This is a poem of mine.

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  • sujishishou
    FFR Player
    • Oct 2005
    • 183
    #1

    This is a poem of mine.

    This poem is fairly straight forward. I call it "Mercy".


    Ruefully, the lord of my heart is now not joy.
    Although, before and after, it was twice once so,
    chryselephantine butterflies ploy.
    Hurt me not, but reelect that once great lord.

    Eleison! I cry to thee.
    Let that lord return to me.


    So let me know what you guys think of it!
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    • sujishishou
      FFR Player
      • Oct 2005
      • 183
      #2
      Re: This is a poem of mine.

      sorry for the double post but it has been 3 days... : (
      i guess no one likes my poem....

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        • Morehead_Kid
          FFR Player
          • Jan 2006
          • 64
          #3
          Re: This is a poem of mine.

          i like it..good meter


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            • ShastaTwist
              FFR Veteran
              • Sep 2004
              • 599
              #4
              Re: This is a poem of mine.

              Originally posted by sujishishou
              sorry for the double post but it has been 3 days... : (
              i guess no one likes my poem....
              It's sort of strange, I didn't have much to say. :/

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                • sujishishou
                  FFR Player
                  • Oct 2005
                  • 183
                  #5
                  Re: This is a poem of mine.

                  Did you guys see it is an acrostic?
                  That is my girlfriend. And alas, she is far from me...
                  my little butterfly....

                  and eleison in latin means mercy. btw

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                    • redwrist
                      FFR Player
                      • May 2005
                      • 392
                      #6
                      Re: This is a poem of mine.

                      I like it I have a few poems published on poemofquotes.com myself









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                      i just crapped in my panties

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                        • la
                          FFR Player
                          • Sep 2006
                          • 25
                          #7
                          Re: This is a poem of mine.

                          Hm. Decent, but there was one part that drove me crazy. "...is now not joy."
                          Overall, good poem. Rachel is the name of my sister. X3

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                            • sujishishou
                              FFR Player
                              • Oct 2005
                              • 183
                              #8
                              Re: This is a poem of mine.

                              My girlfriend's name is actually Raquel but I did not think of anything that started with the letter Q that I really liked. So I used the English equivalent of Raquel which is Rachel of course. I wrote two other acrostics with her name as well. But one is in Spanish and the other is in French.

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