The Unforgotten Saint

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  • jordanblink
    FFR Player
    • Sep 2007
    • 26
    #16
    Re: The Unforgotten Saint

    Wow that was deep. I love how the song adds to the ambiance of the story, and freakishly enough it ended at the same time I finished the story =x. This story got me thinking of how there are some people that just die alone. They never managed to reach anyone their whole life and just end up being so miserable. It makes you think of how the shirt we wear or the shoes we pick for the day won't really matter after we are all gone. What will matter is how much of an influence and inspiration you made on other people. That will last longer than silly daily irrelevances. Nice job Phynx I really liked it.

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      • MalReynolds
        CHOCK FULL O' NUTRIENTS
        • Sep 2003
        • 6571
        #17
        Re: The Unforgotten Saint

        I thought the first half was considerably stronger than the second. As soon as you introduced God, the style changed slightly. It wasn't jarring, it just wasn't as eloquent as before.

        Otherwise, all I have to say is:

        Bitchin'.
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          • Aleste
            stating the obvious.
            • Oct 2003
            • 337
            #18
            Re: The Unforgotten Saint

            the first half did seem stronger than the second... But i agree that this was moving. thanks phynx :]

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              • virus003
                FFR Veteran
                • Feb 2008
                • 1822
                #19
                Re: The Unforgotten Saint

                Pretty strong thought there Phynx, loved it.

                Originally posted by XUioX
                too hard and too long.. the rest of it was easy though.
                Originally posted by roundb0x
                i still have photos of my dad dickfeeding me when i was like 5
                Originally posted by who_cares973
                stop back seat modding its annoying

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                  • Phynx
                    I'm Forever
                    • Mar 2007
                    • 3005
                    #20
                    Re: The Unforgotten Saint

                    Originally posted by MalReynolds
                    I thought the first half was considerably stronger than the second. As soon as you introduced God, the style changed slightly. It wasn't jarring, it just wasn't as eloquent as before.

                    Otherwise, all I have to say is:

                    Bitchin'.
                    Well, I'm of no religion, I personally detest organized religion, but I DO believe in a higher power, I would only refer to him as God as that is an easy word to fit to the power above. It DID change the second section some, I agree, though I wanted it to. I added that bit to strengthen the theme of the story, it more directly imposed the impression the man left with the people.

                    EDIT - Thanks again everyone. I'm extremely happy that you all enjoyed it. I put my heart into it.
                    Guardin' of the Scared Shrine

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                      • vantilburg
                        lol internet
                        • Feb 2006
                        • 545
                        #21
                        Re: The Unforgotten Saint

                        I'm glad you have the heart to see the good in people. There are times when I don't have the same patience with others. But reading this, I'm compelled to be as generous as I can be to those around me. Thanks, Phynx.
                        Your saintliness won't be forgotten.
                        Last edited by vantilburg; 09-6-2008, 06:42 PM.


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