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  • awesome13
    FFR Player
    • Jul 2008
    • 9
    #1

    Love is...

    (pretty sad poem... )

    Love is…

    Love is a mental illness
    That chips away at your sanity
    Playing games with your conscience
    Altering your grip of reality

    Love is a desire;
    A lust, a must, a want
    Something no human has ever denied
    Something no human has ever forgot

    Love is passion
    A strong bond between two souls
    A bond never to be broken
    Only if one breaks it first

    Love is a game
    Played hoping to win
    But like all games, someone either cheats
    Or gives up altogether

    Love is something that I once had
    A mental illness, toying with my mind
    All because of one boy
    My mind is left with scars
    FEAR MY RANDOMNESS OF DOOM!

    .....yeah i know...i'm random...not always...but sometimes...FFR = awesome
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    • R-Sisco
      FFR Veteran
      • Nov 2007
      • 163
      #2
      Re: Love is...

      Did your girlfriend/boyfriend break up with you? Yeah I read it...its ok.
      Last edited by R-Sisco; 07-31-2008, 08:16 AM. Reason: because i can dammit

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        • awesome13
          FFR Player
          • Jul 2008
          • 9
          #3
          Re: Love is...

          Originally posted by R-Sisco
          Did your girlfriend/boyfriend break up with you? Yeah I read it...its ok.
          well, a guy i liked rejected me (i'm over it now) ...thanks
          FEAR MY RANDOMNESS OF DOOM!

          .....yeah i know...i'm random...not always...but sometimes...FFR = awesome

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            • who_cares973
              FFR Player
              • Aug 2006
              • 15407
              #4
              Re: Love is...

              Originally posted by awesome13
              (pretty sad poem... )

              Love is passion
              A strong bond between two souls
              A bond never to be broken
              Only if one breaks it first

              Love is a game
              Played hoping to win
              But like all games, someone either cheats
              Or gives up altogether

              overall an ok poem the lines in bold sounded weird try rewording it



              broken hearts suck =/

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                • sasukekun997
                  FFR Player
                  • Jul 2007
                  • 101
                  #5
                  Re: Love is...

                  Never experienced heartbreak, and hope to never experience it, but I know what it feels like... It sucks

                  But hey, you will find the right person, and when you do, it's pretty much easy from there...

                  Keep looking...
                  Originally posted by Beethovens mask
                  ...I could jack off and fc this song at the same time
                  Originally posted by ninjaKIWI
                  Suck Zaghurims penis and oops out comes simfiles
                  I love you Cherokee!!

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                    • Erothyme
                      FFR Player
                      • Jan 2008
                      • 2033
                      #6
                      Re: Love is...

                      Originally posted by sasukekun997
                      But hey, you will find the right person, and when you do, it's pretty much easy from there...
                      hahahahahahaha


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                        • TheRapingDragon
                          A car crash mind
                          • Aug 2005
                          • 9788
                          #7
                          Re: Love is...

                          Never experienced heartbreak, and hope to never experience it, but I know what it feels like... It sucks
                          How can you know what it feels like if you've never experienced it. I mean you contradicted yourself in the same sentence.

                          Ok though, poem time:

                          Love is a mental illness
                          That chips away at your sanity
                          Playing games with your conscience
                          Altering your grip of reality
                          Ok ok, dark depressing start. Obviously hates love.

                          Love is a desire;
                          A lust, a must, a want
                          Something no human has ever denied
                          Something no human has ever forgot
                          People deny love all the time. People also fall in and out of love and technically "forget" they ever loved people in the past. Both those lines don't fit in with the rest of your poem, in the sense that love can be full of "lust", "must", and "want".

                          Love is passion
                          A strong bond between two souls
                          A bond never to be broken
                          Only if one breaks it first
                          Last two lines don't fit well.

                          Love is a game
                          Played hoping to win
                          But like all games, someone either cheats
                          Or gives up altogether
                          Again, far too "wah wah" for my liking. There's no real talent here, you're just writing like millions of others over a small insignificant event. I mean depressing or what. Someone always cheats or gives up in a game. Not really. I mean even the imagery isn't worked into it very well.

                          Love is something that I once had
                          A mental illness, toying with my mind
                          All because of one boy
                          My mind is left with scars
                          Ya ok, entire thing doesn't really fit well with me because it's so generic, but hey, keep trying.

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