good as an easy chart
Heavy
Good as an easy chart
Oni
Since you're layering jumps to bass sounds some of them are a bit of during the first section of the file, no big deal but recheck them.
159.000 that section is a huge difficulty spike, layer it as rolls if you want it to be easier or freezes if you want to remove them.
Chorus could be more layered with jumps.
249.250 should be a jumpjack much less a jump
259.000 feels weird not having anything there. Besides the same section at the beginning of the song is differently layered compared to the end.
Ending could've been stepped with a freeze to prevent a sudden ending.
Could've used some hands since this is your main difficulty, that's why there are easy charts to include the charts for intermediate players, but that's my call.
Needs Tweaks. Not for now

Iroha nioedo Chirinuru wo (Kaneh)
Standard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Heavy
Wow that's some minimalistic layering, that's like you. I dunno if everyone will like this cause of that, but I found it interesting and replayable once in a while. Yes

Kyoumu Densen (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
STOP RESTEPPING SONGS DSADSADSAFSFAS, ALSO WHY ALI PROJECT WHY
Oni
I don't see much difference with what Shizuru did in OD8 (despite those 24ths minithrills) plus there isn't much to step to begin with. There are a few mistakes here and there but nothing important. But yeah. No

Last Fortune (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
Some mistakes in the introduction with jump placement.
Those jump transitions are a huge difficulty spike and don't really emphasize anything (you don't need to be that faithful to layering in these cases lol, or at least layer them as non jack transitions).
If you're going to use hands use them consistenly.
Some 32nds aren't really loud in normal speed to layer them
Some mistakes here and there with 16ths.
No

Magical Generation (Zelda-YEH)
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
Those long jacks are a bit of a difficulty spike (especially the last one) but no real big deal.
Jacks at the end are a bit iffy (not the long one), you could layer them as single taps and leave as jacks the important ones (the ones with a transition or drums sounds).
Fun solid file. Kawaii song. Yes

Nekuraholic (Zelda-YEH)
HOLY SHIT IT'S A TRAP
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
Really fun file. Those thrills gave the file scoring value. M53, that section could've been a lot better if jumps were layered in 8ths and not 4ths. Yes

Towa no Kizuna (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
Beginning would be a lot better if you didn't omit the lower piano sounds
Song could be a lot better if hands were layered on cymbals and maybe some drums.
M15 all those jacks don't really emphasize anything.
This section feels empty and dumpy at the same part. Could've layered jumps.
Could've layered transition that starts in 74.250
75.250 is really dumpy and doesn't flow with the song
85.750 Missed another transition
114 jacks don't emphasize anything and section is too rightish.
Overall the file is lacking and doesn't flow well in some parts.
No

Tsuki ni Murakumo Hana ni Kaze (Zelda-YEH)
Standard
Good as an easy chart
Heavy
Good as an easy chart
Oni
M6+ that beginning layering is kinda awkward and it has WAY TOO many right patterns, flip some around.
M14 I would prefer layering those mines as jumps in that situation, also missed a couple of piano grace notes in that section.
67.250 jacks there don't really emphasize anything and check that transition, cause sound continues till 16th and stops there.
M26+ , i would personally layer piano chords as hands there but that's my call.
M30+ Those quads (and of course jacks after quads) are a HUGE difficulty spike and really awkward to hit at those speeds.
135.000 transition doesn't really emphasize anything, make it easier, at least with single jacks ending with a hand not a quad or jumpjacks.
File is fun, borderline dumpy but acceptable, remove those quads in the jumpstream section and fix the rest and i'll pass this. Pending

way to answer (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Light
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Standard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
All your files have very index like patterns, do you play one handed or something? Not much to say here. Good file for intermediate players. Yes

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

An Endless Tewi-ma Park (aloola)
BRB playing with sound off. Jokes aside.
Standard
Remove jacks.
Heavy
Remove jacks.
Oni
Good file, decent jack practice, jacks made the song more interesting to play. I know a lot of ppl will complain on this due to song choice but, there isn't really anything wrong with the file. Yes when you remove jacks from easier charts.

Awadaccha Panikuri Vanilla (aloola)
Light
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Standard
Try to simplify a bit holds, this is barely passable. Yes
Heavy
Try to simplify a bit holds, this is barely passable. Yes
Oni
Really fun file, I can't really listen to this but i have no problem while playing lol. Where all the single holds (the vocal and the synth ones) before the burst really necessary? Same issue with the end. Try to flip around patterns in the brass part with short holds, since holds there aren't really the problem, if you make patterns easier it will make that section easier to read even with holds. Other than that no real comment on the file. Yes

Borderlands (Bahahowow)
Oni
Those thrills are a HUGE difficulty spike, consider trimmin them down to 32nds. Also i don't really know why you decided to use half bpm.
Chorus section has a bit too much 8th jack patterns but that's my subjective opinion.
Well layered and enjoyable. Get an easy chart

Danzai no Hana ~Guilty Sky~ (Zelda-YEH)
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
I don't know what weed were you smoking when you did this, M9 thrills aren't 16ths but 12ths, there is another sound there but there aren't really 16ths.
101.750 you missed a 16th there, not sure if it was done on purpose or it was just accidental. If it was on purpose don't mind me.
I loved your layering on those background sounds at the beginning.
Great file, enjoyable overall, only that minor issue with that section but i'm not failing this for that, just fix it when you can. Yes

Funky Sonic World (SonicX)
Heavy
File is underlayered as ****, there isn't much problem with the chart itself but, it really has no appealing even for intermediate players (it's almost a beginner chart lol). Also song choice isn't helping much in this case. No

Hyadain no Joujou Yuujou (SonicX)
Oni
Same problem with your other file, but this time some sections are enough layered while others are completely empty, this is a keyboard oriented pack for at least intermediate players, with some beginner friendly charts, your file is made for people to play it not to just stand there in the pack cause no one thinks it's appealing. My advice: work with one file at a time, look at other files and come back later. No

Party Love ~ Okkiku Naritai ~ (SonicX)
Heavy
Same issues, not enough layering in some parts, + some 16th notes are really off. Please try harder, you really are making me just look around at your files, I don't even have to do a full check of it to reject it, work harder plz. No

RPG (Gundam-Dude)
Standard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Heavy
Your files suck and you should never send a file again, quit stepmania while you can. YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
RIP SFP

Sky (aloola)
Hard
M14+ and M56+ STOP STEPPING THOSE FREAKING ANNOYING KIND OF HOLDS. Peace.
Good file, well done and enjoyable. Please try to avoid some holds lol. I'm gonna watch this later since I can't play at this late. I'll tell you the details on irc if I see something weird while playing. Yes
Oni
I guess this is your easier chart. Simplify more plz. And please switch difficulties. No

Tsuki ni Murakumo Hana ni Kaze (Zelda-YEH)
Oni
It was really smart from you how you fixed your quad and stream problem. File is good to go. Yes

Red Goose (FLY)
Standard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
Your jump layering is weird overall and doesn't really flow that well with the song. Some transitions are kinda hard to play at those speeds for intermediate players. I'm not sure yet I'm holding my decision for now. I'll update later in main post

File queue is at 15 files. I guess this is improving bit by bit

[C1004A]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

are you okay with hard charts, or is otaku's dream geared towards beginners / mid level players? i always had the impression otaku's dream had easy songs only

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

are you okay with hard charts, or is otaku's dream geared towards beginners / mid level players? i always had the impression otaku's dream had easy songs only

I'm ok as long as they don't pass the dump limit. If you want a reference I'm ok with most FFRCP submissions except of Maniera, cuz i have to aim to the OD community too. But I can be ok with a Leonid type file or something that is borderline dumpy but not too repetitive itself. I dunno but I don't think you lose anything by trying lol. And well yeah most OD packs are anime songs so there isn't much to do really lol

[leonid]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

hey that's offensive. my files have much more than that

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

hey that's offensive. my files have much more than that

I enjoy your files, i was only giving an example, I wasn't saying your files are dumpy, ugh whatever already told you in irc xD

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

Sorry I simplified some reviews since I lost an hour of reviews, I managed to point out everything important though.

Poseidon (kors k mix) (CHACHA)
Jack layering is acceptable now, not really how i thought you would fix it but it kinda works, it could be better though.
135.500 I would rather prefer shorter holds (sometimes a shorter hold is enough to give an idea to the player what are you layering to), but since this comes from O2Jam playing I don't care that much
142.500 that pattern is kinda awkward, better if hold wasn't there and have a clean pattern without jacks. But w/e
Yes

The Sampling Paradise (CHACHA)
Oni
Again jacks are not optimal but they work now at least. Yes

Hyadain no Joujou Yuujou (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
8.500 No jump there
Beat 11 beat 11.750 it breaks the flow not to layer that. Same with the ending, my reviews had the reverse effect.
101.000 I would prefer that being layered fully or not layered at all.
Consider flipping around some patterns, sometimes they come too much from one side and are awkward to play (ex: M46).
M50 try to avoid stepping one hold over another unless they're done in the same beat. Makes reading awkward. This part is better without brass holds, only tap notes
M60 Inconsistent layering compared to the first part of the song. No

Last fortune (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
13.750 No jump plz
17.500 underlayer that part jump,tap,jump,tap,jump or layer them in a way that don't end up in jacks. Same issue with the following jumpjacks during the song.
43.000+ flip some patterns around, too many right patterns
46.000 Looks copypasted, not accurate 16ths
M13 Missing sounds already stepped.
82.250 No (32nds) I know what you're trying to do but no.
113.500 flip some patterns too many right patterns.
I would personally continue layering hands in the chorus since it's technically the most important part in the song, at least to those electrical drum sounds or cymbals.
147.000 remove those 32nds and restructure that patterns, it's awkward as hell.
You're trying to make a kinda hard file, but you're really just making patterns awkward and weird to hit.
I would personally not layer that long hold at the end since you didn't layer any vocal hold in the chorus. No

Towa no Kizuna (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
17.500 random jack
37.500 Careful with these type of things, you aren't layering at that vocal before, why start layering them down now (personally i do this a lot with generic files like these, but I start doing it from the very beginning).
49.000 stream starts there, potential 4th and 8ths jump usage before that as a transition.
68.000 This part is underlayered as ****, why vocals, layer background, it doesn't really need to have jumps but at least background lol.
75.250 the sounds are technically there but stepping them doesn't help with the flow of the song.
87.000+ Leave only the hands that go to piano chords, the other ones don't emphasize much.
87.375 No
M23 consider flipping patterns around, you may want to make some taps go to left in first stream and jump go 13 and leave the second stream like it is.
Careful you're not using same hold length for cymbals during the song.
You layered hands in chorus hence you started stepping with more spread patterns.
154.000 patterns are too left handed, consider flipping them maybe to 13 thrills
Consider trimmering holds at the end, they have the same length as the next tap, and with 16ths (half speed) it's pretty awkward to play
I like some ideas of the file, especially the chorus and the beginning. But needs fixes for me to pass this. No

SHOOT! (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
11.250 There's no really need to layer those guitar holds, there aren't loud enough, and only makes the file harder to read.Considering trimmering "ding" holds length to half.
19.750 If you aren't going to change the layering at least flip the notes to non jacks or something that it's more spread (ex: 2 14 34)M6 there isn't a real transition in the song to change layering like that, and it's already inconsistent the fact that there were only single steps before on same sounds. Bad use of climax theory.
37.000 why vocals there and not background sounds, ZZZ
M12, you're mixing layering, if you're layering synths as jumps, don't come out of nowhere and start layering drums bass as jumps too.
M15+ trimmer down holds in length, and limit to only one holds, makes the file weird and boring.
102.500+ Not sure what are those holds going to. I don't think they're necessary at all. If you're going to step double holds for vocals try to do it with closer patterns (12 34, and maaaaaaybe 13 24).
Short holds in chorus = no.
Again my main problem with you are patterns, besides whatever mistakes you may have.
I've also seen this file a lot of times already, my favorite FFRCP Autumn file. NoSuper Stream(AnTiHoLiDaYs)Oni
Inconsistent layering, flow breaking, missing important sound, some weird patterns, overall not as good as my file in OD7 (AND MY FILE WAS BAD THAT'S WHY I'M SAYING THIS), or Lynn's file, also my file had already easy charts. No

Me wo Tojite Gyuttoshiyo (Higguy)
Oni
30.250 Stream starts there.You're stepping to the least important 16ths (the ones you can barely listen while playing and are only audible at slow speeds) while you're still missing a lot of the ones that can be listened at normal speed. Slowing the song isn't to find new sounds is to clarify the ones that you already hear while playing at normal speed.Jump layering is fairly good throughout the song.Beat 95 not sure what are those 24ths going to.Some patterns are kinda awkward try to spread them, example M32 there are a LOT of right patterns, consider flippin some around.Try switching to another more steppable song, this one isn't helping you. No

Vidro Moyou (Higguy)
Oni
Intro:
Look at the beginning of your file, you stepped all 16ths but you didn't mix them, consider mixin' those beginning jack patterns with the one that is in the hold.
Inconsistent use of holds, some missed sounds and some holds are longer than others (same sound).
If you're going to layer only to 8ths with vocals (which isn't a bad idea) layer them correctly all the way
You missed some important percussion sounds beat 89 onwards.
93.500 since you aren't already layering the 32nds in the song, i don't think it's a good idea to start there
There are some jump layering mistakes, mostly because you don't decide what are you going to layer the jumps to, i prefer to drums not bass drums. (bridge of the song especifically)
125.000 It would be way more interesting if you layered the transition there instead of those freezes.
Check holds in chorus, I prefer layering similar vocal long holds in this situation, while you just do it randomly, so you cannot really predict when they're coming. Stick to one layer, if you're going to layer to these kind of holds layer them consistently (look at my main chart for Kuusou Mesorigii in OD8, Destin Histoire or Omokage Warp, they are good examples). Once you get one layered done correctly you can start experimenting and see if it works, but the main layer be it jumps or holds should be there, you can change layers through sections of course but needs to be consistent overall.149.500 why those piano holds now.185.000 That long hold is too much and those 16th patterns you made are inaccurate, they are all 16ths all the way
I won't tell you to layer the all the 32nds, it would be too much to ask you lol.
Sorry I'm probably stealing this song from you :X
No

winterv2 (DDRBaller123)
File is very 2005 like, not really much sync with the song and the steps, sorry. No

confidence driver (Zelda-YEH)
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
I would personally layer 16ths between hands. Good file. Yes

Flower (SonicX)
Oni
Beginning has inconsistent jump layering
48.000 There is no sound there.
Inconsistent 16th layering recheck
115.500 missed note
132.500 - and 134.500 same sounds, missing note on the second one. Jacks don't emphasize anything
142.500 Inconsistent jump layering
M40 random jacks, don't emphasize anything, same with similar ones.
Inconsistent jack placement overall.
No

Hyadain no Joujou Yuujou (SonicX)
Oni
Some parts of the file aren't flowing with the song (aka invisible steps or missed steps)
Beat 10 beat 256, HUGE difficulty spike and doesn't make any sense at all.
Bad vocal layering (inconsistent, not layering to same sounds), why would you layer vocals in this song in the first place, there are tons of things to layer to.
Beat 66 and beat 98, same sounds different hold length, inconsistent.
Bad jump placement overall.
121.250 if you're going to layer jumps to claps WHY did you start layering vocals there randomly
M34+ hands in that section don't emphasize much.
Missed some potential sounds
221.250 random jack
M57+ Layer the whole stream or the holds don't start randomly layering the stream in the middle. ( I prefer the stream). No

Magical (bombastik)
Oni
The weird file. Hold should be toned down, excessive use of holds and long holds. Also not always are consistent in length.
165.000 that background stream layering comes out of nowhere without any transition whatsoever, I recommend you removing it.
Some hands aren't really needed, in my opinion but layering is fairly good. There are some inconsistencies but not much of them. You are a fairly good player so you should notice these things if you slow down the file. (sorry i didn't make a better review for the above reason and I'm awfully tired). These reasons keep me from passing the file. No

Our Steady Boy (Xanox)
Oni
If you decide to not to layer jumps at the beginning don't layer the one on 10.000 -.-
M10 Inconsistent layering overall, bad jump placing, bad note placing.
M12+ Those hands aren't really emphasizing much, I know what they are going to but the sound isn't powerful enough to make it a hand
66.750 Missing 16th, especially since you're layering jumps to those sound so add a tap note there.
M18 (beginning) broke layering.
80.750 what is that jump going to, same with the rest in same sounds. Also that hold there without any percussion stepping breaks the flow of the song.
93.750 NO
Please recheck your file, there are bad note placements, bad jump placements and phantom notes all over the file. I just gave an example to get you started.
Also you choose to make stops to layering in the weirdest places
No

ApolloN (EvilDoRuk)
Well flowing file and fun.
Get an easy chart


Break Out Your Stained Brain (aloola)
Oni
Those 34 124 (jump hand) patterns are annoying, especially at these speeds, i would prefer to avoid those hands in these situations or make the jump before a single tap for better pattern flow
M29 try stepping those jumps as a tap note and a grace note, since you've already stepped jumps to another different sound in M27 and they don't really fit together. Basically I feel the same problem during the entire file for example M54 section, i would rather step bass drums to single taps (trills ofc), while you can distinguish them between patterns.
Good file fun, and interesting song choice. As I said previously I find layering confusing sometimes. Easy Chart Plz

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

Hyadain no Joujou Yuujou (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Light
Fix patterns you have measures without a single right arrow. No
Standard
Fix patterns you have measures without a single right arrow. No
Hard
Avoid jacky patterns in easy charts. Especially since your main chart isn't that difficult, it's an easier chart, you don't only remove layers but make patterns easier, for example M31. Those patterns at that speed are really hard for beginner players.Fix THAT
Oni
I still don't get why are you cutting on 11.750 and 259.750 sounds, it makes that part inconsistent.
Try in the chorus to differentiate somehow with hold length between bass holds and vocal holds, it's kinda confusing.
Still not feeling much that jump in 249.250. Good file for intermediate players. Yes

Last Fortune (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Light
12 measures without a left arrow... No
Standard
Do you ppl look at what you step, jesus christ you don't have a single left arrow in the whole first 6 measures, and there isn't even a reason for this.
REMOVE JACKY PATTERNS OMG. No
Heavy
Avoid 16 trills and 32nd bursts and jacky patterns in this chart thank you. No
Oni
Not feeling your vocal hands at M7+ at all. You can feel the first 4 since there are cymbals and loud drum sounds there, but 29.500 and 30.000 are completely out of place, I would personally layer hands to those loud drums and cymbals in this section, same with chorus, at least cymbals (especially chorus it already feels nice with cymbals). Regarding to this note, why you stopped stepping hands in chorus, it feels completely underlayered compared to the rest of the song (the beginning which is quite similar).
34.750 flip some notes around to avoid that jack for awkward patterns. I don't mind the jack but that pattern layering since the next thing is a short right 32nd trill is ****ing weird to hit. Hmm

SHOOT (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
Recheck 16ths at the beginning of the song
22.500+ i think I missed this last time HELL NO, don't step jumpholds to vocals there, remove those 16ths jumps omg
37.000+ NO it's inaccurate, 32nds are AFTER the 8th and the 8th SHOULD be there.
49.000 why no jump there?
57.000+ Holds put me to sleep, while doing this you missed 16ths ofc. Also recheck jumps they're inaccurate.
101.500, and 105.500 are inacCurate should be the subsecuent 16ths, like 109.750 -.-.
102.750 Random jack
131.000 Missed jump
150.250 I don't mind this jack but if you're going to step it in the chorus, do it every measure, to that specific vocal, don't go and put it randomly there.
Those holds are inconsistent with the first chorus and I don't really know what they're emphasizing to (I guess the guitars, in that case they don't emphasize much and I don't think they're well placed) , I suggest you remove them. Due to this jumps are inconsistent too, example 154.500.
162.750 why a jumpjack there. The same transition in the first chorus you did the transition without it (and in 175.750 you didn't use it either), so why now.
Transition between 171 and 172 is kinda iffy consider reworking it
178.250 again that jack no, and that transition has a bit too much right notes, I can hit it but it looks like shit, at least remove the jack.
No

Towa No Kizuna (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
READ my notes, if I said this:
75.250 the sounds are technically there but stepping them doesn't help with the flow of the song.
why then when i say this:
68.000 (old chart) This part is underlayered as ****, why vocals, layer background, it doesn't really need to have jumps but at least background lol.
You'll step this: 75.250, to this 68.000.
Jesus christ
Step 8ths and 16ths (jumps can be probably be on 16ths or 8ths) and add 32nds to vocals in all that section.
74.000 Those holds are messy, step them to one sound in particular and with the correct length.
In 75.250, if you don't wan't to follow vocals as 32nds you can follow another background sound that's added that goes to some 32nds in that section too.
Check your 16ths in chorus they are not all accurate. You know not everything is copypasting patterns. (I did not check this last time)
88.500 Bad hand placing, due to bad hold placing, remove that whole hold with tap included.
108.250 16th maybe?
M40 Decide whether you're going to use short freezes or hands for that ending part (you're using a hand in the first but you're not layering the hold, you may want to layer it)
Sorry I just can't go through everything in one review, it could take me hours, try to solve some issues on your own too. I don't think I missed anything this time, but just in case...
No

Vidro Moyou (Higguy)
Heavy
NO LOL it was way more consistent before, you broke some parts rather than fix them. Btw I have your old chart if you want it, and if you want help you can join irc lol

Nazokake Manmise ~ Uramenyuu (aloola)
Yeah Yeah Easy chart plz

[Gundam-Dude]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

this thread sure gets a lot of attention!

































































rip otaku's dream 2012

[C1004A]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

Submissions Received: 53


oh shit... i better finish my fileZ soOn

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

F (Blue)
Standard
Huge difficulty gap between this and Heavy, I recommend you simplify the heavy chart. Yes
Heavy
Not enough difficulty gap between this and Oni, simplify more. No
Oni
I'm not really feeling some of your hands, especially the ones after M63, otherwise cool file, nice to see a different layering style too. Yes

Flower (SonicX)
Offset is around 0.040-0.060 late
Heavy
M6+ It would have been a lot better if you stepped that section using pitch relevancy.
Careful with some patterns some of them are too left handed at times, try flipping some around
Slow down the file, 16ths are technically inaccurate, due to this file doesn't flow well, example: look at M14 and slow down the file
131.000 Missing jump.
338.000 HUGE difficulty spike, you've also been stepping those as rolls, keep it as rolls for consistency, and seeing the difficulty of the file one handed trills are too much.
You probably missed some 16ths due to offset. I used 0.020.
Try reworking the file in some parts. I would personally layer the file a lot more densily but I understand this is for intermediate players, so I don't care THAT much.
For now work on that.
Especially if you're going to do this type of layer (with barely jumps, work a lot in pitch relevancy, it will be very important in your file)
No

Grave Consequence (Gundam-Dude)
Heavy
O bby dat pitch relevancy. Dat Tsukaser. Really fun file. Yes

Hardcore Machinegun (Blue)
Oni
Not sure what are you really trying to do with hands in the 24ths rolls fast part. They seem inconsistent to me.
Overall really fun file, dunno maybe for scoring too. Yes

Hyadain No Joujou Yuujou (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Easy Charts
Better. Yes

Last Fortune (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
What I sent you to the e-mail

Paradise Girl Madorin (C1004A)
Heavy
Honestly I don't mind getting this chart as a beginner chart in the pack, but I feel it's a HUGE DUMP, and I need a main chart and an easier chart (less dumpy maybe) that, can be played by other than good players too. I'm trying to get attention of intermediate players too. No
Oni
Same as Heavy but with added Jumpjacks. No

SHOOT (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
Please check your 16ths at the beginning of the file and the bridge before the chorus (M15+) they don't flow well.
M15+ rather leave holds or leave 16ths, not both. Also I recommend you to trimmer long holds in length, they don't necessary need to be the length they really are. Just being there they already give the player a hint on what you're layering to
23.500 24.750, those jacks don't emphasize that much, and they're hard to read since they're between a wall of holds.
49.000 That hand feels completely random in the song since you feel reluctant to layer hands to those sounds in the song. Probably will be better removing it.
Chorus: Check some 16ths, some don't end on the 16th before the 4th, they end on the 8th right above (probably similar of what I told you with last fortune. No

Sweet Drops (LongGone)
Standard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Heavy
So kawaii, great layering, fun despite being easy . Yes

The Question (DDRTime)
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
Not feeling much your hands at M31-35, I know what you're trying to do but they seem overemphasized. Likewise 150.000, 166.000.
M55 till end. I would consider trimming off your holds in length to make some patterns more readable.
Overall, interesting song, I would rather layer some parts differently since they're indicating me some good transitions, but solid nevertheless. Yes

Towa no Kizuna (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Oni
Beat 67-81 NO those 32nds don't flow with the song remove them, it's the third time I tell you this.
Also you included hands from the chorus till the end, which make some other parts (beat 83+ till chorus, completely weird, there's no really need for them in the beginning though :3)
No

Week (SonicX)
Offset is late again (Do you play with some global offset? check it)
Cut the song, it isn't really that interesting to step the full ver of it.
Hard
Some 8ths as vocals are inaccurate most of them are swingy 24ths (I didn't them all but file feels weird as ****)
Jump layering is pretty much ok, but there isn't much going with the song, and vocals isn't always easy to sync. No

Yellow Line (C1004A)
Heavy
Song drags WAYYYYYYYYYYY too much in some parts and gets too repetitive, it gets rather boring after 3 min. My only complaint with this file are those LOOOOOOONG hold patterns which are ****ing weird to hit and that hold spam before them, otherwise I wouldn't really mind much sliding this into the pack. Maybe

[C1004A]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

i sent in Yellow Line because well, i wanted to send in a marathon song because i haven't seen many marathon anime songs besides medleys and stuff

i can change up the hold patterns if you want, and im assuming the 2nd chart isn't even up for consideration? ;3

also, sent in another file

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

i sent in Yellow Line because well, i wanted to send in a marathon song because i haven't seen many marathon anime songs besides medleys and stuff

i can change up the hold patterns if you want, and im assuming the 2nd chart isn't even up for consideration? ;3

also, sent in another file

I don't really think oni makes much of a difference to the file, it just makes it more dumpy tbh xd

If you mean second chart by easy charts I'll see it after file is passed xd

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

A Tiny, Tiny, Clever Commander (Kaneh)
Hard
I'd personally cut that indexstreaming section for easy chart and make normal layering, but i guess it's acceptable. Yes
Oni
Holds during the long hold section could be reduced in length. That pattern near the end 1 23 1 23 is awkward to hit given the difficulty of the file. Not much to say well layered and enjoyable. Yes

Barran (mi40)
Heavy
Those jacks at the end of the section aren't really emphasizing that much, and make file awkward. Layering is ok, could be better, but file isn't that interesting to begin with. I'm being more stricter on your files since you sent me 7 files from the same game lol. No

Battle Won (mi40)
That beginning 24ths jack is a huge difficulty spike, consider making it at least a 24th trill. I'm not feeling much your hands, since file isn't emphasizing much to begin with. I would personally layer some some sections of the song more. Overall not bad but needs a couple of files before I can pass this. Maybe

Burion Ruins (mi40)
Heavy
I'm not quite feeling your layering here. It feels like it was done for dumpy purposes more than following more the flow of the file. Some parts don't really flow with the song. No

Escape from the City (C1004A)
Heavy
Those jumps feel completely overemphasized, out of place, and inconsistent.
Not sure why you decided to step non jack transitions while you used jack ones on others. Given the real difficulty of the file I don't think they're necessary.
97.500 Again those jumps feel completely out of place.
I'm not really feeling your vocal hands at all.
No

Flower (SonicX)
Hard
M6+ I didn't say to change patterns, I said that you could use pitch relevance. Patterns look iffy but it still works.
M14+ same as above, patterns are a bit iffy but somehow they still how, may want to check them (missing piano sounds).
M17 No, recheck.
M18 Missing piano sounds :d
M21 No
M22 Same deal as M18, cause the pattern is the same
M25 I can forgive you in this one.
M26 Check some synths, some notes are badly placed
M38+ Check 16ths before the end of each measure.
226.000 Missing 16th after that 32nd
265.750 Missing 16th
268.000+ I would personally layer those sounds as hands till the end but given your minimalistic layering choice it isn't really needed, you could use it as climax theory and layer the ending of the song with more jumps and include hands.
M72+ same deal as M38+, those two aren't that important as the rest.
M87+ Check that ending.
Overall not a bad attempt, it has mistakes but it's fluid enough to pass this if you fix some things. For now. No

Harvest Dance (Anaru & hi19hi19)
Standard
I need you guys to simplify this more sorry (especially hands jacks and trills, and MAYBE rolls). No
Heavy
I find that some hands were not really needed but not much of a problem. Well layered and enjoyable. I find this really fun. Jacks, bursts and 24th trills made this really interesting to play. Yes when you fix easy chart

Holy Orders (LC)
Oni
Holds may be trimmed in length to avoid awkward patterns.
Jump jacks during hold patterns are awkward to hit and hard for some people.
I find your layering iffy and inconsistent especially with guitar jacks. You're not always layering them, and seem kinda randomly layered.
Also, I don't know why this may be the most boring way to step this song lol. No

Intro (mi40)
Heavy
Again I'm not really feeling some of your layering here. That long jump jack is a huge difficulty spike and looks like it's there only for difficulty purposes not for really layering purposes. Some hands don't feel right and overemphasized. No

Neko Miko Reimu B (Kaneh)
Heavy
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Oni
I'm not quite sure what are those triple holds at the beginning going to lol. M41 and M49 why did you layer both different? O.o .
Overall, well layered and enjoyable. Yes

Last Fortune (AnTiHoLiDaYs)
Easy charts
All good. Yes
Oni
Try to differentiate cymbals from the rest as miniholds or hands next time. Yes

March for Koala (C1004A)
Standard
I would personally prefer if you can turn, those trills into something easier, and that burst in the end, maybe removing jumps from it. Also stepping those thrills as quads is weird as ****. Maybe a jump or mines but not more than that lol. Fix this plz
Heavy
O boy, I think 80% of OD community is gonna hate on this file, especially those bursts lol. Good scoring file. Yes

Party Love (SonicX)
Offset is late again
Heavy
Lol decide if you're stepping an easy or a hard file. Also that chorus is REALLY REALLY borderline dumpy. No

Pepperi Mountain (mi40)
Heavy
Those jumpjacks are HUGE difficulty spikes. I don't really mind them but i'm pretty sure no one outside the ones that enjoy kb packs will enjoy this. No

Poinsettia (SonicX)
I'm really more worried about the difficulty spikes of this file, especially since the second part is WAY more layered that the first part, especially the 24ths part (and the second and last one have jacks :S). There are some mistakes, not really huge ones (I may have to check but well as I said I'm not worried about that). Also the ending minefield (I know not everyone plays with mines, but well) may be difficult for some people considering the difficulty of the first half of the file. Consider reworking this and make the file a bit more layered overall, with layering to percussion (which you don't seem much proned to layering) and keep the most "difficult" parts of the file like this with little variation.
Teleporting mines near the end.
There's a mine below the hold at the end.
No

T-Fanger Battle (mi40)
Heavy
I find this is pretty fluid, short and nicely done. Quads MAY be a bit too much. Easy chart

Toronko Village Spring (mi40)
ZZZZZZZZZZZ song sorry. No

In www. just night (C1004A)
Heavy
Your layering is way too dumpy especially after that synth sound ends. Also cause this is an istrumental ver of a song bg is pretty generic, and turns boring after a while. Sorry. No

Fang of Critias (C1004A)
Heavy
File isn't much interesting to begin with and feels excessively layered, especially during the long hold part. Feels overlayered and lackluster due to song. I dunno

File queue is at 35 files. Get your easy charts done, files without a passed easy charts won't be included in the pack. I'll probably end submissions by mid May so you have around 3 weeks. Also this pack ended being more non anime oriented than I originally thought. Also I'll update the charts that need gfx or a replacement with hope that somebody will help.

[Victorique]

Re: Otaku's Dream 2nd Keyboard Mix (Submissions Open)

Battle Won (mi40)
Standard
After playing this file for a second judging, I realized how repetitive is this even though it's only 1:11. I get bored past the second repetition. Sorry for making even make a fix for this but I'm not really enjoying this. No

Beat from Melty Blood (Tweety3187)
Heavy
Simple easy flowing files. Yes, easy chart plz

F (Blue)
Easy Charts
All good. Yes

Festival at the old temple stage (Tweety3187)
Heavy
Good bass jack theory, my only problem with this file is that in the minihold part you're placing jacks right after them which makes the file in that part hard to read. Try to do something with that if you can. Yes

FLOWER (SonicX)
Heavy
M69 jumps are really off compared to the rest of your layering.
M87 I was telling you to layer more with more density in the second part of the song after the first chorus not at the end lol. That layering is really really off compared to the rest.
Side Note: As I said before I'm not against rejecting this file but I feel due to the simplicity of the layering of this probably 70% of the sm community won't play this and files are made for ppl to play it. As I also said before this file has already been stepped, a thousand times in a really similar way (and better), and I think already song choice is making this less playable due to the number of stepped charts for this. But w/e do as you like. =/

Heavenly Moon (Crazy Star)
Oni
The way you layered this (your steps) doesn't flow with the song in a lot of places (I don't feel it). Enough reason for me to fail this. No

Kimono Princess (Yume)
Standard
Good as an easy chart. Yes
Heavy
Amazn, probably one of my favorite files of the pack. Yes

Let's Go Modulation! (aloola)
Oni
Lol do something about that first 64ths burst it's really awkward to hit.
ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ song is ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ and earcancer. Layering is fun but song is ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ
Yes


perditus paradisus (XxdbxX)
Oni
ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ long holds + overuse of hands + dump + <Icancontinuefactor> = No

Poinsettia (SonicX)
Heavy
Sync your files goddamit
Your beginning jump layering is sometimes not consistent.
Beat 57+ Please step those parts with some kind of pitch relevancy ZZZ.
111.000 Jump
171.000+ Stepping those bass sounds as jumps doesn't really help with the flow of the song, keep the layering you've been using and remove those.
193.000+ after seeing this transition and the next one which includes percussion, it feels weird to layer both with the same layering (actually it feels weird to layer only the synth, ofc i'm saying this for beat 57+ too and the other repetitions of this part), think about it, you're transitioning to a louder sound. But it doesn't really help that you layer 209.000+ as hands since you're using hands for cymbals already and will make your file a lot messier, especially since your layering isn't that dense during the song (I mean include hands more jump layering etc), so maybe I'll suggest switching back the synths to single taps or reworking that part into different layering, for example using percussion (some jumps on drums) while keeping the synths.
294.000+ same deal as 171.000+. (ofc i'm saying this for the rest of the song similar parts too)
Check 16th percussion sounds, some are off (slow down to half rate and listen to them)
626.333+ Those layered as jumps don't really feel as jumps.
Overall file isn't as bad as I make it sound, maybe because it's pretty ok is that I took my time to make a fairly long revision for this. I would really like if you worked more on this song than Flower, it can be replayable with some fixes, and it hasn't been stepped (I think). No

Sakura-Koi-Uta (Tweety3187)
Heavy
!luv

Shiai Kaishi (Bombastik)
Oni
Not feeling your decision to switch layering at the beginning. Not feeling most of your hands. Steps don't really flow with the song. Most 8th jacks are badly placed they don't feel well, and some notes are placed wrongly too. No

Yellow Line (C1004A)
Heavy
Song is that repetitive that you're forced to vary your layering a lot through the song. Results: Confusing and inconsistent layering + I don't feel your hands near the end + I don't feel your jumpjacks at all. Also, ZZZZZZ not enjoying this at all sorry. No