My First Manga [Archive] - FlashFlashRevolution

Chromer

12-6-2004, 07:40 PM

Ok This was something I did during Japanese 1. The drawing isn't my best because I didn't have much time to do it. Still check it out. It's called
"Watermelon Fight."

Omeganitros

12-6-2004, 08:03 PM

=O

Good, good.

Just work on the storyline and humor.

Spazzbite

12-9-2004, 07:52 AM

I like the flame effect.

PS: In frame 7, you wrote his name as "Shindji" instead of "Shinji". Ji is Shi with ten ten.

Chromer

12-11-2004, 03:43 AM

Actually I referenced Shinji from my Japanese textbook I use in school and it said Ji was Chi with ten ten. Unless the Japanese are idiots
or the Americans misprinted, I'm not sure.

Draigun

12-11-2004, 03:19 PM

I'm completely sure Ji is Shi with ten-ten... <3 for another Japanese 1 student..Though since we have block scheduleing, I'll be taking Japanese 2 after Christmas break.

That looks great, though..

jewpinthethird

12-11-2004, 07:13 PM

I'm completely sure Ji is Shi with ten-ten

You are completely correct.

Also, it is written as Ichi in romaji.

Chromer

12-13-2004, 01:02 PM

Do I smell weekly Manga strip? All in favor say yay! or Nay!

MonkeyFoo

12-31-2004, 02:25 PM

no writing here...

IceX

12-31-2004, 08:08 PM

nice style ya got there

IAMTHEEVILBEAN

12-31-2004, 08:11 PM

Next time use a ruler and better writing and it might be good.

jewpinthethird

01-2-2005, 12:20 AM

I cant tell which character is which...try mixing up their hair styles a bit...or something. Or give one an eye-patch.

Kenzya

01-7-2005, 11:28 PM

I went all the way to the corner to start reading and I was dissapointed :(

MonkeyFoo

01-12-2005, 10:28 PM

Next time, do it outside of class, maybe try some color, and set it up so that it is skinny
to fit on the webpage without scrolling sideways. For a final suggestion: use hair that
sticks up or out more. Then, use more intriguing plot. watermelons can't hold the
attention of most people.

Chromer

01-14-2005, 08:25 PM

Wow. I seriously don't need to hear anything from you, considering you just joined a few months ago.

Porgy

01-14-2005, 09:49 PM

i joined 7 days before you, can i say it sucks?

actually you just need to put more effort into your drawings. And storyline. And concept.

Chromer

01-15-2005, 11:21 PM

You people just skipped over the sentences before the actual picture didn't you? Done in class. During school. For Fun. Is that too hard to comprehend?

jewpinthethird

01-16-2005, 06:19 PM

You people just skipped over the sentences before the actual picture didn't you? Done in class. During school. For Fun. Is that too hard to comprehend?

It's called constructive criticism. They are just trying to help you out so next time, it can be better.