My First Poem ^_^

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Well, it's not bad for a first attempt. Not bad at all, actually. Not top quality poetry but not trash either (which means you're doing better than some of the "experienced" poets here already).

One thing I really want to mention is that whatever poetry contest you entered with this is probably a scam. I know it's hard to believe. But it's a very common scam. Did you enter through poetry.com? It's one of the original "poetry scams".

What this basically means is that probably nobody read your poem, sent an automated message telling you that your poetry is amazing, and then told you it would be in a book (that you can purchase for a discount price of 50 dollars or something). I hope to dear god you didn't order the book.

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Actually, it was through my school ROFL. I know it wasn't the best of the people who entered (which were kids across America =O), not even CLOSE to the best, but that might have thought it was good enough to put in the book because they might not have known how old I was. The contest was like, 9-16 year olds, so, yeah.

It's also pretty funny that I'm 'probably better the some of the more 'experienced' poets here', which kind of says something about the internet, since this is pretty much my first poem. xD

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Yeah.... I didn't mean it so much as a compliment as a note to all the so-called poets here.

Anyway, keep it up. It looks like you might be on the right track. Suggestions: your poem should be like a can of juice concentrate. Juicy condensed flavour in a small package. Poems are tidbits of imagery. Focus on evoking detailed images with as few garbage words as possible. If you don't know why a certain line is there, take it out. Less is more.

The attempt at a rhythm was not contrived. This is a good thing.

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Wow..well I was going to say good job, but since this has turned into a warning...

I'll be heading off..