I'm gonna keep re-submitting this damn thing until I die. Third time's a charm?

Monstercat permission. Let me know if you have any questions.

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Fixes from 2014 batch notes:

Note:

"✓" = Fixed
"✗" = Remained (Explination after)



Dossar:

[6/10] [Resubmission] One For All All For One {Razihel & Virtual Riot} (Xiz)
Length: 4:20.62
Steps: 1245
Jumps: 466
Hands: 73
✓ 15.27, 21.89, 25.82: Prominent melody isn't playing here so these should be single

notes, there is a softer melody running in the background but that's not what is being

layered here. Alternatively for 25.82 you can step an 8th minijack into the [14] jump

for the kick.
✓ 33.27: Jump on this 8th would be nice for accenting
✓ 35.44, 36.27: These 16ths are prominent enough that they can be included
✓ 39.58: Missing 16th, you can also have jumps for the 8th minijack right after to

layer this in as well
✗ The 48th burst patterning makes sense, but at the same time they are 64ths

technically and I think having 7-note 32nd bursts with spin-like patterns would work

better (7-note to prevent 16th minijacks into the hands). For instance, 47.96 could have

been 1243124-[123]
[XIZ] Half fixed. I changed this the 2nd time, not 1st for variety
✓ 78.17, 170.86: No jump?
✓ 82.72: 8th jack should break up here
✓ 84.37: 8th jack should break up here, different pitch
✓ 89.13: These 8ths/4ths should have been on the same column (3-note 8th jack)
✓ 90.99: Change this 4th to left or right. Same idea as 84.37
✓ 105.89, 106.10: These should have been hands -- also, the long up jack on 104.44

isn't following anything for that long, it should be broken up
✓ 112.72: Missing offsetted 8th (see 109.42)
✓ 135.06: Missing jump (see 133.41)
✓ 175.27: 12th minijack should be for the kick, not the lighter synth (an alternative

here for example could be [13][14][23])
✓ 181.89: Same idea as 175.27
✓ 190.58: Missing 12th
✓ 215.13: See 82.72
✓ 223.41: See 84.37
✓ 238.30: This is what I had in mind for 105.89
✓ I listed some inconsistencies above which can be expected from longer files that are

hard to keep track during stepping. I would say this file suffers from repeating too

many of the same themes for its length. 106.30 would have been a nice starting point as

the song builds up from there. Watch out for long jacks as well






hi19hi19:


[5/10] [Resubmission] One For All All For One {Razihel & Virtual Riot} (Xiz)
✓ You didn't include a .sm or .dwi file. DDReam files don't work with the converter.
✓ I'll judge it anyway because I'm nice. You're welcome.
✓ Beginning is generally very solid. If you want to add a little more, there's a

noticable ton drum pattern at 16.387 etc. that could be layered.
✓ 26.836 you're layering... just the kick drum and hi-hat? So much more going on here,

and it's pretty jarring to no longer be following the melody. Making this harder is fine

difficulty wise too (compare to 72.767 for example). Not wrong, but a weak section of

the file.
✓ 44.008, 47.318 etc. the tone actually changes on the 16th after. Not a clean sound =

can be fudged, so up to you how you want it.
✓ Lots of grace notes to bends you can put here too, if you'd like. (50.008 etc.)

Absolutely a style thing, just pointing it out for you.
✓ The copy/paste is noticable here but it's okay because it's long passages and only

plays twice.
✓ 73.180 rougher on the left hand than it looks- worth considering for difficulty

curve.
✓ 83.939, 87.249, etc. the wub doesn't play here so this shouldn't make a trill

pattern. For example in the first one, [24] is much more appropriate.
✓ 84.353 different sound, shouldn't be jacking on the same finger.
✓ 83.939 & 84.560 using the same jump for the snare and the kick layering feels weird.

You're changing one or both of them based on the above suggestions, make sure they are

different. Little things add up.
✓ 104.422 this up anchor is very difficult and goes to nothing. You also repeat it,

with even harsher layering, at the end of the file.
✗ Missing white arrows around 108.974, 112.698, 116.629.
[XIZ] Half changed. Some of them I really can't hear. Added a few though.
✓ 115.387 is going to one of the repetitive echoes in this section, step them all or

don't step them. Very inconsistent as it is.
✓ So much copy/paste aaah
✓ 225.457 really bro
✓ File is long without the variation to back it up. Cutting out one repeat of each

phrase will drop it to about a nice 2:20-ish.




Silvuh:


[6.5/10] [Resubmission] One For All All For One {Razihel & Virtual Riot} (Xiz)
✓ At four minutes, this is pretty long. Many different phrases but most repeat twice,

so I was able to make a cut about 2:20 long that I can send you if you like.
✓ Looks like you fixed most of the specific issues that were mentioned, but there's

still a lot more that could be done. Sorry I didn't catch this all last time.
✓ 29.42, 35.42, 37.90s: Missing percussion notes. You do step the other instances of

this sound in this section.
✓39.56s: Missing 16th to the tom-like synth that plays on the 8ths around it.
✓ 42.35s: Could be anchored to the following jump for PR to the rough synth (same

pitch. You do this at 95.31s.)
✓ 47.93s: If you want to step continuous notes as suggested, 32nds would be good,

because they are actually 64ths. I don't mind the broken bursts, because I don't really

hear it as two constant ascending runs. What I hear is more, like, 3/64th gallops. You

should try all the options before sticking with the 48ths.
✓ 49.18s: Could be [13] so it doesn't anchor with anything around it (different

sounds/pitches).
✓ 54.56s: Could be 134 so it stays anchored to the 8ths before it (the rough synth is

the same pitch. You do this at 94.27s.)
✓ 56.00s: 34[14]234 would be more PR and would get rid of that unnecessary 8th anchor.
✓ 61.18s: This has a higher-pitched burst on top of it, so this could be stepped

differently than 47.93s.
✓ 65.11s: High synth melody does have a note here you can step.
✓ 67.18, 67.38s+2m(2): Synth doing straight 8ths repeats pitch here, so this could be

anchored.
✓ 72.56-73.18s: Something that doesn't anchor would work better. You can hear how

there's a rhythmic break at 72.76s that's filled in with a kick, so a pattern that makes

the 4th feel less like a part of the stream.
✓ 73.18-78.14s: I really like how all the kick jumps are closed and the clap jumps are

open here. Try using this for more than just this one section (it's something I like to

do for sound semblance but usually goes unnoticed.)
✓ 73.18-76.49s: Not bad, but you cooould do it without causing any three-note anchors

or one-handed minitrills like you have.
✓ 76.38s: The synth the 16ths go to doesn't stop doing 16ths here.
✓ 78.97s: Odd that you filled in all the 16ths here but not 24 measures earlier

(39.24s) The ✓ 79.49, 79.69s 16ths go to that bass you were never really stepping. Main

difference between here and earlier is that there's a high synth doing the same pitch on

each 8th, so you could complete that anchor.
✓ 80.62s+2m(4): Similarly to 72.76s, the rough synth doesn't play on the 4th, so [14],

which doesn't share a note with the 32.23 thing, would work better (also breaks up the

unnecessary long anchor). And the second instance should be [24] and so on.
✓ 92.21s: Pattern could be different so you don't have a one-handed minitrill here. The

pitches are more like 43231.
✓ 95.73s: Same as 56.00s.
✓ 100.90s: Same as 61.18s.
✓ 104.42s: This is a kick, so it should be a different jump than all the [13] snares

after it.
✓ 104.62-106.28s: The 8th anchor doesn't really go to anything, and so you can change

it up. Also, the two 16th streams aren't the same pitch, so they shouldn't be the same

steps.
✓ 104.73s: Remove this 16th for the same reason you removed the one at 105.35s.
✓ 105.87s: Should be a hand, because it's just like 105.24s. And really, 106.07s could

be a hand too if you make 106.28s a quad. It would fit. (You do this at the very end, so

it'd be fine to save the quad for last.)
✓ 108.97, 112.69s: A couple missing notes. Odd that you step one the first time and the

other the second time, which is inconsistent.
✓ 115.38s: There's not really a note here. It's just a part of the every-fourth echo

you're not stepping.
✓ 125.62s: Missing 16th to the tom-like synth.
✓ 129.25, 129.66s: If you jump the synth here, it would break the every-other-fourth

jumping this section has for some nice variety.
✓ 131.93s: The four-note yellow anchor is unnecessary.
✓ 135.04s: Jump here to the bass/kick instead of 135.25s. You don't jump the loud

melody at ✓ 138.56s. You don't want to fall into every-fourth jumping in one of the few

sections where the percussion rhythm is varied.
142.28-143.73s: Change this up a bit to break the long 8th trill.
✓ 146.83, 150.14, 153.45s: This 4th could be anchored to the previous jump because one

of the melodic synths repeats in pitch here. (And you missed the note the second time.)
✓ 147.87, 151.18, 154.49s: Doesn't share its pitch with either note around it and

shouldn't be anchored.
✗ 148.59, 148.80s+2m(3): You don't need to stop stepping the loud percussion 16ths just

because there's a new melody. These claps are new and noticeable. Also, stepping the

percussion would help differentiate the 146.00-147.25s section which doesn't have any

percussion.
[Xiz] True. However i'm trying to complement the volume with this stepping structure.
✓ 155.73s: You jumped this kick at 149.11s.
The dubstep 12th section works fine, and everything after that is nothing new, so you

can refer back to previous sections.





TC_Halogen:

[7/10] [Resubmission] One For All All For One {Razihel & Virtual Riot} (Xiz)
- submission rules stipulate the provision of a .sm file; this file had .sm and .ds, so

I looked at the .sm
✓ jump usage is acceptable with regards to layering, but the patterning could be

generally coordinated better as a whole as to not repeat the same jump for when a snare

is represented instead of a bass (correct: 44.215; incorrect: 57.456, etc)
✓ keep the hi-hats going until they're completely unfiltered in the intro, i.e. up to

36.767
✓ not a fan of the 16ths disappearing at 76.491 since they continue the progression of

the build-up into the next phrase
✓ noticeably similar patterning used in the drops give an impression of copy-paste,

even though it's not quite the same -- deviate them up a bit more
✓ PR can use some slight touching up in a number of areas
✓ file has a respectable structure