Re: for the girl i love
burning: quit your temper tantrum.
I'm locking this since you clearly can't take criticism without flying into a childish rage.
--Guido
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Re: for the girl i love
yes modiocre is just what i wanted to hear
and **** you rubix you fakeLeave a comment:
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Oh, I didn't see that.
In that case, grow a pair, kid.Leave a comment:
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rubix, he called shasta a bitch after she was nice enough to call this poetry mediocre. plus im bored.Leave a comment:
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Hey give the kid a break, he's young. Every poet has their phases.
Long way to go... but eh, you gotta start somewhere.Leave a comment:
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alotta posts sense i went to bed. oh and to shasta i didnt want praise im just the type of person who feels the need to annoy everyone else with their stupid emotions.
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no ive just been ignoring the fact that your a retardLast edited by burningeyes88; 10-9-2007, 11:51 AM.Leave a comment:
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Re: for the girl i love
Your words leave the mind limp
And longing, for any chimp
Can say, “I love you” in dis-
Jointed free verse. Even this
Is completely improvised and
Uses the joys of emjamb-
Ment to replace your
Preachy lecture with a free-flowing fjord
Of words that are not controlled
By lines but instead hold
The idea you wanted in the first place
When you fell in love with little what's-her-face.
Oh, one last thing before I’m done –
Speak ill of Shasta and I’ll rip out your tongue.
Last edited by All_That_Chaz; 10-9-2007, 12:06 PM.Leave a comment:
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ROFL! so this is what happens when i just randomly view a thred! wow, well i people =]Leave a comment:
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moosh.
but im a moosh lover.
If it's from the heart thats all that matters.
Nicely done.Leave a comment:
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I think someone has ignored the fact that I have just stolen his girlfriend.Leave a comment:
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Haha that poem was interesting... ^^^Leave a comment:
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Re: for the girl i love
remember that time,
the first day we met?
our eyes cought eachother & since then I've been sick.
sick without you that is,
cause you didn't see,
my eyes caught a Goddess, you eyes caught a flea.
A flea in the sence,
that I was so small,
you eyes straight though me, as if I wasnt there at all,
that whole year you Ignored me,
except that one time,
when you were short 10 cents and asked for a dime,
but now I am sorry,
for you that is,
for you have missed out on this wonderful kid,
I have worked hard,
the summer I've slaved
and the fruit of my labor? A body unscathed,
today you said Hi,
I guess you thought I was cute,
I didn't bother to look & my mouth remained mute,
for I know your type,
I know what you want,
all body, no mind, WELL YOU GET WHAT YOU FLAUNT.Leave a comment:
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