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Flasion: Age Of War

Chapter 1
The Land Of Sparka




It was beginning to become dark. The sun was halfway into the into the Bahamus Mountains. The village of Afroban worked peacefully prepareing dinners for their families. Children ran and played while seniors smoked their pipes and joked of times of war. Then the horn of Sparka blew as it summoned the soldiers of Sparka to prepare for war. Families cried as they said farewell to their loved ones. The soldiers marched to Sparkis where the emperor of Sparka Jewpin awaited. A war began.
In the land of Jurkai, the emperor Karfu summoned his soldiers. For him and the emperor Jewpin were going to war with the country of Spooky Kingdom, land of the unkown. Many who went there never returned. A dark place it was, covered all in shadow. The aincent Synthians lay there in there armies of trillions. Waiting.
Emperor Jewpin was the father of his fifteen year old son Emccky who would soon get the empire after his father Jewpin died. This would be Emccky's first battle ever. He was not fightened. For his secret friend Lightdarkness was beginning to feel things that were about to happen. How Emccky would very soon become emperor of Sparka.
Lightdarkness warned Emccky about his fathers doom, but Emccky was to busy thinking of his terms to listen. Thus the two countries Sparka and Jurkai sailed to the island of shadow Spooky Kingdom. There they marched upon the mountains of Death.
It was not long until the Synthians, aincent follower of Synthlight, god of Flasion would fight them.
The Jurkai and Sparkans stood at the mountain slopes. There on Mount Death was the battle that decided fates of the empire. The Synthians appeared upon the mountains in hundreds of thousands. They blew the horn of Death. These were the chaos of the goddess Synthlight. She was angry with Flasion and sent her soldiers to war. The horn of sparka blew as the Sparkies and Jurkaians lined up with there army of two hundred thousand soldiers. Emccy stood beside his father the emperor Jewpin.

"Emccky, my brave son, do not fear. You fight in my honor. My love. For the empire of Sparka. Come now, decide your fate." Said emperor Jewpin.

The army of Synthlight charged down the mountain. Emccky's heart filled with fear.
The army of Sparka and Jurkai named the alliance of Revolution screamed as they charged forth at the Synthians. Emccky's heart was now pumped as he charged to the mountain slopes and a Synthian ran right into his sword. The battle was now commenced. The armies fought. Emperor Jewpin charged and stabbed Synthians for Sparka as his friend the emperor Karfu and his army of Jurkai fought side by side. Arrows launched into the air and knocked many Synthians off the mountain ledges. The emperor Karfu shouted.

"Aim! Fire!" As hundreds of arrows shot past his head and into the Synthians.

The two armies fought as Emccky began to realize that there was no honor, no pride in killing. There was pride in victory. Death over came Emccky's fears as he saw the Synthians literally jump off the cliffs and after the Jurkais and Sparkins. The Synthians let out an in-humane scream as they sprinted fiercly at the armies. It seemed to Emccky as if there were trillions of them as they dashed towards the Sparkins and Jurkaians.

"Oh my-" Muttered a soldier when the Synthians tore right through the armies. Emccky knew it was the end, the army of Synthlight was still pouring over the mountains as far as the eye could see. Death seemed innevitible. The aincent Synthians looked like the hyroglyphic dog-pharoahs in the pyramids of Egypt. Equpied with a dual sword with acid on the ends of the blades. The blades of this weapon were some sort of transparent element indestructable and stiff. unknown to men. Emccky named it sliently to himself the God's Crystalite. Then the battle continued.
The army of Sparka narrowed down to a few hundred while the Synthians were still in trillions dashing over the mountains of Death. Although, the army of Sparka and Jurkai with their brave emperors led to victory. They won.
The sky was black although it was about morning. They had been fighting in the battle for two days.. The smoke and flames on the battlefield cleared as suprisengly something amaziong happened.
Light shined on the land of Spooky Kingdom. Only covering half of this kingdom. The mountains of Death were renamed by Karfu as the mountains of Light. Emperor Jewpin renamed the kingdom from Spooky Kingdom to Lightadarik. Nation of the free followers of Synthlight. Half covered in Light and half covered in shadow the armies soon emptied the lands of shadow and all the Synthians were killed. Except for a few. Known as the Dark Spooky's they hid in the mountains of Darkness. Until one day they swore alligance to the emperor Jewpin.
Although, all that happened did not end happily. A secret cult formed by Tokzic named secretly the NightStalkers. Killers of the night. They crept swiftly through the mountains killing Sparkins and Jurkai untill one day the emperor Jewpin of Sparka found out about the NightStalkers and decided to kill them all. This was the doom Emccky had realized that his secret friend Lightdarkness had triedto tell him about. Emccky ran after his father to save him as the emperor Jewpin entered the lair of the NightStalkers and found Tokzic, king and commander of this secret cult.

"Leave this land Tokzic or bow down to me."

"No." Replied Tokzic drawing his sword. Emperor Jewpin did the same. The two commanders began to fight. They slashed swords against each other swiftly through the halls of the mountain. Mount Shadow. Until they came upon a bridge which stood high above a vast darkness known as the Moogy pit. Emccky ran after his father in fear. He came to the bridge when he saw his father lay on the ground as blood spewed from him. Tokzic put away his sword and kicked the emperor off the bridge. Emccky cried out.

"No!" Then drew his sword and charged at Tokzic.
Tokzic grabbed Emccky by the throat and choked him as he held him above the pit of Moogy. Emccky struggled to get free. Until he kicked Tokzic in the stomach and Tokzic let go of Emccky. Emccky fell but grabbed onto the ledge of the bridge dangling above the Moogy pit. Then, the cave began to shake. A red light shined from the bottom of the pit. Emccky stood up on the bridge and stuck his sword to Tokzic's neck. Tokzic gulped. Emccky's eyes widened, then he sliced open the throat squirting blood all over Emccky's armor. Emccky cried as he pushed Tokzic off the bridge.
Then fire shot up all around this cavern room. The bridge acted as a shield from the fire. The aincent Moogy rose upon Emccky. Moogy spread his wings. Emccky glanced through the flames but could not make out what the creature was. Emccky ran. Out of the mountain. The Moogy flew up into the sky and roared an ear peircing scream. Then flew high into the sky. Then away towards Dance island. Out of sight.
Emccky ran to the base of the Sparkins and cried out to the general.

"General Tps! please! Help! The...." Then Emccky stopped knowing that his father emperor Jewpin of Sparka was ignighted in flames when they shot up in the cavern. Emccky cried as the mountains errupted. Although a baby lay in the claws of the Moogy as it flew swiftly through the sky. This baby was named Chardish. Charred with flames and ash. This baby was human as Moogy was not.

"What happened!" shouted general Tps as he ran and held Emccky.

"My father was...is dead." Emccky began to cry.

The general looked up at Mount Shadow. Then hugged Emccky. "Do not fear, emperor Emccky."
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Old 12-19-2005, 05:41 PM   #2
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I am (was) so badass.
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It's important tom me that everyone reads this. Please.
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Old 12-19-2005, 11:50 PM   #4
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You killed Jewpin. Sweet.
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Old 12-20-2005, 12:01 PM   #5
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Although a baby lay in the claws of the Moogy as it flew swiftly through the sky. This baby was named Chardish. Charred with flames and ash. This baby was human as Moogy was not.
That made me laugh.
Is this a sequel or prequel? Whichever, it seems better then the other one you wrote.

Oh yeah, and the obligatory:
wtf dude, I'm not in it?!?!?!?!?! =P
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Nice, but this will start a lot of typical problems like everyone wants to be in it and not only that they want to be the star who kicks it.

As for the story, you could make the part where chardish in moogy's claws better. Tell how he got there. Your grammer needs to be enhanced as well.
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I'm still waiting for Moogy to see this story.
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Awesome action, but you still need to work on your writing style a bit, too.
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Chapter 2
Jurkai And The Dancians




It was morning, the army of Sparka watch as their emperor Jewpin was buried into the deep thick soil. Emccky stood next to the general Tps, Sparka's first eighteen year old general. Tps took Emccky into custidy after his fathers death. Emccky would now become the emperor. The emperor Jewpin was buried and the army looked to Emccky.
It was a bright Deku morning. The fourth day of Deku month before the month Karfu. Emccky was in his room getting dressed up for the ceremony to make him the emperor. He stood afront his mirror tucking in his pants and putting on a robe of silk as he walked out of his room and down the palace hallway to the baclony. The whole kingdom stood outside and clapped as he looked out the balcony putting his arm on the railing. A gentle breeze blew against his robe. It was time.
Emccky walked down the palace halles and out the gates into the courtyard where the kingdom awaited the ceremony to begin. Emccky went up to the podium and read this script.

I, new emperor of this country swear my love and devotion to it's people,
I, Emccky swear that I will stick with thy country until my death itself comes,
I, emperor of Sparka swear to keep a fair order to the republic,
I, Emccky will never betray the poeple of Sparka,
I, emperor Emccky will keep the kingdom safe,
Forever and ever. Amen.

Then he leaned into the podium and spoke to the kingdom.

"I accept the responsibilty as new emperor of Sparka. I will protect this country in my father's honor. The republic shall remain as it was when my father emperor Jewpin was in order. Our allies the Jurkai are remaining as was. The war on Lightadarik will continue after five days of rest. Goddes be with you all."

Then the kingdom stood up and knelt on their knees to emperor Emccky. Emperor Emccky had tears coming from his eyes. Not tears of happiness, but tears of despair. He was not ready to become emperor at the age of fifteen he thought to himself. Then he raised his arms towards the sky.

"People of Sparka! I emperor Emccky swear my justice to you! For my father! Let us live in peace and prosperity!"

Then emperor Emccky stepped off the podium and walked down the aisle of kneeling people. A women looked up at him from the side. A wavy blonde hair that shined in the sunlight. He glared and then walked on to the back of the aisle where general Tps stood. Then emperor Emccky turned around and said. "Let the festivities begin!"

The entire kingdom clapped and cheered. Then got to work with setting up tents and preparing fireworks for the celebration. "Emperor Emccky, my lord It will be a pleasure to have you as our emperor. I am most honored to be in your presence but how long is this celebration going to last when it is begun?" Asked a bystander next to the emperor. "As long as the people are enjoying themselves mayor Sente. Come now celebrate!" Said emperor Emccky in a cheerful voice.
As the kingdom Sparka prepared for their celebration the kingdom Jurkai was under a council meeting amongst the Jurkaians wise men. The were to decide what to do with the recent cult formed called the DancaRevolt. Known as the Dancians and their witch doctor Malason Kikura Reynoldis. Secret witch doctor from another planet unknown to Flasion. He was the Dancian's leader. He had materials that did not belong to Flasion. Some say he is the goddess Synthlight's son. A savior to the Flasions. Sent to end the war against Lightadarik. Now half covered in light the armies would soon half to fully unite it wil Jurkai and Sparka. Sparkai was a name in mind. Nuetral the country would be belonging to both countries.
The council sat in a cirlce around emperor Karfu and his daughter Jurs, nine years of age. The old wise emperor looked around the council and looked at the caged Dancians. Then he spoke.

"Sent forth the witch doctor."

The gates of the room opened as a dark figure walked swiftly into the room. He looked up at the emperor Karfu. Then stepeed into the light. Emperor Karfu studied him. Then spoke.

"Look at your people in that cage over thar! Who are you and where are you from?"

"I am Malson Kikura Reynoldis. I am from the planet Earth in the counrty of the United States Of America. I came here a long time ago. Before emperor Jewpin was born. My friend Lightdarkness accompanied me on the journey here. He had visions of Flasions doom so I brought him here in my ship. We crash landed in Danciakus, land where I found those Dancians over there in which you enslaved you fool of an emperor. I am not your enemy, I am your friend."

"Who is Lightdarkness and where is he?" Demanded emperor Karfu.

"You wish to meet him? Hahahaha ahaahaahaaha! You wish to meet Lightdarkness future prophet of Flasion. He will see your dooms and has already found your oh emperor."

"Where is he! I demand I know!" Screamed emperor Karfu.

"Follow me emperor, to Lightadarik."

The emperor's eyes widened. "W-who are you?" Gasped emperor Karfu.

"Come to the mountain that sheds the most light and you will meet him. He was chosen by your goddess to be brought here. I brought him here. His name already suited the island he is on. Therefore he is not false." Spoke Mal.

"You liar!" Shouted emperor Karfu and drew his sword. "Council men, guards! Kill him! There is no prophet! He wants to kill me! Where no one can find me!"

The council members, old and wise drew their long swords that were enchanted with water,ice,fire,and lightening floating around them. The walked towards Mal. Mal did not move until he drew his sword and backflipped an dodged a slash from a council member. Then Mal drove his sword through the council member's neck. The old man dropped and bled. The guards ran at Mal. Mal pulled out a weapon from his robe. This weapon was short and stiff, friendly to the eye but deadly to the touch. Mal aimed at the remaining guard and then the room echoed with a bang! The guard flew back and hit the wall.

"What is this? A weapon of some sort! Jurs run to the safebunker!" Screamed emperor Karfu.
Jurs got up from her seat knocking it over and ran out a secret passage down a stair case of stone and into the safe bunker.
Mal shot two more council men dropping them with one shot each. Then he killed all fifteen of the councilmen. He pointed his the gun at emperor Karfu. Click! Mal was out of ammo. Mal drew his sword and front flipped to the front of emperor Karfu who had already drew his sword. The two began fighting. Cling! Clong! Clash! "ugh!" said emperor Karfu in exhaustion. Clash! Sling! Slash!
Then Mal became tired and front flipped to the back of the emperor and stuck his sword through the emperor Karfu's back coming out his chest. Blood did not pour from his chest until the sword was pulled out of him. Emperor Karfu weakly spoke. "Why." "You are my enemy since you have locked up earthlings in that cage over thar." Replied Mal in a low deep voice.
Emperor Karfu spoke meekly. "Please bestow mercy upon Jurs. She is my only daughter, do not kill her. Please." Then the emperor dropped to the floor from his knees. Now, Jurkai would turn to empress Jurs.
Mal unlocked the cage and free'd the Dancians, earthlings from Earth. They escaped following Mal to the docks, then stole a boat made of dragon's scales. They sailed West to Sparka. To hide in the Kilgamayan Forest. Northeast of The WereWoods. They hid deep in the forest and made a secret village in the vines. Mal went into the forest for water when he dicovered a secret small pond that allowed you to shape shift. The Dancians began to turn into all sorts of animals. Few turned into WereWolfs and ran off to The WereWoods. The Dancians pronounced Mal as their "God."

Jurs became the new empress of Jurkai. At the age of nine.
Emccky became the emperor of Sparka. At the age of fifteen.
The great past emperor Jewpin and emperor Karfu's spirits remained within.
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I like the DDR and TWG references, although I'm a tad confused. It seems to jump a little from the first chapter. What happened to Chardish?
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Prequel.

As far as i'm consirned Moogy flew away with the baby in it's grasp. The legend of this baby will be told soon. The Moogy flew to the island of Dancikus which looks like this on the map:

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Chapter 3
Chardish




The air whooshed past Moogy's face as he flew through the air. Moogy was the king of Balrogs. Resistant to fire and about one-hundred feet high. Moogy was flying to a new home in Dancikus. Dancikus became in sight from high up in the sky. Moogy swooped down and nose dived towards the valley of Evolution. Moogy swiftly dodged and flew past mountains of the valley. Chardish, didn't even cry to the jerky movements like a normal baby should. Moogy dodged a mountain and another mountain followed it but Moogy couldn't move out of the way fast enough. Moogy collided with the mountain but was going so fast at the time in the collision that Moogy went right through. His thick razor claws acted as a shield for Chardish from rubble. Moogy spotted an errupting valcano blazing with fire and flew into it. Perched in it on some molted rock and nested Chardish down in a pile of cooled rocks. Chardish began to cry. Chardish was hungry and thirsty and cried for food and water. So Moogy flew up out of the valcanoe and high into the sky.
Chardish watched fire shoot up infront of him as he laid on the pile of rocks on a ledge over a river of magma. Chardish was comforted by the chaos and closed his eye and Chardish fell asleep.
Moogy flew around the ocean Flassion until land was spotted below. Sparka. Moogy flew down towards Emcckain, city of the emperor. The citizens of Sparka were playing and celebrating for the new emperor Emccky. Children played. Old men smoked their pipes. Drunks danced atop tables. Singing. Bands. So joyous. Then a red glare shined on Emcckain. Moogy swept down and glided above Emcckain. Moogy roared. When the citizens of Sparka spotted Moogy they ran as Moogy ignited the city. People caught onfire and hurdledaround for hopeless escape.

"Emperor Emccky! Emcckain is under attack b-by a balrog!" Shouted general Tps.
Emccky's eyes glowed in fear, then he spoke. "Prepare for battle."

General Tps ran and summoned the guards and archers. Emperor Emccky followed them. Outside in the city was fire and hot magma flowing through homes and down the streets. People screamed. Moogy was right above the emperor. Moogy glanced and then dived down at the emperor. General Tps dived to Emccky and pushed him off a hill and rolled down to a smaller part of the city of Emcckain. Onfire and ruined. Except for one house. Almost in flames and almost collapsed. A women hang out the window screaming for help. It was the girl that glanced at emperor Emccky in his cremony. She screamed.
Emccky ran and jumped over the magma and flames. Then emperor Emccky dashed into the burning home and fell through the floor into the basement. Emccky struggled to find the stairs to go to the first floor but the heat made him collapse on the hot stone floor. He was about to faint when the wall next to him made a sound of crackling stone. Emccky got up to his feet and dashed to what looked like the stairs. Luckily it was. Once emperor Emccky got to the third step the wall exploded as hot lava pured and splashed fiercly into the basment. Emperor Emccky ran through the home to the stairs and ran upstairs. The magma was on the first floor now and was flowing like a flood and about to take the house down. "Help!" Screamed the girl. Emperor Emccky dashed into a room and picked the women up from her feet. The lava was pouring upsairs now and the house collapsed. Emccky put his foot on the window and jumped out onto a melted rocky street. Then ran to the hill in which he rolled down on. Dived to the gras and saved the women. Moogy looked at the emperor again when a voice next to Moogy yelled "Fire!" as a swarm of arrows flinged and stabbed Moogy everywhere. This did not draw Moggy's attention for it did not affect him at all.
Moogy flew to the hill in which emperor Emccky and the women were on and shot fire engulfing the hill in flames.
"Run!" Screamed emperor Emccky as he dove out of the way and off the hill to the Emcclain woods behind the palace. General Tps and the guards quickly followed. The city of Emcckain was destroyed. Moogy did not feel like going after them. So Moogy flew to the ground and grabbed a few dead people and two gaurds for Chardish. Then Moogy began to fly back to Dancikus.

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"All you alright ms.?" Asked emperor Emccky.
"Yes, I am fine, thank you for saving me emperor." Answered the women.

"What is your name?" Asked emperor Emccky.
"Ms. Bruttensmickky." Replied Ms.Bruttensmickkey.

"Come, we must leave. We cannot stay here emperor." Said general Tps.

The emperor and Ms.Bruttensmickky went deeper into the Emccklain woods. There was a safe haven for them there.

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The fires of the valcanoe roared as Moogy landed beside Chardish and fed him the humans. Chardish ate. Moogy flew high above the sky and roared fiercly that shook all of Flasion.

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Old 12-20-2005, 11:06 PM   #14
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Wow Moogy is awesome.

I think I'm actually going to save this on my hard drive.
Just so I can read through it slowly sometime and catch everything.

I hope everyone who quoted me realized I was joking, though. I think it would be neat to be included, but I'm not actually going to whine about this.

P.S. By Balrogs, do you mean:
The LOTR Balrog
The WC3 Balrog
Something from your imagination?
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I would assume LOTR Balrog, considering in another thread he cites Tolkein as one of his inspirations.

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More like the MS Balrog.
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LOTR Balrog basically. I wish Moogy would read this.
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Chapter 4
The Beast




Emccky walked slowly with the general, Ms Bruttensmickky, and the guards. Through the forest of Emccklain. Deep murky woods with blindingly dense fog. Vines covered the narrow path. The sound of trees whispering secrets to the wind through the night. The moon of the godess shined brightly in the sky covered with clouds.
The five of them were walking when they came upon a pit. Full of dead deer and people. It gave a fatal order to the nose.

"What is this?" Whispered emperor Emccky.

General Tps walked closer. then he tripped over a vine and screamed as he rolled into the pit making a loud crash sound. He stood up covered in blood from deer,human,squrril,raccoon, perriok, warik, and another body who was a former sevant to the empire. The general read Skikamukazi.

"H-How could this be?" Shuddered general Tps. "Who, who could of done this? Kill a great servant such as Skika?"

Suddenly a loud whoosh blew past them of wind as they heard an ear peircing roar.
General Tps looked at emperor Emccky. "Run!" Emccky did not run at first.
The five of the ran as general Tps scurried his way up along the ledge in which he fell on.

"RAARAWRAR!!" Screamed the beast out of sight.

Suddenly the beast clashed through the bushes before the pit of dead animals. It looked at Tps. Tps muttered to himself as he looked back. "The Kilgamayan."

General Tps ran and caught up with Emccky and Ms Bruttensmickky. They ran but the guards wer caught by the Kilgamayan. They both screamed and pleaded to live hoping the Kilgamayan could actually hear them. The Kilga could not care less. He ate the two guards. Biting off one head and pulled off the other as blood poured onto the murky forest floor.
The general, emperor Emccky, and Ms. Bruttensmickky ran to the palace and out of the forest. The Kilgamayan roared and walked back into the forest.
They ran into the palace and sat down. The emperor walked past them and walked off to his affairs trying to act like his father.

"Emperor! You must kill that creature!" Screamed general Tps.

Emperor Emccky walked without care.

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The forest was dark. The Kilgamayan walked and hid where no one could see it. Suddenly it began to transform into a human. The human gasped as it caught it's breath. Then looked towards the palace. Then ran into the deeper parts of the forest.
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