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  • Kirby615
    Music is my soul
    • Nov 2005
    • 284
    #1

    Dreams

    So for the past year or so I stopped writing music and just left all my old songs sitting around not doing anything. However, I'm working on redoing them to hopefully improve upon where I was!

    The major issue I'm dealing with right now is the simple fact that I don't have any kind of "professional" recording equipment, namely any kind of professional mic. I've been using a Rockband microphone to record my voice, which as you can probably imagine, does not produce the greatest quality. Gotta make do with what you have though!

    For those who don't know, I'm a vocal performance major right now, which means I mainly do opera and stuff. However, I've always really liked rock, country, and pop and wanted to be able to perform that kind of stuff sometime in my life. It's been a struggle, but I'm still working every single day to improve my voice (whether it's opera or pop style). So, without further ado, here is one of my older songs called Dreams.

    http://soundcloud.com/thefallenrain/dreams

    Tell me what you think, what I could improve on, etc. I really enjoy constructive criticism!
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    • Frank Munoz
      Muein
      • Nov 2007
      • 2047
      #2
      Re: Dreams

      Up the vocal part~

      Overall kinda good. Mixing could be better, and maybe some stronger chord progressions, motifs, etc.

      IMO this would be better as an acoustic song rather than pop/syntheticnessesws

      The vocal part doesn't have much range. Seems to stay in a high, isolated area which I'm guessing you're really comfortable with.
      (not saying to go to your lowest note than shoot up 3.5 octaves nuh uh)
      But, my god I'm glad you can sing decently. Big plus, and you don't have to worry about your voice so much.
      unlike me where that's what I needa work on cause I don't sing much

      I felt the tempo was a too Vivace with that 140 tempo.
      Going down tempo and some better works with the bg music,
      or with what I said before, acoustic piano/maybe even guitar would make this piece more entertaining.

      That part at 1:18 has a weird 2 bar phrasing; occurs once more at 2:40.
      I believe part of what makes it unnatural to me is because the bg restarts with the same chord notes as it does in the beginning of the chorus, while the vocal part is in an ending state. Not too sure...
      anyways
      _________________________________

      Great work~

      6/10 though ;~;

      I don't usually fancy songs with this type of structure(typical progressions to me), but hey, I was doing way worse my first few years of musical composing.

      • -Minus 1 for typicality
        -Minus 2 for that weird 2 phrasing ending(cause imma butt~)
        -Minus 1 again for the subject of the song(it's an overdone topic, ...typical~)



      I feel like I'm giving a kinda harsh review... forgive me on this.
      But, I would like to see what else you can come up with in the future c:
      Unknown and Unofficial
      may the good arrow guide you

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