- offset is fine
- 36.532/36.568: the vocal sampling cuts at the 16th, so the two notes are ghost
- 37.727: this pattern is gross as a result of the RUR OHT (48ths at this make this a 207 BPM 32nd mini-OHT)
- 37.945/37.981: sample stops at the 4th, remove the two notes here
- 43.054/43.488/43.525: similar situation as earlier, remove as necessary
- 44.285/44.358: change these two notes to the 16th/32nd at 44.322/44.376, respectively
- 46.604: not too sure about these flams
- 48.778: I understand what this jump and subsequent jumps go to, but do you think they’re necessary given that you omit them after a single instance of stream? I think the jump to the kick is plenty after letting the stream decay for the vocal sampling
- 55.735/etc: I’m fine with the 48th bursts for the bass swells, but the swells do have different start points, so that added detail could help a bit
- 1:08.842: missing 192nd for the bass
- 1:11.387/etc: while one of the 3/64th jacks will be unavoidable as a result of your layering scheme having jumps for kicks, you can always eliminate another by changing the last note
- 1:13.561: not feeling this five arrow D anchor, given that another instance of this isn’t quite as constrained a bit later (1:20.517)
- 1:22.909: remove 16th at 1:23.017, then connect this 8th to the next 4th with 24th notes (1:22.981, 1:23.054)
- 1:23.343: jump feels a bit out of place
- 1:26.387/1:26.496: missing notes
- 1:30.517: I understand wanting to fill this in for the sound that rolls in on the back, but creating a polyrhythm for something that’s being arbitrarily filled in makes this particular spot really jarring and nowhere as smooth as it could be; you’d be better off using 32nds for this
- 1:33.452: why are these accented with jumps when other instances of accented notes aren’t? also, missing note at 1:33.343
- 1:35.517: 24ths aren’t quite right here; you can hear a fourth note sneak in immediately before the jump, meaning it’s something a bit more precise and faster
- 1:38.996: this trill is quite a jarring motion for a fading sound like this; it’s somewhat structurally counterintuitive because players will have to tense up for something relatively insignificant
- 1:48.669: missing note
- 1:51.387 to 2:03.561: the filling of 16ths here kinda highlights what might be a bit of a layering issue -- less about it being incorrect, but rather it being a bit too heavy to handle the accommodation of what it is you’re trying to do, as there are numerous other percussion notes that have to be missed as a result of the heavier accenting
- 1:55.191: jump here, but single note earlier in the phrase (1:51.713)?
- 2:07.003/etc: unnecessarily tight burst that creates a 24th minijack - it’s not a bad decision to have the bursts themselves, but the patterning is a bit overly abrasive
- 2:08.561: while I understand the jump usage that dictates both DU instances, the three arrow anchor on D is a bit less justified
- 2:12.148: sounds like this should be another instance of a repeated jump?
- 2:17.039: ghost note
- 2:31.387: yiiiiiiiiiiiiiikes on the right arrow; the complex of bursts makes sense with regards to pitch, but again - very tight on the first arrow, tight enough to where the start/end are only two frames separated, which guarantees a zero-framer somewhere
- 2:32.691: the sound that you’re using to justify the 32nd streaming terminates here to a much more finite rhythm (16th), so accent that different rhythm properly!
- 2:34.756: missing jump? or should the previous jump before this also not be a jump since there’s not a harder guitar/bass hit?
- 2:36.459/etc: these 24th/48th appear to be offset to follow the melodic notes, but those accented melody notes also fall on 16ths
- 2:38.017: missing note for bass
- 2:39.974: missing jump
- 2:41.822: with everything terminating like this aside from the synth, this pattern is quite harsh; additionally, there’s a three note anchor on the left arrow further down this jumpjack
- 2:44.104: ghost note
- 2:55.517: this is an extremely subtle sound; you’d be better off making this a smoother pattern
- 3:04.430: if this particular 48th burst is to accent the synth, it feels a bit fast given that the sound lasts basically up to the 8th note itself and doesn’t particularly cut itself off
- 3:07.691: this triple feels a bit out of place given that the rest of the section utilizes triples for the purpose of accenting snares
- 3:14.865 to 3:42.691: the concept of this structure is sensible and the accenting of the instrumentation feels reasonably accurate when slowed down; things just -feel- a bit longer than they actually are when at full speed, the sounds are noticeably shortened compared to other elements of the soundscape
- 3:16.967: this 24th minijack can be avoided by breaking up the 8th/16th minijack that comes immediately before, as the 16th is a fuller sound
- 3:48.923/3:49.793/etc: noticeably incorrect rhythm with the 24ths, which is especially more apparent/problematic when creating polyrhythmic structures
- 4:01.604/4:02.474: this is a bit too early, you’d want to start the burst on the 16th itself
- 4:03.561/4:05.300: more incorrect utilization of 24ths
- 4:10.952 to 4:34.865: very few of the guitar notes here are actually separated; they do play in two layers but a good majority of them are synchronized properly; there are a couple of pitch bends but there’s not an entire section’s worth
- 4:38.506: feels like there might be a missing note here?
- 4:45.300: why aren’t there jacks for the lower melody between the 32nds here?
- 4:48.017/etc: burst is a bit too early; listen a bit more carefully to when the sampling starts to happen
- 4:57.854: ghost note
- 5:00.735: 24ths; down to 5:01.169 (technically not entirely correct; 24ths can pass after the 4th at 5:00.952 but the rhythm is finer than that)
- 5:38.235: move to U for accenting just like you did at 5:37.800
- 5:53.126: barely anything here musically, but players are having to deal with a jarring trill very literally right at the end of the song and minimal merit for it
- this file’s got some interesting concepts, but the execution needs a bit more work