for the girl i love

[GuidoHunter]

Re: for the girl i love

I've seen much worse. You had a couple of good lines in there, but they suffer from serious language problems.

--Guido

http://andy.mikee385.com

[ShAiOnEi]

Re: for the girl i love

There were only three.

Lmao! I suppose I did add one more to be overly dramatic about it.

[ShastaTwist]

Re: for the girl i love

if you ever, if you ever, if you ever, if you ever want.

There were only three.

Edit:I don't think they were going all out for novel quality shasta 8/.

And I'm just saying, criticism is a natural thing in life and if you can't take the truth in a brutally honest way, you're pretty much screwed.

[omgitznpv]

Re: for the girl i love

I've been told I'm a bitch, I can deal with that, it's all good.

You, on the other hand, you post a poem on a forum and you expect people to praise you like the poetry god you are. Well, here's something for you, I'm not going to bow down to your cheesy, cliche poetry about how great your girlfriend is and how great your relationship is and how great your rhyme scheme is. Learn to take some criticism. If you ever want to make anything out of yourself in the way of literary arts, you'd better learn to actually spell out your words. Furthermore, if you ever hope to become a poet or author of any kind or, rather, if you ever hope to make anything of yourself, you're going to have to realize that not everybody is going to be candy-coated with their criticism.



P.S.



I was being generous, much more generous than most of the other people in this thread, but he decided to attack me. Awesome.

Aware.



And good job saying that, said what I had in my head as a general thought. And at least you can deal with being called a bitch- what you say is the truth anyways. :\

[ShAiOnEi]

Re: for the girl i love

I've been told I'm a bitch, I can deal with that, it's all good.

You, on the other hand, you post a poem on a forum and you expect people to praise you like the poetry god you are. Well, here's something for you, I'm not going to bow down to your cheesy, cliche poetry about how great your girlfriend is and how great your relationship is and how great your rhyme scheme is. Learn to take some criticism. If you ever want to make anything out of yourself in the way of literary arts, you'd better learn to actually spell out your words. Furthermore, if you ever hope to become a poet or author of any kind or, rather, if you ever hope to make anything of yourself, you're going to have to realize that not everybody is going to be candy-coated with their criticism.

if you ever, if you ever, if you ever, if you ever want.

Edit:I don't think they were going all out for novel quality shasta 8/.

[ShastaTwist]

Re: for the girl i love

I've been told I'm a bitch, I can deal with that, it's all good.

You, on the other hand, you post a poem on a forum and you expect people to praise you like the poetry god you are. Well, here's something for you, I'm not going to bow down to your cheesy, cliche poetry about how great your girlfriend is and how great your relationship is and how great your rhyme scheme is. Learn to take some criticism. If you ever want to make anything out of yourself in the way of literary arts, you'd better learn to actually spell out your words. Furthermore, if you ever hope to become a poet or author of any kind or, rather, if you ever hope to make anything of yourself, you're going to have to realize that not everybody is going to be candy-coated with their criticism.



P.S.

It's mediocre?

I was being generous, much more generous than most of the other people in this thread, but he decided to attack me. Awesome.

[Verruckter]

Re: for the girl i love

Posted this on her profile
I figured you needed some mediocre poetry yourself so here.
One time
I made a rhyme
for a girl on FFR
who tried so hard to raise the bar
who never had the chance
to experience romance
so once she conveyed this little scheme
I was forced to right a poetry theme

Shastatwist is cool though this wasn't to be offensive or anything I was just bored lmao..

You forgot to make a rhyme with "meme".. haha

[ShAiOnEi]

Re: for the girl i love

Posted this on her profile
I figured you needed some mediocre poetry yourself so here.
One time
I made a rhyme
for a girl on FFR
who tried so hard to raise the bar
who never had the chance
to experience romance
so once she conveyed this little scheme
I was forced to right a poetry theme

Shastatwist is cool though this wasn't to be offensive or anything I was just bored lmao..

[omgitznpv]

Re: for the girl i love

did anyone ever tell you your a bitch...i think so

But she speaks the truth!

[burningeyes88]

Re: for the girl i love

You're definitely going to be with this guy for the rest of your life.

Sheerly because he writes you mediocre poetry.

did anyone ever tell you your a bitch...i think so

[arsonistsgetallthegirls]

Re: for the girl i love

awwww!!







i microwaved my pizza for too long and now it's all rubbery.... :/

[phe0nixblade]

Re: for the girl i love

Location: CT

Location: Canada

Oh. Ok.

[omgitznpv]

Re: for the girl i love

You're definitely going to be with this guy for the rest of your life.

Sheerly because he writes you mediocre poetry.

It's mediocre?

[sakura080789]

Re: for the girl i love

ok i liked it i write poems for my gf all the time

[ShastaTwist]

Re: for the girl i love

Yeah, I am fine with it. I think it proves he's not an ass like my ex... who never even hugged me, let alone write a poem.

You're definitely going to be with this guy for the rest of your life.

Sheerly because he writes you mediocre poetry.