The Lonely Blooger - A Geek Romance

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  • MalDON
    Retired Staff
    • Feb 2004
    • 619
    #1

    The Lonely Blooger - A Geek Romance

    I spent the last week or so writing a romance story inspired by a girl I had a thing for. It is 10 parts and covers about 11 pages if you were to print it.

    http://www.dawnerd.com/blog/category/the-lonely-blogger/


    The first part starts at the very bottom of the page. I know it could use some editing, but I would like to know what you think.
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    • ShastaTwist
      FFR Veteran
      • Sep 2004
      • 599
      #2
      Re: The Lonely Blooger - A Geek Romance

      The friend's name is "Tbag."

      ...



      Edit::

      Okay, I just finished reading what you have. The story kind of drags and you seem to tell about a lot of unnecessary things. I say "seem" because you may be tying them into the story at some point. Also, a lot of the things that happen, like Troy's friends making a date for him with the girl (does she even have a name?), are events that are highly unlikely to take place in real life.
      Last edited by ShastaTwist; 06-24-2007, 01:56 PM.

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        • MalDON
          Retired Staff
          • Feb 2004
          • 619
          #3
          Re: The Lonely Blooger - A Geek Romance

          Most of the events would never happen in real life in the first place. Partially why it was written.

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