New story - Back to Earth

[Terry316]

Re: New story - Back to Earth

I don't get why you think it's acceptable for Casey's dialogue to be red but you're put off by Lily's dialogue being blue.

Honestly I started using color because I find reading dialogue tiresome with all the "he saids" and the like. I suppose the most basic meaning behind the color is that Lily speaks in blue words because she's from the blue planet and Casey speaks in red because he's from the red planet. I have other characters and colors planned and we'll see what comes from those.

i suppose it's mostly because you're seeing what the robot is processing at the same time, which makes it seem ok. cause he's a robot. but like i said, it's quirky and i like it, and i didn't notice the relation between the colors and the planets before. very nice.

Thanks for your comments and thanks for reading! I do take a small amount of pride in my description, as I feel it's the only part of prose I think I'm alright at.

yes, it is very good. i could definitely pick up a few things from your style.

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Oh and I've written a pile of poetry too if you want to read more of my stuff. There are links in my signature to different things I've written.
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yeah i checked out Treachery of Exploration already, i'm just too tired to comment. i can barely finish this post as it is...*yawn*... poetry is too deep for me at this hour.

[All_That_Chaz]

Re: New story - Back to Earth

Wow first update in 4 years. Finally found time to get back to this. This update centers on describing Lily's work harvesting and the encounter between Lily and Casey that evening. I'm not in love with the description at the end as I was tired and wanted to finish it. I understand it's quite long. Thank you so much to all of my readers! Comments are welcome!