Seeing as how I love having my literature torn apart by the Hack Formerly Known As Fojar, here's an excerpt from my novel-in-progress, Machine Gun Symphony.
Chapter I: Locked and Loaded
Section III
"Now, over the years, my superiors have told me to be more "hands-on" and less "lecture-like." So we will be doing something more interactive," started Mr. Cherwan.
The class' attention snapped into focus at this semi-exciting news.
"So instead of a lecture, this will be a free-response discussion," finished Mr. Cherwan.
The class all moaned at the same time.
"Shut it," snapped Mr. Cherwan as the class immediately quieted down.
Mr. Cherwan began to walk through the middle aisle of all the tables with his hands behind his back.
"We will not be discussing such trivial things such as volcanoes or the rainforest. Today, the topic of the question is..."
Mr. Cherwan paused for a moment.
"The question I pose to you people is how has the Daimones War affected the surrounding environment of the ghost city of Aston and the current Chronos City?" said Mr. Cherwan wolfishly.
The class sat in silence. It was a question that none of them were prepared to answer. Mr. Cherwan looked around in delight at the horrified faces.
"Since no one is volunteering to talk, I'll call on you to answer. Also, if you give me a wrong answer, you can kiss fifty points off your first test goodbye."
The class all cringed in horror at the sentence. Without even yelling, Mr. Cherwan could make an entire class of students' blood run cold. Mr. Cherwan gave off the vibe of a person who was used to being quite commanding and it definitely showed. Mr. Cherwan looked at a small boy with blonde hair and round frame glasses.
"Mr. Freedman, an answer please?"
The boy looked nervous for a moment and then spoke.
"The war made the environment bad?" said the boy in a high-pitched, half-hoping voice.
Mr. Cherwan looked at him and began to clap loudly.
"The war made the environment bad. After years in advancing our knowledge of science on Earth since the end of the war and the best you could answer was with a pathetic cause as that. Mr. Freedman, you know that test we are going to take next class?" asked Mr. Cherwan.
The boy slowly nodded.
"You now have a 50, considering you even manage to score that high," finished Mr. Cherwan.
The boy's face dropped and he put his head down on the desk.
"Ok, the next victim will be..." started Mr. Cherwan as he searched his list of names on his clipboard. "Ah, Mr. Machina. Please grace us with your answer."
The class turned around in their seats to listen. Kei put his head back and looked at the ceiling.
"The guy who said that the war made the environment bad was not wrong. He just worded it incorrectly." said Kei.
Mr. Cherwan sat on the front of his desk.
"Worded incorrectly? Then please correct his mistake Mr. Machina," said Mr. Cherwan.
Kei sat up in his chair and folded his hands.
"The Daimones War, on a global scale, destroyed the ozone layer that surrounds this planet by the extreme use of the M-108 Ultraviolet bomb. The intense bursts ultraviolet light eroded away the very thing that protects us from the suns light," finished Kei.
"Very interesting deduction Mr. Machina. However, it fails to answer my question. You have lost 50..." started Mr. Cherwan.
"I'm not finished," said Kei. "How this relates to us is the fact that Aston was the second most bombed city in the Daimones War. Not only did this basically destroy the ozone from the above the city, the ultraviolet light destroyed all vegetation and fauna that inhabited Aston. So to answer your question plainly Mr Cherwan, the war destroyed the ozone layer from around Aston and Chronos City, and made the environment and food sources unusable," finished Kei.
The class remained silent for about a moment.
"Correct Mr. Machina. Since you gave the right answer, I will only deduct 25 points because of your concern for another classmate's semantics," said Mr. Cherwan as he turned towards the blackboard.
Kei threw his hands up in half disgust and frustration and put his head down for the rest of class.
"That was wrong of Mr. Cherwan to take points away from you for giving a right answer," said Hannah as she bit into her slice of pizza.
Kei shrugged and lazily poked at his ketchup-covered french fries while in the lunch room. Suddenly, a small hand tapped Kei on the shoulder. Kei turned around to see the small boy named Freedman standing behind him.
"Yeah?" asked Kei shifting his body around.
"Uh, thanks for helping me out in class this morning," said the boy. "My name is Thomas Freedman, but everyone calls me Tim for short.
"Don't worry about," said Kei smiling. "Someone needed to put that bastard in his place."
Depending on how this goes over with you guys, I'll decide if I'll put an excerpt from Chapter II up.
Chapter I: Locked and Loaded
Section III
"Now, over the years, my superiors have told me to be more "hands-on" and less "lecture-like." So we will be doing something more interactive," started Mr. Cherwan.
The class' attention snapped into focus at this semi-exciting news.
"So instead of a lecture, this will be a free-response discussion," finished Mr. Cherwan.
The class all moaned at the same time.
"Shut it," snapped Mr. Cherwan as the class immediately quieted down.
Mr. Cherwan began to walk through the middle aisle of all the tables with his hands behind his back.
"We will not be discussing such trivial things such as volcanoes or the rainforest. Today, the topic of the question is..."
Mr. Cherwan paused for a moment.
"The question I pose to you people is how has the Daimones War affected the surrounding environment of the ghost city of Aston and the current Chronos City?" said Mr. Cherwan wolfishly.
The class sat in silence. It was a question that none of them were prepared to answer. Mr. Cherwan looked around in delight at the horrified faces.
"Since no one is volunteering to talk, I'll call on you to answer. Also, if you give me a wrong answer, you can kiss fifty points off your first test goodbye."
The class all cringed in horror at the sentence. Without even yelling, Mr. Cherwan could make an entire class of students' blood run cold. Mr. Cherwan gave off the vibe of a person who was used to being quite commanding and it definitely showed. Mr. Cherwan looked at a small boy with blonde hair and round frame glasses.
"Mr. Freedman, an answer please?"
The boy looked nervous for a moment and then spoke.
"The war made the environment bad?" said the boy in a high-pitched, half-hoping voice.
Mr. Cherwan looked at him and began to clap loudly.
"The war made the environment bad. After years in advancing our knowledge of science on Earth since the end of the war and the best you could answer was with a pathetic cause as that. Mr. Freedman, you know that test we are going to take next class?" asked Mr. Cherwan.
The boy slowly nodded.
"You now have a 50, considering you even manage to score that high," finished Mr. Cherwan.
The boy's face dropped and he put his head down on the desk.
"Ok, the next victim will be..." started Mr. Cherwan as he searched his list of names on his clipboard. "Ah, Mr. Machina. Please grace us with your answer."
The class turned around in their seats to listen. Kei put his head back and looked at the ceiling.
"The guy who said that the war made the environment bad was not wrong. He just worded it incorrectly." said Kei.
Mr. Cherwan sat on the front of his desk.
"Worded incorrectly? Then please correct his mistake Mr. Machina," said Mr. Cherwan.
Kei sat up in his chair and folded his hands.
"The Daimones War, on a global scale, destroyed the ozone layer that surrounds this planet by the extreme use of the M-108 Ultraviolet bomb. The intense bursts ultraviolet light eroded away the very thing that protects us from the suns light," finished Kei.
"Very interesting deduction Mr. Machina. However, it fails to answer my question. You have lost 50..." started Mr. Cherwan.
"I'm not finished," said Kei. "How this relates to us is the fact that Aston was the second most bombed city in the Daimones War. Not only did this basically destroy the ozone from the above the city, the ultraviolet light destroyed all vegetation and fauna that inhabited Aston. So to answer your question plainly Mr Cherwan, the war destroyed the ozone layer from around Aston and Chronos City, and made the environment and food sources unusable," finished Kei.
The class remained silent for about a moment.
"Correct Mr. Machina. Since you gave the right answer, I will only deduct 25 points because of your concern for another classmate's semantics," said Mr. Cherwan as he turned towards the blackboard.
Kei threw his hands up in half disgust and frustration and put his head down for the rest of class.
"That was wrong of Mr. Cherwan to take points away from you for giving a right answer," said Hannah as she bit into her slice of pizza.
Kei shrugged and lazily poked at his ketchup-covered french fries while in the lunch room. Suddenly, a small hand tapped Kei on the shoulder. Kei turned around to see the small boy named Freedman standing behind him.
"Yeah?" asked Kei shifting his body around.
"Uh, thanks for helping me out in class this morning," said the boy. "My name is Thomas Freedman, but everyone calls me Tim for short.
"Don't worry about," said Kei smiling. "Someone needed to put that bastard in his place."
Depending on how this goes over with you guys, I'll decide if I'll put an excerpt from Chapter II up.
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