Goodbye (poem)

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  • Suicideforabheng
    FFR Player
    • Dec 2007
    • 8

    #1

    Goodbye (poem)

    Goodbye...

    Giving someone all your love is never an assurance
    that they'll love you back...
    Some people are just not meant to be in your life,
    no matter how much you want them to be...
    I hug you good-bye like it's nothing...
    while all I want to do is hold on forever...
    I used to smile when I told people
    that you were mine...
    but now,
    I can't even smile and say your name at the same time...
    As much as I love you,
    I have to say goodbye...
    coz I know you would be happier if i let you go...
    I'm sorry
    if i made you cry,
    i'm sorry
    if tears fell from your eyes...
    but remember,
    for every tear that fell from your eyes,
    two fell from mine...
    Missing you isn't the hardest part,
    knowing I once had you,
    is what breaks my heart....
    I'll never forget the times we once shared,
    And I'll always remember how much you once cared...
    now it's over
    it's time to move on...
    It's never easy to leave you ...
    but, i have to take the pain...
    and cry all the way home
    coz i know it will never be the same...
    I know when I leave,
    distance will keep us apart...
    But distance,
    no matter how far,
    can't change these feelingsin my heart...
    Ill Just turn my head
    when I see you,
    hope you will understand..
    One day,
    I will be able to look at your eye...
    with out feeling the pain
    you've caused in me...
    I hope in time,
    I will be happy as I call your name once again...
    Happiness is too far for us now...
    but even if it's near,
    i know it will be hard for us to et there...
    Baby,
    it's never gonna work out...
    I love you
    Goodbye

    another art..

    I used to smile when I told people
    that you were mine...
    but now,
    I can't even smile and say your name at the same time...
    As much as I love you,
    I have to say goodbye...
  • imajrockette
    FFR Player
    • Apr 2007
    • 36

    #2
    Re: Goodbye (poem)

    that poem is sad but pretty good.breaking up always sucks.i never been in the situation but i know sum people that have and it seems almost devastating sumtimes.

    it does hurt when you like some one alot of love them and they dont feel the same about you.i know how that feels and its just a horrible painful feeling....

    the art was good.your friend is talented.its so cool looking and pretty realistic to just like your gerad way pic ^^.


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    • Tokzic
      FFR Player
      • May 2005
      • 6878

      #3
      Re: Goodbye (poem)

      Stop posting art that has absolutely no relevence to your literature.

      Also, just like your last poem, you do nothing but reword ideas that have been explored in every single poem ever in a completely uninteresting and unoriginal way. And, again, just like your last poem, your grammar blows. Your spacing is completely sporadic and meaningless.

      Don't post more of your poems unless you show that you have the will to improve as a writer. If improving doesn't matter than you, then there's no point in your posting your work here.

      Last edited by Tokzic: Today at 11:59 PM. Reason: wait what

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      • Chrissi
        FFR Player
        • Mar 2004
        • 3019

        #4
        Re: Goodbye (poem)

        Originally posted by Suicideforabheng
        Bad poetry oh noetry
        This is a subject and style of writing better suited toward myspace. Not poetry.
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