The Reasons

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  • ..::Dance::..
    FFR Player
    • Apr 2009
    • 23
    #1

    The Reasons

    Hai guys. This is a poem I made a while ago. Tell me if u like it! CnC please, ratings if u want.

    THE REASONS

    There is a reason why I smile
    There is a reason why I pray
    There is a reason why I always want
    To go to school today

    There is a reason why I laugh
    There is a reason whi I cry
    There is a reason why I always want
    To go ahead and try

    There is a reason why I love
    there is a reason why i care
    There is a reason why i always want
    To be right there

    There is a reason why I live
    There is a reason for life, too
    But I can't find the reasons why
    The reasons all point to you

    Thankyou
    Last edited by ..::Dance::..; 04-11-2009, 03:18 AM.
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    • who_cares973
      FFR Player
      • Aug 2006
      • 15407
      #2
      Re: The Reasons

      k ?_?

      pink font didnt help

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        • ..::Dance::..
          FFR Player
          • Apr 2009
          • 23
          #3
          Re: The Reasons

          Originally posted by who_cares973
          k ?_?

          pink font didnt help
          umm..ok, any critique on the poem itself?

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            • who_cares973
              FFR Player
              • Aug 2006
              • 15407
              #4
              Re: The Reasons

              it's really really corny

              but i dont know anything poems

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                • Engler
                  FFR Player
                  • Jan 2007
                  • 2340
                  #5
                  Re: The Reasons

                  Well, it's certainly cute...

                  But, in all honesty, it lacks a sense of originality. You may have written this poem, but I have read countless iterations of it.

                  The best poems are those that succeed at providing the reader with a unique perspective, yet this poem has failed in that regard.

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                    • kitkat9
                      FFR Player
                      • Feb 2009
                      • 87
                      #6
                      Re: The Reasons

                      Just like Engler said it is something seen a million times, but don't take that too personally, we all have done it at least once in our lives.

                      I really like the flow of the poem. It would be appreciated if there was a little more punctuation. Why is spelled wrong "whi" no biggy though.

                      Truthfully there isn't much wrong at all. It is well put together, there could be a few different word choices to make a bigger impact on the reader. But overall great.

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                        • Dr Tran
                          Banned
                          • Aug 2008
                          • 1134
                          #7
                          Re: The Reasons

                          And the reason is you~

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